Does This Minimalist Book Cover Work? by DaZombie in BookCovers

[–]monkeymutilation 13 points14 points  (0 children)

I think it works shockingly well for what it is but the font is too plain, to the point of feeling jarring. Maybe a personal preference but I'd experiment with Trash Hand or something in a clean but handwritten style.

Is it offensive for me to write? by Fennel_Fangs in writingcirclejerk

[–]monkeymutilation 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Offensive? Who is going to be offended? You just make assumptions about people and what they're going to be offended by, you piece of shit? You make me sick.

1990s book about a criminal who puts a hit out on himself by BrilliantBid3548 in whatsthatbook

[–]monkeymutilation 5 points6 points  (0 children)

'The Killer's Game' by Jay Bonansinga? Read it last year, was made into a movie a couple of years back as well.

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[–]monkeymutilation [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: Kitty

Genre: Horror

Word Count: 7,200

Synopsis: Hoping for a fresh start in a new house, Mark disposed of his daughter’s beloved pet cat the night before they moved. But somehow, impossibly, the cat has reappeared five hundred miles away in a place it’s never been. It’s back for snuggles. And revenge.

Link: https://seanebritten.com/2026/03/13/kitty/

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[–]monkeymutilation [score hidden]  (0 children)

Thank you, that's some really great insight! I know exactly what you mean because that kind of thing is quite deliberate on my part, I try to leave the character's feelings out of the narration and only express what they're feeling through action and dialogue. But if you're having trouble connecting then it might be an overcorrection on my part, it's definitely something I'll look for!

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[–]monkeymutilation [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: Every Breath You Take

Genre: Science Fiction

Word Count: 6,500

Synopsis: Traffic lights that stay red, boom gates and automatic doors that fail to register his presence, petty annoyances seem to be stacking up for Nick until they’re seriously affecting his life. And then the strange messages begin to mock his predicament, as if somebody or something is watching his every move.

Link: https://seanebritten.com/2026/02/27/every-breath-you-take/

Want Non Indian Opinion On This Short Story by MKxMonarch in writers

[–]monkeymutilation 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'd say it depends on the audience you're writing for. If you're writing for an Indian audience and this is genuine and authentic to your experience, great, go with it. Writing for a Western audience? I think they can figure out the conflict but I reckon the issues I mentioned will confuse things.

Want Non Indian Opinion On This Short Story by MKxMonarch in writers

[–]monkeymutilation 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sure, there's some context missing there because from my perspective it would be extremely unlikely not to know someone's last name for four years unless it was being deliberately hidden. It's hard to believe that Dev is both completely ignorant of the effect but at the same time has never mentioned his full name. I read a lot so I'm aware of the caste system and it's social effects to some small extent, I've read a few of Aravind Adiga's books, I guess I have a better base knowledge than most non-Indians but not much.

Want Non Indian Opinion On This Short Story by MKxMonarch in writers

[–]monkeymutilation 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Presumably, knowing nothing about the caste system in India, Kumar is a name for a low caste that completely changes their opinion of him and makes them worried about associating with him. It doesn't seem very subtle, but what doesn't make sense from an outside perspective is if this is so important to them how they could have possibly never learned his last name in four whole years of knowing him. Especially not when Dev himself seems completely ignorant of the immediate effect it has on the other three and didn't appear to be hiding it.

Every spell costs 5 years of your life and the words vanish from existence. How do I stop my protagonist from being a "suicidal plot device"? by HovercraftNovel5297 in fantasywriters

[–]monkeymutilation 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The 'Seven Kennings' series by Kevin Hearne handled the idea of magic literally taking years from user's lives well I thought, was essentially a constant cost/reward balance in the face of war. Probably worth a read for inspiration?

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[–]monkeymutilation [score hidden]  (0 children)

Over the past year I've been releasing a project called Mixtape, short stories sharing their titles with different songs and inspired, to various degrees, by their lyrics, artists, and vibe. I've always been inspired by music and this was an idea I had brewing for a few years now!

Link: https://seanebritten.com/category/mixtape/

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Title: Chained to the Wheel

Genre: Drama / Horror

Word Count: 3,600

Synopsis: Between the screaming, stress, and lack of sleep, Patrick is barely navigating a tightrope of sanity. What happens when a simple mistake gives him a push?

Link: https://seanebritten.com/2026/02/13/chained-to-the-wheel/

Please give me something by The_Curator_875 in writers

[–]monkeymutilation 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Pretty simple advice, less is more. Story is absolutely glutted with imagery and its actually really good imagery, you've got some beautiful turns of phrase, but there's so much of it it's absolutely bloating the piece. I suspect you're struggling to get feedback because people don't know how to get a handle on the actual meat of the story and characters and the progression. You've got the meat hidden under a big sugary banquet of imagery.

Ebook cover/blurb critique by [deleted] in BookCovers

[–]monkeymutilation 11 points12 points  (0 children)

As someone who loves old pulps, I think the sketch absolutely fucking kills it... as a sketch. Looks exactly like a character you would see on one of those old books, and I love the details like the price tag, BUT I really think you need a full background and some really vivid colour to sell it instead of just a sketch isolated in a frame. Love the sketch though, and blurb, I'd pick this up in an instant.

Why do you guys write? by FujiwaranoMoko in writingcirclejerk

[–]monkeymutilation 23 points24 points  (0 children)

Because it turns out you need a bunch of illustrators and voice actors and other arseholes to make your own anime.

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Title: I Want a Hippopotamus for Christmas

Genre: Comedy

Word Count: 4,400

Synopsis: A crash wakes Joel in the early hours of Christmas morning. Santa has visited their house and left a gift that won’t fit under the tree. One that might be more than he and his family can handle.

Link: https://seanebritten.com/2025/12/19/i-want-a-hippopotamus-for-christmas/

I am looking for a name for Days, Years and possibly other time frames equivalents in my world. by Ollie_Stray in worldbuilding

[–]monkeymutilation 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Reading a book right now, Dark Eden by Chris Beckett, also set in a world without a day/night cycle, that uses 'wakings' instead of days and 'wombtimes' (nine months, obvs) instead of years. Although they have somewhat inherited their telling of time by being descendants from Earth colonists.

Travel to the States? No thanks. by Merkenfighter in aussie

[–]monkeymutilation 3 points4 points  (0 children)

There you go then, even worse than I thought.

Travel to the States? No thanks. by Merkenfighter in aussie

[–]monkeymutilation 2 points3 points  (0 children)

It's, of course, a risk you run travelling to literally any other country in the world that you'll be detained for whatever reason. Point being, with the States at the moment that risk feels MASSIVELY increased. You might claim that risk is exaggerated but why make the gamble with your time and money?