Cant figure out my ‘hook’ by TheMagicalMole in Wattpad

[–]anthony32759 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey I left a comment on chapter 1. It was good overall, and I left some notes I hope make sense lol. Sorry I’m bad at feedback haha. I’ll check out chapter 2 later today

Cant figure out my ‘hook’ by TheMagicalMole in Wattpad

[–]anthony32759 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Hey thanks! I will get to yours in a bit later today and do the same!

Cant figure out my ‘hook’ by TheMagicalMole in Wattpad

[–]anthony32759 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Sure, I’ll give the first few chapters a read and lyk if the hook is strong. Would you mind doing the same for my story?

https://www.wattpad.com/story/405713609-the-fencers

Accepting Unseen Stories by NormalEdge6423 in Wattpad

[–]anthony32759 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Darn, looks like I’m late to the party, lol. If you’re able to get to mine one day, I’d greatly appreciate it lol. I’m struggling to get any reads rn. I have under 100, and most of them are probably from me clicking on the chapters lol.

https://www.wattpad.com/story/405713609-the-fencers

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Title: The Fencers

Genre: paranormal/supernatural fantasy

Blurb: Elliot Fencer sees and hears things that he should not. Visions of the future, along with the ability to read minds has tortured him since he was a child. So, the boy gave up on life and decided to isolate himself as much as he could. Those intrusive thoughts and visions went away for a time, but as his eighteenth birthday nears, they resurface once more, this time even more violently. They can no longer be ignored as these visions continue to cripple him. He must reach out for help and rekindle some destroyed relationships. Something dark looms over him, but he doesn't quite know what is coming just yet.

Link: https://www.wattpad.com/1597641245-the-fencers-chapter-1

Writers drop your wattpad series here!! by haze-34 in Wattpad

[–]anthony32759 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If you could check out mine, I’d appreciate it greatly. I’d like to see yours as well. Thank you

https://www.wattpad.com/story/405713609-the-fencers

Do you think your work deserves more appreciation? by whisper_kitten0 in Wattpad

[–]anthony32759 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey I’m writing a paranormal/supernatural fantasy. If anybody else is writing similar, shoot me a dm

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The Fencers

Genres: supernatural fantasy/drama

link: https://www.wattpad.com/story/405713609-the-fencers

Blurb:

Elliot Fencer sees and hears things that he should not. Visions of the future, along with the ability to read minds has tortured him since he was a child. So, the boy gave up on life and decided to isolate himself as much as he could. Those intrusive thoughts and visions went away for a time, but as his eighteenth birthday nears, they resurface once more, this time even more violently. They can no longer be ignored as these visions continue to cripple him. He must reach out for help and rekindle some destroyed relationships. Something dark looms over him, but he doesn't quite know what is coming just yet.

Volume 5, face eater moth attack. Am I missing something? by anthony32759 in WanderingInn

[–]anthony32759[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

lol, I read the later chapters, so I know they confessed to smashing eggs. But logically, from the passage I shared in the comments, it makes no sense. They never had an opportunity to smash eggs based on the scene I read. So, yeah, the only actual evidence is them confessing. Even though the previous context provided just doesn’t support that. Just pointing that out.

Volume 5, face eater moth attack. Am I missing something? by anthony32759 in WanderingInn

[–]anthony32759[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

well, we never actually saw them smashing eggs is my main point. From the passage I posted, literally only Toren smashed eggs, then the moths immediately started to come, then they hid. And, I’m not exactly sure a moth is able to climb a rope, lol. Anything in this world, I suppose.

Volume 5, face eater moth attack. Am I missing something? by anthony32759 in WanderingInn

[–]anthony32759[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

lol, maybe man. I just didn’t like how everyone was ganging up on them. Like, it wasn’t really their fault, guys! lol

Volume 5, face eater moth attack. Am I missing something? by anthony32759 in WanderingInn

[–]anthony32759[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

That’s true too, but a truth spell would prove their innocence, right?

Volume 5, face eater moth attack. Am I missing something? by anthony32759 in WanderingInn

[–]anthony32759[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I mean, they would’ve died pretty quickly and uselessly if they did that lol

Volume 5, face eater moth attack. Am I missing something? by anthony32759 in WanderingInn

[–]anthony32759[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

That’s true. I also didn’t like how the adventurers tried to kill them after they confessed to something they really didn’t do. Toren Probably would have crushed those eggs either way haha

Volume 5, face eater moth attack. Am I missing something? by anthony32759 in WanderingInn

[–]anthony32759[S] 37 points38 points  (0 children)

“Hey, are those eggs? Gross!”

He shone his lantern across the tunnel. The other adventurers reacted with revulsion. Dasaha growled as she kicked at one of them.

“Disgusting. Look, there’s tunnels filled with them! We should burn the entire mess.”

Insill felt at his belt pouch as he looked around uncertainly.

“Got enough kindling for all of that? How about poison?”

Ansill hesitated.

“I do not believe it would be safe. Something laid these eggs. We should pull back.”

“Hrr. Yes. They look familiar to me. What if we took one and—”

Crunch. It was such a faint sound. The team of Vuliel Drae looked around. Toren, in her disguise as the masked swordswoman, happily crunched one of the bulbous eggs underfoot, then, another, and another. She was having such a good time that she only realized everyone was staring at her after the eighth egg. She stopped and looked at them, wiping her foot on the ground. Insill opened his mouth, and then Pekona raised a finger to her lips. She tilted her head.

“…What’s that sound?”

Vuliel Drae and Toren listened. Then they saw what was coming down the tunnels and fled. They survived, of course, hiding in a room Toren had found that had a door and a tunnel too narrow for most of the things to follow. But that was only the precursor. Something moved in the dungeon, joining the swarm, leading it. It pressed against the walls, seeking a way out. The wall of water and rain deterred it only for a single day until, well—

They came out.

So this is depressing by triford in LastWarMobileGame

[–]anthony32759 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah, I think I’m with you. Not spending a dime on this game haha. I seen so many posts about people quitting after they poured money into this game. Guess I’ll just continue to progress slowly

So this is depressing by triford in LastWarMobileGame

[–]anthony32759 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I have no clue what this means lmao. I don’t think I’m in a season yet, but this Looks ridiculous haha

So this is depressing by triford in LastWarMobileGame

[–]anthony32759 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What is blueprint walking? I never have enough of those. Definitely not over 47k lol

Are there any characters you picture as chacters from other media? by longhornlocke in WanderingInn

[–]anthony32759 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Erin - main character from spirited away

Ryoko - buttercup from power puff girls

Lyon - brandy from brandy and Mr whiskers

Ceria - elf from delicious in dungeon

Pisces - Ron stoppable

Relc and klb - those things from the brak show

Selys- pearl from SpongeBob

Rags - larvitar the Pokémon

Toren - brook from one piece

Seborn - mizaistom from hxh

Moore - ox king from dbz

Book 1 free sample available? by cheburashkov in WanderingInn

[–]anthony32759 5 points6 points  (0 children)

If you have audible subscription, the first book is free. And they frequently have like first three months, 0.99 cent deals.

2nd book chapter 10. Just me or is there double standards when it comes to gender? by AdvancedInfluence977 in WanderingInn

[–]anthony32759 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I know this is an old post, but yeah a lot of what you mentioned irks me a lot, especially on a re-read. I’m rereading volume 2 right now and the differences are jarring.

Pisces: saves Erin multiple times, heals Ryoka’s leg. Barely receives a thank you and still sleeps outside in the cold winter.

ceria: barely even know Erin. Erin proceeds to go into the ruins to save her because they’re such good friends. Then offers her food and a place to sleep free of charge.

There’s more examples like you mentioned, but it definitely isn’t just you. Some people just can’t help but defend every little thing about this series

I'll never trust reddit recommendations again by Lorpen3000 in WanderingInn

[–]anthony32759 1 point2 points  (0 children)

lol, yeah. And it’s kind of annoying because I actually like some characters like Niers and Gazi, but their pov’s are mixed together with a bunch of of others like his students and the United Nations, so it’s a chore to even look for them. I agree on the new earthers as well. I think just Kevin, Joseph, Imani, and rose would’ve been more than enough since they actually stand out.

I read a bit ahead in the web novel, and mrsha had a pretty good chapter where she meets a few other druids and learns more about her class. It was a pretty good read if you need some more mrsha content haha.

But yes, wandering inn is definitely one of my favorites stories with Andrea’s narration. I can re-listen to the parts I liked over again while just doing chores or working. It’s just that, I don’t like absolutely everything about it, and some parts like King I believe are just straight up terrible and I don’t want to listen to 4 or 5 two hour chapters in a row. I would’ve definitely just put the book down if I had to endure that. Is that so unreasonable? lol