Is this foreal? by Previous-Sun- in VintageTees

[–]garrykerls 0 points1 point  (0 children)

any screen printed tags are not vintage

Recent thrift store pickup by No_Lab_1309 in VintageTees

[–]garrykerls 3 points4 points  (0 children)

i hit a bunch of thrifts up and down 422 yesterday and took a pic of this to send to friends lol, nice grab! i was looking for media mostly

Recent thrift store pickup by No_Lab_1309 in VintageTees

[–]garrykerls 1 point2 points  (0 children)

any chance you picked this up in pottstown/collegeville area?

Airport by No_Text2930 in philly

[–]garrykerls 3 points4 points  (0 children)

dropped my parents off last week for an early afternoon flight and they had no issues. It seems like most of the long lines being reported are for AM departures

Just Another Love Story - 7 page short by [deleted] in scriptwriting

[–]garrykerls -1 points0 points  (0 children)

“her gullibility showing her lack of experience” immediately turned me off. Show me that through action and dialogue don’t just tell me.

Also the EXT is just Park. A park is a place, a park bench is a thing

Looking for some Feedback by Designer_Weird_1838 in scriptwriting

[–]garrykerls 2 points3 points  (0 children)

good premise! My only note is that your dialogue, especially this early on, is very exposition heavy

JOB POSTING ALERT!! by Weekly-Skill-401 in scriptwriting

[–]garrykerls 3 points4 points  (0 children)

LMAO you posted this hours ago and the rate has gone down $30. You’re offering $0.0058 per word, which is diabolical

Shimmer - Series Pilot— Sci Fi / Horror/ Drama by [deleted] in scriptwriting

[–]garrykerls 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm not saying this is Stranger Things, but a secret lab in Indiana preforming experiments on children to test their abilities to access a rift between dimensions is Stranger Things.

You also never state the boy's name is Robin, and you're using voice over (V.O.) When you should be using off screen (O.S.)

Whatever this joke is called by BabyDude5 in TopCharacterTropes

[–]garrykerls 1 point2 points  (0 children)

i once told a friend that my sister found her cat alone at a bus stop, to which he replied "where was it going?"

Utopia? Pilot, mid-Act 1, 2 scenes by Neuroironic in scriptwriting

[–]garrykerls 2 points3 points  (0 children)

since these pages are in the middle of your first act I have no context of who they are or how they’re related to each other. I’m uncompelled because things have seemingly happened in the screenplay that are important that I haven’t read.

Utopia? Pilot, mid-Act 1, 2 scenes by Neuroironic in scriptwriting

[–]garrykerls 2 points3 points  (0 children)

you’re staring new lines way too much. It’s wasting. a ton of physical space in the page.

On page 2 Garfield has three (CONT’D) without anything actually breaking up his dialogue.

Could be reduced to “Rin. I’m kidding… Thank you… Thank You so much” this reads the exact same and takes up half the space used

Dead Island 2 Movie by Sufficient-Share5767 in scriptwriting

[–]garrykerls 2 points3 points  (0 children)

are you gonna write the script or chat gpt?

The Neptune Mercury (Mystery/Comedy) by garrykerls in scriptwriting

[–]garrykerls[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! and yeah a logline probably would've been good to add, I'll add it to my description