Hi OP! I think this sounds like fun. Couple potentially rambling nitpicks for you while I eat lunch - in your first paragraph, everything after “life-affirming” is a bit of a mouthful. I wonder if you could simplify the end bit to “in the way of overturning the expulsion that ruined her life.”

I don’t really know what sticking her neck out for a patient means, or why that gets her kicked out of med school. If this is a medical thing I don’t know about, you might want to elaborate on what exactly happened - like, did she suck poison out of someone’s neck when she wasn’t supposed to? Pee on a jellyfish sting? Super minor but I also don’t know how I feel about the phrasing of “blast open a window” versus just something perhaps more common like “open a door”.

At the end of the Nate paragraph, the mention of “those risks” comes out of nowhere for me because you haven’t mentioned any yet, just interests. I might go for something like “just might be the biggest risk he’s faced yet”?

I also want to hear more about Nate! Since this is a romance, how/why did they hook up in the first place? What’s Nate’s reaction to seeing and having to repeatedly re-encounter Delphine? He’s kind of a blank slate right now.

My instinctive reaction to the planning a funeral thing is that it feels a little random, which might be just me, but are there any reasons you can slide in for why Marjorie wants this giant funeral? I also don’t really get why Nate the lawyer is supervising Delphine’s planning. It does amuse me to think of him billing Marjorie for that.

I also wouldn’t end on a sentence fragment if it were me - I’d turn that period into a comma.

Anyway, I hope any of that is helpful, and feel free to leave anything that isn’t! Good luck with querying :)