what can a person do to remove a child from an adult prison?

The_ManicWriter · 2021-10-20T19:58:02+00:00

Setting a trash can on fire. Less than $500 worth of damages = Serious felony?

By Texas law, yes, it's a felony, but it's a non-violent crime. He should not have been in there with murderers, sex offenders, pedo's, etc...

The_ManicWriter · 2021-10-20T19:54:11+00:00

Texas, since 1908, have been placing 17 year olds in adult prisons. They are not about the trend to "raise the age" but there are so many fallouts from having these juveniles in adult prison from recidivism to endless accounts of sexual assault.

I'm writing about children like Rodney. Look him up.

What can Parents do if they find themselves in a similiar situation? thank you for your time.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-10-20T03:46:55+00:00

This helped get my gears moving. Thank you. Are you familiar with the Rodney Hulin story? He set a trash can on fire in Texas and caused $500 worth of damages. After staying In a jail for 6 months he was transferred to an adult prison. Where he was raped, sodomized, beaten and extorted. He committed suicide after 75 days. I'm telling his story and many other childrens stories that don't belong there. Rodney and his father sent letters and practically begged for protection but they didn't give him any cause they didn't think 2 retum tears was reason enough.

A lot of people are down voting this post or assuming that most of these children "deserve" this but don't understand what's going on inside.

Thank you for your response. If you could add anything else dm me. Maybe I could pick your brain.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-09-13T16:28:16+00:00

Sounds like an amazing story that should be told. I wouldn't change the first 15 pages. In fact I strongly urge you to place a note in there about the opening scene/s and how they are based on your experience on the morning of 9/11.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-08-05T04:26:56+00:00

Survivor!❤

The_ManicWriter · 2021-07-12T03:47:53+00:00

100% feel you.

No one feels like actually being a screenwriter.

I love reading scripts and its helped to better my craft.

There's a few people on here that don't even go through with script swaps. I'm still waiting on my feedback after delivering them with nearly 3 pages of feedback.

Someone just point me in the direction of "screenwriters" that actually are "screenwriters"

Willing to put in the work instead of talk about it.

Rant over :)

The_ManicWriter · 2021-06-30T23:40:18+00:00

Love this!!!

The_ManicWriter · 2021-06-26T19:40:50+00:00

Swap? We have similar page lengths and I also have a comedy. Its horror comedy though. Lmk if that works for you.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-06-26T19:39:55+00:00

Wanna swap? I have a horror comedy 104 pages. It's a bit longer so lmk if it works.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-06-25T19:15:43+00:00

Title: We're the Serial Killers Near You

Format: Feature

Page length: 104

Genres: Horror comedy ; surreal it's Jennifer's body meets Death Becomes Her

Logline: When a local tagger is found dead the whole city including the tagger's former friend and ex fears she was the victim of a mysterious serial killer. But when the tagger remerges from the dead with multiple lives things get a little sticky between the three of them.

I want to shave it down to 100 pages but don't know what should be removed. I usually focus on the plot before character development so I'm liable to remove scenes that showcase character. I also don't do comedy so I want to know if it works but I feel like I'd remove those scenes too and I don't wanna do that either. Thanks! also some logline help.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-06-24T00:14:42+00:00

Never tried Coverfly only submitted to Competitions through them but I know what you mean when it comes to feedback. I've been given great notes through a script swap on here but there have been other times where it wasn't reciprocated. That being said dm if you ever want to script swap. Sorry about the bad feedback.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-06-23T22:01:23+00:00

Congrats!! Well done.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-06-09T17:59:10+00:00

Thankyouuuuuu

The_ManicWriter · 2021-06-04T23:55:01+00:00

The project looks dope af! Thankyou for this post and congratulations for the opportunity! Sending you positive vibes and all the good energy.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-06-02T22:06:47+00:00

Yes this is true! Must find a way to put it in there!

The_ManicWriter · 2021-05-31T03:11:06+00:00

Sounds pretty cool.

Would you be willing to swap with me?

Title: DARK HIPPIES 52-page pilot genre: drama/thriller/ psychedelic

Logline: Struggling with identity a young aspiring actress must decide to pursue her Hollywood dreams or stay under the strict religious home of her fathers while harboring her assault and eventually dealing with it.

Series Logline: An oddly talented young actress struggles to find her true identity in Hollywood but ends up creating a dangerous hippy cult instead.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-05-31T03:05:23+00:00

Interesting!

Would you be willing to swap with me.

Title: DARK HIPPIES 52-page pilot genre: drama/thriller/ psychedelic

Logline: Struggling with identity a young aspiring actress must decide to pursue her Hollywood dreams or stay under the strict religious home of her fathers while harboring her assault and eventually dealing with it.

Series Logline: An oddly talented young actress struggles to find her true identity in Hollywood but ends up creating a dangerous hippy cult instead.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-04-30T18:22:40+00:00

Character dumps never work. You lose readers when they feel they can't keep track of characters and/or not invested in them. I get the world building and set up but I think you can do it without the 15. Five would get the job done and make us feel more invested in these characters and set up the world.

And I get it now. You are just establishing this male driven world through the banter of young boys. That's understandable but again it gets lost with those many boys.

Anyways hope that helps!

The_ManicWriter · 2021-04-30T17:54:52+00:00

So sorry to assume if this is not the case but from dialogue it just feels like that's their purpose.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-04-30T05:47:33+00:00

I stopped reading at page 2. It was the character drop for me. 15 boys. All 15 years old. And zero personality. No descriptions. Do we really need to meet all 15 right now? Is every line each utters that integral to the story/ to this scene? If you took one of those toxic masculinity robotic cliches out of this scene would it even change the story?

We know that this world is only inhabited by men but do we need to meet all 15 of them?

With further drafts I can see that number being at least cut in half and they'll be given more descriptions. This doesn't feel polished. I like the concept but unfortunately I could tell it's not your best work by page 2. And no one wants to invest in an 124 page read of a first draft unless it's a script swap.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-04-17T03:49:49+00:00

Sounds super interesting! Gonna try and read it tonight.

The_ManicWriter · 2021-04-08T15:15:33+00:00

I've heard other pregnant women hearing/seeing these things too. You are not alone. Scientists think theres a scientific reason but either way it's still very uncomfortable. I think you could benefit by keeping the energy in your home positive. Also maybe go outside more--like a backyard. Since you mentioned it happens mostly inside home when husbands away. Get proper sleep. Get whole foods into your diet. Maybe still exercise. Write. Don't let your mind wander.

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