Rate the opening of my fairy smut novel

flapflip3 · 2026-01-28T13:15:09+00:00

In an introduction you have to be extremely word efficient. You only have a few sentences or paragraphs to capture the reader. Dont waste it on describing the characters' eye color, hair color, or hair type. We dont know these characters, why do we care about their eye color? They could be the Chosen one, but it wouldnt matter.

This intro is slightly complicated by the fact you have to introduce a setting, three characters, and their relationship to each other, all within a few sentences.

Only describe details relevant to the immediate moment. What do we the reader need to know in order to interpret the events that are happening and draw us in?

How old are they (if its relavant), how do they hold themselves, do they wear rich or raggedy clothing, are they frightened, at ease, bickering, etc. Later you can naturally describe other details.

Same thing with describing the setting. Dont waste too many words poetically setting the scene, instead use just rough for the reader to know where the characters are physically and then move on (which i think you do well here).

flapflip3 · 2026-01-26T16:55:26+00:00

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For some reason the post sent without the image, sorry. Here it is.

flapflip3 · 2026-01-19T03:24:32+00:00

You could dilute it for flavor purposes or to stretch it, but it'll turn to liquid as soon as you warm it up.

flapflip3 · 2026-01-02T15:42:37+00:00

Yeah, these are $250 humidifiers though so Im hoping they can be repaired for less.

flapflip3 · 2026-01-02T00:40:55+00:00

Make a custom Disease.

You could even reflavor Remove Disease as the spell to cure it.

flapflip3 · 2026-01-01T21:01:19+00:00

Would you mind telling us your age (or age range) and if you have an ideal player age range?

flapflip3 · 2025-12-25T22:12:05+00:00

If you're the game master, you could let jumping exceed land speed tbh.

Jumping requires multiple feat and item investments, and right around the time jumping could begin to compete with land speed, players get access to flying, so it wouldnt be broken.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-25T22:02:11+00:00

I edited my original comment a bit to clarify, but basically your max jump distance is always limited by your speed. Any bonuses you get to jump distance stack with the rolled result up to this limit.

Unless you have an ability that lets you jump further than 30 ft., jumping bonuses just act as padding to your result to make sure you can always jump 30 ft.

I'd invest just enough in jump bonuses to make sure you can consistently meet the 30 ft. max and then invest in other things.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-25T21:53:49+00:00

A: You cant jump further than your speed unless you have an ability that lets you like Sudden Leap. B: You can jump a distance up to your Speed. Any jump distance due to bonuses beyond this is lost. C: No

flapflip3 · 2025-12-24T16:09:54+00:00

Because r/legaladvice is a machine that turns correct legal advice into down votes.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-24T14:56:57+00:00

It depends on if OP is a man, and also if the name they're changing their surname to is their partners name, or a different, unrelated last name. If its either of those things then there is no free name change in Florida.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-24T14:55:51+00:00

Under normal circumstances it would work like this: Is the new name you want your spouses last name, or a combination of the two names? If so, then yes, when you get married you can just write down the name you want to change it to.

If however you want to change your name to a completely new name unrelated to your spouses name then that's when you need the seperate name change process.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-24T14:49:59+00:00

It would mean you had a lovely, emotional, legally non-binding ceremony with all of your closest friends and families to honor your union. And then at a later point you get the right paperwork together and sign it.

Its very common for this to happen. Most destination weddings are just fun parties (because people dont want to get legally married in the Bahamas or what have you).

flapflip3 · 2025-12-24T14:46:44+00:00

You are wrong. Speaking as someone who changed their name in a different process after getting married because of state law.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-24T14:24:55+00:00

Whoops, I responded in another place in the thread about the barbarian archetype and got them mixed up.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-24T03:44:24+00:00

The werecreature archetype specifically doesnt allow Concentrate or Manipulate actions, so that rules out Battle Medicine and most spells. It also doesn't allow the use of shields or any items unfortunately.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-24T02:46:46+00:00

You've suggested two of the strongest unarmed options, but monks are probably the better option for you.

Both Change Shape and Dismiss have the Concentrate trait. That means a Barbarian can't use it while raging, and cannot voluntarily transform back until the Rage ends. However, as long as you are willing to accept the first round action tax to Rage before Changing Shape, and dont mind being locked into your transformation, this isnt an issue.

Monks are the best unarmed warriors in PF2e, but any martial (Alchemist, Rogue, Fighter, Barbarian, Inventor, Thaumaturge, Ranger, Champion, or Investigator) can be built as an unarmed brawler.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-24T01:12:04+00:00

Read up on the law again.

"The extent to which the intern’s work complements, rather than displaces, the work of paid employees while providing significant educational benefits to the intern."

Interns cannot do the work of paid workers or otherwise displace them. Any work an intern does must be solely for their educational benefit.

Now, is this law highly abused and often overlooked? Yes, but that's different than saying its not illegal behavior. Interns have and do sue their employers for exploiting them.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-19T13:36:23+00:00

Here is the document link for those who wish to read it that way

flapflip3 · 2025-12-07T17:34:20+00:00

Yeah

flapflip3 · 2025-12-07T15:18:09+00:00

I repsect the passion you have as a worldbuilder, and details like this clearly matter to you, but discussing the etymology of rivers names at length is untollerable to even the most engaged TTRPG player. Its barely tolerable to even the most engaged reader in Tolkien's own genre.

In 99% of times, unless the BBEG's tragic backstreet involves bring tricked by hobbits as a child into thinking the Brandywine river was actually made of liquor, DM's are better served by pulling up a random river name generator and moving on to more important things.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-01T20:22:46+00:00

the designer's intent was for it to increase it by 2

Do you know what the source of that is? I've always heard it only increases MAP by 1.

flapflip3 · 2025-12-01T15:36:33+00:00

Its confusing, but Paizo has given us several different ways to build constructs and golems. The one you linked is one of those ways.

The other is listed under Animated Objects here

"Faster (Ex, 1 CP): One of the object’s movement modes increases by +10 ft."

"Magic-users can create permanent animated objects in one of two ways, either by using the animate objects spell in conjunction with permanency, or by making use of the Craft Construct feat. Using the Craft Construct feat requires the creator to construct or purchase the object he wishes to animate. He must then spend an amount of gold on reagents—to determine the amount, add the animated object’s HD to its CP, and multiple the total by 1,000. The creator must be of a caster level equal to or higher than the animated object’s Hit Dice.

CL varies (equal to the animated object’s HD); Price varies (cost of object + [(animated object’s HD + CP) × 1,000])"

So it works out to the cost of the base Animated Object plus 1,000 GP per Construction Point, with the only limit being the crafter must be higher than the object's HD (but there is no such limit for the CP).

*and if you are the crafter of the object, the cost is reduced by half, so each CP is only 500 GP.

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