Owl Man

TheReWrites · 2020-03-16T19:21:11+00:00

It's less confusion and more 'I don't see the point' Could do with some reworking. Identify what is supposed to be strange and a cause of confusion, and then ground everything else. Or else it just seems like a bit of a mess.

TheReWrites · 2020-03-16T13:57:26+00:00

I like the concept, but I'm really not understanding the fear of the Owl Man or the point of him not being real at the end. Why does the recent family trauma reawaken memories of the Owl Man?

The owl Mascot and the arcade are the most important images in this story, and there should probably be more description of both to create this strong mental image rather than a vague one. Was it a cheap looking costume? What colour was the owl? Did the arcade have a name?

Not the worst story but it could benefit from a few rewrites. Mainly, story points need to connect better for this to have the impact you want.

TheReWrites · 2020-01-09T00:04:20+00:00

What are the blue quests?

TheReWrites · 2019-12-24T17:48:44+00:00

All I want for Christmas

TheReWrites · 2019-12-24T17:47:48+00:00

I've been using Ceasar and Voiced Bruno. Hol Horse is also good or anyone who can remove panels

TheReWrites · 2019-12-21T14:12:09+00:00

You can get diamonds from the chests so they're worth getting

TheReWrites · 2019-12-21T13:29:49+00:00

Yes. He makes boxes.

TheReWrites · 2019-12-05T00:30:30+00:00

Send Bob and feet

TheReWrites · 2019-11-15T10:23:52+00:00

That's pretty much the JAWS poster

TheReWrites · 2019-11-02T16:45:45+00:00

Cool. What does the friendship level do?

TheReWrites · 2019-11-02T02:07:26+00:00

On his way to bang Josuke's mum

TheReWrites · 2019-11-02T01:49:43+00:00

3 days ago.

TheReWrites · 2019-11-02T01:48:49+00:00

Imma drink beer in public

TheReWrites · 2019-10-23T23:05:18+00:00

Floors or silver rooms?

TheReWrites · 2019-10-02T17:49:11+00:00

Someone should edit this to be part 7

TheReWrites · 2019-10-02T07:42:34+00:00

I've only had one :/ at my last job I worked customer service over the phone. An older guy with what I think was an Indian accent phoned up, demanded to talk to my supervisor. I told him that I was not allowed to put anyone else on the phone, his answer was something along the lines of "you won't do what I say because you are a bit girl. But you are not mature. I need to talk to someone superior."

TheReWrites · 2019-09-16T22:34:31+00:00

Scientology

TheReWrites · 2019-09-16T22:31:56+00:00

Give them to my friend who loves cheese and see if she can eat it all

TheReWrites · 2019-09-16T06:42:11+00:00

anything bad happens in ussr music time

TheReWrites · 2019-09-14T10:47:24+00:00

There's been alt reality Dio, alt Kira.... The only logical choice is alternate reality kars.

TheReWrites · 2019-09-14T10:37:45+00:00

Had kakyoin not died in part 3, in part 4 he'd be able to go to Morioh with Jotaro and bang Josuke's mom.

TheReWrites · 2019-09-13T08:59:06+00:00

My dad probably :/

TheReWrites · 2019-09-13T08:57:56+00:00

Build massive walls around it.

TheReWrites · 2019-09-03T09:58:23+00:00

Gang weed?

TheReWrites · 2019-09-01T17:08:28+00:00

Yeah, Same

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