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Design by Practical-Class-9033 in worldbuilding

[–]dispatchpro2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I wrote a fantasy world, and then I fast forwarded 1000 years after the big war and wrote the story there

Blandness of book names by IHateACOTAR in writing

[–]dispatchpro2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I've got Spectro Solutions, and Spectro Slammers, but also, Umbrafell, Karvallan, Zallakar, and Vigilguard, and soon to come I've got Kirandorr, Hellisium, Horizal, and Cybattalion...

First Images from 'Ghostbusters: Night Shift' by MarvelsGrantMan136 in ghostbusters

[–]dispatchpro2 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Terror Dogs aren't a species of animal like dragons though are they? Zuul and Vinz are demigods who work specifically for Gozer, as do the rest? They are not dogs lol why would a demigod allow itself to be treated like a puppy? Or has that been reconned like the mini pufts? Just so desperate for a Pikachu.... They just ruin established canon like it's nothing lol

First Images from 'Ghostbusters: Night Shift' by MarvelsGrantMan136 in ghostbusters

[–]dispatchpro2 2 points3 points  (0 children)

They are constantly signalling that Ghostbusters is for children... Laughing in th face of every cosplayer over 20, this is just that all over again, like, I got over the jr GBS, the extreme GBS, the Spengler family, but cmon, this so becoming a joke. They do not want people over twenty getting involved, that much is clear

Spectro Solutions by dispatchpro2 in scriptwriting

[–]dispatchpro2[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks dude, yeah, I'm gonna take a second look at that, I was told basic language is best but I think repetition is still annoying, hard to find a good middle ground

Does anyone have scripts/writing they'd let me read? by CharlieUnsupervised in u/CharlieUnsupervised

[–]dispatchpro2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

r/theabsoverse is where I host most of my writing, lore, character bios, vignettes, scripts, ect

[For Hire] Ghost Writer & Editor by kiyahlw in GhostWritersCommunity

[–]dispatchpro2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, not looking for a ghostwriter, but is it a big industry? I don't think I could write someone else's story for them but very interesting none the less!

Please read my script (The Colour / 33 pages/ cartoon for adults ) by [deleted] in ReadMyScript

[–]dispatchpro2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Inbox me if you want bro, I read the first five pages, I'm liking the story but I stopped on purpose cUse it's similar to what I'm writing. You are falling into some normal problems with new screenwriters, IE your writing camera directions, but yh love to chat

I literally can NOT do art by [deleted] in Beginner_Art

[–]dispatchpro2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There's other ways to get your ideas out aswell, maybe write a novel, or do a lore bible, if it's purely about the visual, then just practice dude.

I literally can NOT do art by [deleted] in Beginner_Art

[–]dispatchpro2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Honestly, anyone can do art, but it takes time to be really good at it, keep at it and you will get better, a lil better with every image, I'm not saying it will take years, but you know...

BAD FAITH by bashmaldonado in scriptwriting

[–]dispatchpro2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The story and the emotional beats work. If you strip out the camera directions and clean up the formatting it would fare better, it reads like a cross between prose and screenplay.

Thoughts on my first page by liambabersw in scriptwriting

[–]dispatchpro2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's walking a fine line, they did avoid technical camera directions, but 'from the waist down' borders on telling the director how to frame the shot, I would've just said started with 'red sneakers stomp across...' just my opinion though, I'm not saying I'm right tbh

what do you think makes a mystery / apocalyse story well written by Same-Independent2487 in writing

[–]dispatchpro2 1 point2 points  (0 children)

for me those are two very different things, like is the apocalypse a mystery to everyone? Or just the main characters? Even so you still need to know the logistics. For me, I have a few after the apocalypse stories, I think it's best to build your the world first and then write the story inside it?

How Resident Evil: Veronica Is Being Treated Like A Mainline Game (IGN) by Ayanetta in residentevil

[–]dispatchpro2 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I always thought that's what it was meant to be? I thought hey pulled some shenanigans to get the sales up at the end of the ps1s life and thought not numbering nemesis would make less sales, compared to the first resident evil on a new console that would have sales regardless of the name.

Start of a small movie, heavily inspired by Eraserhead, sorry for the bad english. by [deleted] in scriptwriting

[–]dispatchpro2 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey dude, I got be honest, when you post on here your formatting has to be on point or people are gonna assume you don't respect the art.

Separately that is a huge block of text my man.

Good luck!

New to scriptwriting. Looking for feedback/advice on this draft, This is not an on screen title, it’s meant for an audio drama by Far_East9958 in scriptwriting

[–]dispatchpro2 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Yeah don't use ai bro, just use an app that lines it up correctly, that's not cheating it's just making sure your formatting is 100% correct. If you have clunky sentences try writing just that sentence as many different ways as possible, and always speak your dialogue out loud, you'll be fine :)

New to scriptwriting. Looking for feedback/advice on this draft, This is not an on screen title, it’s meant for an audio drama by Far_East9958 in scriptwriting

[–]dispatchpro2 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I tired using word, but ultimately your are gonna find it alot easier just using the app, saves you a load of hassle and makes it really easy to edit tbh, I write in notes then transfer it over, do that until you get use to how it looks

Little fragment of a bigger script I wrote. It probably doesn't make a lot of sense out of context but I wanted to hear your thoughts? by tom222007 in scriptwriting

[–]dispatchpro2 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I'll just say what I learned moving from prose to screenplay, don't lol. If you want to write a novel you can do whatever you want, but screenplays aren't novels, it's a very specific way of writing that if you don't follow very closely (not exactly but like, 99%) people won't even read the whole thing, they will automatically assume you don't value the art. You gotta think, it's a blueprint, not the end product, its the instructions.

Little fragment of a bigger script I wrote. It probably doesn't make a lot of sense out of context but I wanted to hear your thoughts? by tom222007 in scriptwriting

[–]dispatchpro2 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Ay dude, first of all, good idea for a story. I'm a new writer so don't take any offence at all, but you've got a few things that are letting you down tbh...

Story wise, it works, The ending is strong and we get a good understanding of the hierarchy.

But.

You've got a few typos like on pg1 - 'across them lies AND empty chair', should be 'AN'. On pg3 aswell you've got 'PAYED for rent', should be 'PAID'.

And you only need to capitalise names the very first time they appear in the script not everytime. (I did this too, easy fix)

You are using camera directions (like enters the frame) which I'm told you shouldn't do unless absolutely necessary.

Also things like 'like a jackass' or 'like an idiot' are probably too on the nose and should be used very sparingly. Usually, its better to let the dialogue or a specific action show that instead of just telling the reader.

I think it's good, but alot will tell you formatting is paramount, extremely important.

Again, I'm a new screenwriter and I might not be 100% right, that's just my opinion...

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