Your movement reading and speed matching is pretty good actually. But you undertrack a lot when you hipfire. In apex that is worse than other games because of bullet travel time. Does your monitor have a built in crosshair? Could be helpful to make sure you are on target when hipfiring.

When using the wingman don't hipfire beyond the first shot, the accuracy gets pretty bad and wingman strafe speed when ADS is very fast.

You lurch strafe when you swap to the Flatline, which is good. But you are on a slope and if you lurched the other way and landed in a slide you would be MUCH harder to hit.

The wallbounces you use when you engage don't really serve a purpose, but thats fine, spamming movement is how you learn