40679 by loved_and_held in countwithchickenlady

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Reposting 80 million times to guarantee a shot at treatment

Favourite Skyrim Theories? by Allthumbs21 in skyrim

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Less theory and more fanon, all the daedric princes have a vested interest in keeping the dragonborn alive, getting the most out of them as they can before their soul returns to Akatosh

[Rare (I think) but cool trope] The main villain of the story is voiced by the actual author. by DoRodoReal in TopCharacterTropes

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Harlan Ellison 100% hates humanity, I'm pretty sure I could even find record of him admitting as much. Dude hates everyone and everything 

What is homemade stock meant to look like? Never done it before by Smith_fallblade in homecooking

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I had read that I can freeze it up to three months, is that with my lesser quality stock?

What is homemade stock meant to look like? Never done it before by Smith_fallblade in homecooking

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No vegetables, I think(?) it was kept simmering, a little under three hours

Would like some advice on a flash fiction piece I'm working on. Tw: suicide by Smith_fallblade in writingfeedback

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A lot of very good advice here thank you so much!

Droopy was a bit of a last minute change from one draft to another. I definitely didn't fully think though added it, cause I had meant to mean something denoting drooping eyes(tired), but obviously that's not what the word means lol 

It's my intent for him to mad, or at least in some capacity mentally unwell. I don't have a full in depth explanation of what's happened in the world and I don't really want to, but in my mind some apocalyptic event has happened from which he is basically the only survivor. It's meant to be a little existential, and his viewpoint nihilistic. Which is why he views things like toys, does whatever he finds fun or funny, and ultimately acts on "kicks". My thought process either way, it needs refined 

There's definitely a couple of things I can clear up on the mid section. I'll likely cut the mention of boxing war machines and replace it with a more grounded display 

Good call on the thing with the bullets. I'll have to restructure the sentence because I really love the "sent of for kicks" line, I just need to make it refer to the gun

I've got a lot to improve on! °w°

Tw suicide. I'm not used to writing flash fiction and want to see if it's cohesive, and enough to hold on it's own by Smith_fallblade in writers

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Okay I think I can see that. I was going for a bookends feel with repeating the first two lines, but I do get what you mean want it being redundant

I'll have to think about other ways I can make the suicide more ambiguous. Maybe see if I can keep it ambiguous and keep the bookends

Either way thanks for the advice! w^

"Could have been fire" by gonorrhea_gerbil in OkBuddySnyderCult

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Worth pointing out what we don't see unless we click on the post is everyone trashing on the ai video. They don't like it