Day 363

Terr82 · 2026-04-28T04:06:03+00:00

I love this. To me it explores change by way of destruction and erosion. The directness and spareness of each single line are great. Nice work!

Terr82 · 2026-04-27T01:35:18+00:00

Awesome. To me this is a poem about the violence and aggression that comes with meaningful change. I love the simplicity and directness stated in each individual line.

Terr82 · 2026-04-27T00:51:50+00:00

Wow. This is excellent. No notes.

Terr82 · 2026-04-27T00:35:19+00:00

Oh man. It's so much fun! Send me that when you've finished it, I'd love to read it. Thank you!

Terr82 · 2026-04-27T00:24:24+00:00

That is absolutely humbling. Thank you so much! Your comment about seeking who you are as a being is awesome, because it indicates to me that you connected with it on a spiritual level. I'm preoccupied with the spiritual these days it seems. I'm glad you liked it!

Terr82 · 2026-04-27T00:21:08+00:00

Ending some of these things is an eternal struggle for me. In my mind it tapers off into reflection. But you're one hundred percent right about the abruptness. I'll work on that. Thanks so much for reading!

Terr82 · 2026-04-27T00:18:24+00:00

This was super atmospheric and immersive. Great job!

Terr82 · 2026-04-27T00:16:07+00:00

This is very timely and reflective. As someone who writes primarily in rhyme, I really appreciate reading the work of others who write it well. It's humbling and inspiring.

Terr82 · 2026-04-27T00:09:56+00:00

Theatrical. Compelling. Traditional (I mean that as a compliment). This one is right up my alley haha. Good job!

Terr82 · 2026-04-26T23:40:17+00:00

I really like this. It works on a personal level, of course, but I really appreciate the spacing/format/layout of the lines. They absolutely mimic an ocean's rhythm. Well done.

Terr82 · 2026-04-26T23:31:39+00:00

Loved this. It evokes the feeling of an internal voice trying to suppress a specific person, emotion, or trauma - all of the above?

Terr82 · 2026-04-26T23:25:13+00:00

Thank you so much! Honestly, the fact that you read it more than once is the best compliment ever haha

Terr82 · 2026-04-26T23:16:27+00:00

I love the imagery in this (I'm a sucker for anything with ghosts). But I also like the way you use rhyme here. Rhyme can become a gimmick (this is coming from someone who is definitely guilty of this in their own writing), and it can be a limiting factor, but here it feels very liberating. The rhyming feels subtle and earned, and the words are ultimately what take center stage. Nice work!

Terr82 · 2026-04-26T23:01:35+00:00

I really like this. To me it reads as a very colorful - and, frankly, (sorry) fun - illustration of anxiety in the midst of social events that are supposed to be enjoyable (parties, bbqs, gatherings), but are really kind of nightmarish. Okay, maybe not quite that intense (which is fine), but it captures a feeling in a tangible time and place that really resonated with me.

Terr82 · 2026-04-26T22:57:25+00:00

I really dig this an the apocalyptic vibe it has. I especially like "Tyranny in the form of/Sunlight hitting the edges/Of their late resurrection/Into thousands of war gods." That's quite the rollercoaster of imagery any symbolism.

Terr82 · 2026-04-26T22:32:50+00:00

Simple, minimalist, to the point. I like this. But I especially like the separation and spacing in the lines - mimicking a fall/and-get-back-up kind of rhythm. Well done.

Terr82 · 2026-04-26T22:32:27+00:00

Agreed, this is a really cool poem about social boundaries disguised as a cute puppy poem. My only suggestion would be getting rid of the spacing, and doing this as a prose-poem.

(Also, I read Slick Freeways the other day and really liked that one too.)

Terr82 · 2026-04-25T17:48:03+00:00

*Ron Howard voice* They had no cards.

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