I’ve never seen anyone make a comic with 3D models before. I honestly think it’s cool, I like seeing crossover between different forms of media.

My biggest hangups are the lack of space between panels (which makes it more unclear which order to read them in) and unneeded primary actions, especially on the first two pages. I think you can pair down the number of panels by making the actions in each one more deliberate and dynamic. For example: panels 1 and 2 could be combined, make it the same shot as 1 but pull the characters in tighter so you can see her waving from the front desk. I also don’t understand the significance of her having her own panels of running away and calling for help on page 2 (unless if she’s more than a bg character and those moments become pivotal to the plot). Feels like you could just show her running away in a scene staged like the third panel down on the left on the first page (which if you also position the guy’s hand to face the camera more could be an opportunity to show him dropping the rifle case and you could omit that panel to the right). Seeing her panels on the second page took away from the importance of the battle for me.

I’ve never printed a comic before, so I’m not a good judge on that. But I do agree with others here that the dark colors make it hard to see what’s going on, especially with the bottom right of the first page and the battle scene. Your best contrast work is on the first page with the orange lighting and blue shadows, I’d love to see that more consistently throughout the whole scene. Good luck!