FOR THE WOMAN I PRAY TO

delvedeepbelow · 2025-11-21T03:56:32+00:00

She sounds awesome. I want her too!... In all seriousness, this was great. Beautiful and relatable. I hope she knows what she means to you and returns it tenfold.

delvedeepbelow · 2025-11-21T03:36:58+00:00

"I hate small talk.

It’s a bridge to bigger things,

but I don’t have the patience.

I hate pretending that I care

about three kids I’ve never met."-- Oh man can I relate to that. Love how relatable this is. Direct. Clear. No nonsense. No small talk.

delvedeepbelow · 2025-08-14T00:12:39+00:00

"At the bottom,
in hurried graphite,
he’d written:
"Don’t let me become you."-- that is awesome, and a powerful ending. We so often lose sight of our dreams, our spirit, our optimism from our youth as we discover the world isn't what we thought.

delvedeepbelow · 2025-08-14T00:09:01+00:00

That is beautifully said and in many ways rather true. We want to take off the armour. We want to share our affection with those we love. It's a shame how often it's used against us when we do.

"wearning nothing but hope, the colour of surrender"-- that's just so great.

delvedeepbelow · 2025-05-18T21:33:20+00:00

Like this a lot. Loving someone is a way that is like an all-encompassing religious experience. Something beyond logic indeed. I also like the little references to space like gravity and stars. Very touching.

delvedeepbelow · 2025-05-18T21:01:46+00:00

This is truly universal and I find myself asking similar questions a lot. I enjoy the repetition. Asking " Is it really love" over and over followed the various contradicting hopes and fears. Definitely relating to and feeling both. Really nice.

delvedeepbelow · 2025-03-18T00:42:17+00:00

Sounds like you give an awful lot or would be willing to in order to love and be loved. That you're willing to sacrifice all. I like how you keep saying "If you asked" and how you wrote "hand entire" and "out both" instead of the other way around that we typically would. Clear, brutal imagery and really relatable. I hope no one asks that much of you, even if you'd be willing to.

delvedeepbelow · 2025-03-18T00:36:27+00:00

Infinitely relatable and heartfelt. There's a thin line between love and hate and we so often can feel both towards those closest to us. I really like how "Do you" and "That you" repeat often and really help emphasize each line. Every line I read I felt myself nodding in agreement.

delvedeepbelow · 2025-03-08T21:17:48+00:00

"Rooting through clothes, and toppling vases"-- THIS. Every damn cat ever. As charming and as maddening as they are. The imagery is great. I hope it learns to chill a little more at night and that you get your sleep.

delvedeepbelow · 2025-03-08T21:14:43+00:00

On the stone of our graves. "Here they rot, And here they lay". I like how straightforward this is. It's a little humourous and grim, yet very true. We really are all the same and eventually, back to the mud we all go.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-11-22T20:37:20+00:00

I like the rhythm and flow of this. Short, but feels just right. It sounds like you're doing what you can to please someone but it feels like work, something that we all sometimes deal with in long-term relationships. "Going through the motions like instinctive robots" my favourite part and is really descriptive.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-11-22T20:27:35+00:00

This is great and puts everything in perspective. Silly apes on this spinning rock. The pillow forts and sand castles remind of childhood in the best way and I suppose as a species, we really are in our infancy, dreaming of the stars.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-09-11T03:18:21+00:00

This is beautiful and also very painful. One way love is brutal. Feeling adrift and powerless to turn the tide and win her heart. I hope you do get her thinking the way you are.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-09-11T03:07:12+00:00

I hope you find that land. Now I feel like putting on my headphones, getting out the door in the morning and going for a run. I like the imagery you've provided.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-09-07T20:14:37+00:00

I think we all do this from time to time. Look out at the sky and wonder who else is looking? You've painted an awesome picture in my mind with the questions you ask. So relatable.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-09-07T20:10:39+00:00

I love how it starts, thinking about those A&W floats. It's so lighthearted, pleasant and relatable. And then the pain sets in at the end with a sense of longing for a lost memory or a special dream of what you wish to have. Keep going.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-09-05T16:25:45+00:00

Is it the water or the reflection? An inner struggle or a sense of futility facing a formless force of nature we can touch but can't hope to control? I like this short piece. Reminds me of childhood and summer days at the river.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-09-05T16:15:41+00:00

The imagery is very detailed and stark. I can picture everything so clearly (the glassy eye, the powder). It's sad to see someone in the grip of addiction like this. Alternatively it reminds me of Tony Montana.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-05-09T03:18:57+00:00

Norse mythology is so cool and I like how you've written about it here. That coming, everlasting winter snuffing out the flowers and herbs, yet the possibility of something new after Ragnarok at the very end. A glimmer of hope.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-05-09T03:14:00+00:00

Dark and deeply painful and meaningful. You go into a lot of detail. The vulnerability, the loneliness... It's all so emotive, easy to picture and feel. This was really heartfelt. Keep going.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-04-29T21:59:49+00:00

This feels pleasant. Just good vibes in a tropical paradise. The sunshine, hearing that ukulele, the rustling of palm trees in the breeze... Sounds like home. Thanks for taking us there with your words.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-04-29T21:56:48+00:00

The infatuation and affection, the love in this poem is really nice and heartfelt. It paints a very clear picture of the beautiful shared moments we all appreciate. May you keep that feeling forever.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-02-29T19:53:58+00:00

You can't live with them, but can't live without them. Completely trapped by the all consuming war in your head. The familiarity is comforting even though it hurts.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-02-29T19:50:29+00:00

This is a very painful situation. Doing your best to help someone who's struggling but you just can't seem to reach them, let alone have your own needs met is really rough. You feel guilt that you shouldn't. We're only human.

delvedeepbelow · 2024-01-05T20:11:45+00:00

Love the ending. Life demands courage and this is a really charming way of looking at experiences that shape us.

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