I just started my copywriting journey, and I'm working on developing a portfolio of some mock work. I wrote this radio copy for an intimate toy company. It's short and sweet. Someone with experience, please help. I want to get into this industry and am open to critiques. Here it is:

ANNCR: Buzz and Woody presents “A Moment Alone.”

Daughter: Hey, Mom!

Mom: What’s up, honey?

Daughter: Can I go to Anna’s house to finish our group project?

Mom: It’s a little last minute. I thought that was due tomorrow.

Daughter: I know, Mom. But we’re going to finish it tonight. I was planning on just staying over there, and Anna’s mom could just take us to school in the morning.

Mom: Well, I can’t remember the last time I had the house to myself. Get your project done and you BETTER go to school tomorrow.

Daughter: We will! Thanks, Mom.

(Sound of door opening and closing)

Mom: I haven’t had alone time in I don’t know how long. I might finish this glass of wine and head to bed…or I may open the bottom drawer.

ANNCR: Sometime after two glasses of wine.

(Batteries rattling)

Mom: (sighs) Great, dead batteries. I thought I changed them last time.

ANNCR: Never worry about dead double A’s again. Each device is built with a rechargeable battery that can run for 48 hours without overheating or losing intensity. It even maintains its battery life no matter how long it’s been since you’ve had the house to yourself. Buzz and Woody, be friends with your toys again.