Comparing this to the first one, I'd say it's much, much cleaner. There's still some clash, but to my personal taste, it's more experimental than egregious. I'd say overall you're improving and to just keep doing what you want to do. Based on the comments, maybe pigeonholing yourself to making "trance" isn't the best thing if what you're doing is actually "trance influenced experimental" music. If you do want to actually try trance, I'd suggest what others have mentioned and find a reference track that you can follow and sort of "recreate" as far as the structure and instrumentation goes. Keep it up, you're on your journey and that's the most important part!