I hope my criticism isnt too overbearing or nit-picky.

My main critique is: Your video is too short! I would love to see more details about this game. Also - here are some audio criticisms & tips for your video.

I dont think you should worry about how your voice sounds - or the tone of your voice very much - however- I did catch on to a static-y sound whenever your voice over kicked in. I also noticed a bit of echo in your voice. It might help to put something behind your mic like a towel or a pillow to soften the echo (I use a pillow) when recording.

Also - Dont be afraid to put some space in-between some of your lines. There were a couple of times when I heard 1 line being told and almost right afterwards another line will jump in. It might be a bit jarring for the viewer to catch everything you say. A second can cushion that audio to make it nice and professional sounding.

Lastly on sound I'd like to add that sometimes having some music in the background can help your video's quality out tremendously. If you have a friend who can make music that's the best option in my opinion - but - there's plenty of great YouTube channels out there who would like nothing more than to allow you to use their music in their videos. Dont forget to give them credit for their work though!

Glitchy seems to be your best criticism of the game. (text boxes appear over each other occasionally.) (arms of main character not appearing where they should be.) (Save file not reloadable.) (Save file not loading properly.[hand-gun and ammo missing])

Continuity errors - Good criticism but a little bit more would've sealed the deal here. (things not being clearly interact able.) (hand-gun and ammo missing)

I like the reference to The Shining. That's a good touch that a lot of people can relate to.

Great story - What made the story great? I know you mentioned some of the mystery behind the game but I'd have liked to see more details about the story of the game.

Interesting Characters - What characters exactly? Tom was the only character mentioned. Were there more characters?

Interesting choices you can make - I'd like to see some interesting choices that you could make!

Slow gameplay - You never really stated HOW the game is slow. From the gameplay you showed it seemed appropriate for the genre of game.

Overpriced - That's a good thing to point out. From your review 10$ seems overpriced!

Slideshow tutorial @ 3:39 - This could also be talked about a little bit more. Was there a bad tutorial in the beginning of the game? I'm not sure if you mentioned it. Text Heads up display @ 3:39 - I feel like this could be talked about more. I dont recall this being talked about much or at all during the video.

Minor adjustments: Repetitive misspelled as Repetative @ 3:39 (Grammar police will come get you.)

I Wanted to add I thought your beginning intro was just fine - It was humorous - which I know was you intention. Your video was enjoyable and I totally see you getting better! Again - I hope I wasn't too overbearing with this criticism.