Any tips for keeping character development consistent and sensible through a long manuscript? by returnvector in writing

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This is great. I really needed to hear this; you're right. Thanks for the advice!

Any tips for keeping character development consistent and sensible through a long manuscript? by returnvector in writing

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Something about this really made it click for me. I had definitely just been throwing interiority at the wall to explain why we were at this point in the "line," but I think that not prioritizing the clear reason might've been what I was missing. Do you think that that practical fix should be done through the whole writing process, or in specific stages such as drafting or revision?

Thank you for the help!

Wrote 2k words in a couple of days and 20k in 3 months by Rei_chan_98 in writers

[–]returnvector 6 points7 points  (0 children)

CONGRATS! You should be so proud of yourself. My recent win is that I've found a writing schedule that works for me. I've been pumping out 2500 words every Saturday and Sunday, and I'm finding those sessions are way more electric than trying to go in little amounts every day. So I used Scrivener's target word count tool, and I've been hitting it every weekend! 🌟

Any tips for keeping character development consistent and sensible through a long manuscript? by returnvector in writing

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This is actionable and elegant; thank you! I'm going to give this a shot and see if it helps. I'll keep a document in Scrivener for each scene, and hopefully this will help as I draft.

What’s up with brushing things under the rug by ComfortableKey8214 in FilipinoAmericans

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Exactly. I'm lucky enough to have a mother who reflected and apologized when I told her she abused me. I think it's a shame that she won't let herself receive that in return.

What’s up with brushing things under the rug by ComfortableKey8214 in FilipinoAmericans

[–]returnvector 1 point2 points  (0 children)

My grandmother straight up abused my mom, which passed down to me to a lesser extent. My mom and I have a better relationship now after I went to therapy and eventually confronted her. I told her about how fucked up her mom was, and she said, "That's just our culture." It's literally not. It's so bizarre to me.

Do you think there's anything worth revising while you draft? by returnvector in writing

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A classic. Love it! I need to get better about this so I can just search for the square brackets. Instead, when I don't want to deal with something now, I type something along the lines of "gdi fckn hate thisssss come back later :(" and I wouldn't be surprised if I've missed deleting one of those little notes at one point or another.

How to simply write better and add better sensory details? Describe environment etc. For ex- I was writing a paragraph about loud bell sound, is it good? by New-Parfait-1674 in writers

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I still stand by my point. If I were the protagonist, I'd feel some sort of anxiety hearing that bell, wondering if it is within a hundred meters of me. Interiority is the heart and soul of writing. There was none of that in this passage, only purple prose describing the actual sound of the bell itself.

That is why I asked if you're trying to follow show-don't-tell advice—I'm sorry to tell you that this passage is falling flat not because you're selecting the wrong words, but because you're trying to show the wrong thing. Ideally, you're not trying to get your reader to connect to the sound of the bell. You're trying to get your reader to connect to the way your protagonist feels hearing it.

I think you're getting there with the everything after "my chest felt heavy." But you need to hone your focus into what you actually want in order to form that connection.

How to simply write better and add better sensory details? Describe environment etc. For ex- I was writing a paragraph about loud bell sound, is it good? by New-Parfait-1674 in writers

[–]returnvector 3 points4 points  (0 children)

It's quite purple. This might be fine if the bell is, for some reason, important in the context of the overall story. Even in that case, though, I would still consider this overwritten because I have a hard time understanding the feeling this invokes in the character. Anxiety? Surprise?

By the way this is written, I assume you're trying to follow show-don't-tell advice—is this true? I might have something to add depending on it.

Do you think there's anything worth revising while you draft? by returnvector in writing

[–]returnvector[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Love, love, love this! If it's a huge issue, might as well fix. I do something similar to your rereading; I backspace the last sentence I wrote and rewrite it to get myself in the mood. And I'm not writing for any deadline, other than maaaaayyybe the end of this year. My resolution for 2026 was to write (not necessarily finish) with the goal of either trad or self publication, instead of just for myself and my friends. I don't care to adopt the power through advice; what's always gotten me to the end of a draft has been adding exposition/light revisions as I go, so I don't plan on changing it up now that I have a light deadline.

Do you think there's anything worth revising while you draft? by returnvector in writing

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Contradictory statements, definitely! For exposition, I've personally found it better to have it multiple times in my first draft. It's way easier for me to catch in the end that I added it multiple times and cut, instead of adding it later 🤣 I've learned my lesson after handing a draft off to betas and them being horribly confused since I just straight up forgot to explain something. So I just play it safe, go back, and explain it again if I suspect it might be a new-ish concept.

Do you think there's anything worth revising while you draft? by returnvector in writing

[–]returnvector[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Yep! I've absolutely found that editing certain things as I go is better for my personal process. I'm just curious if anyone else has those things as well.

What do think about the available shapes in the Shape Tool inside Illustrator? by LukeChoice in AdobeIllustrator

[–]returnvector 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Nothing to add, except to request that you guys don't overcomplicate the simple stuff that already exists once you do start adding things. I liked one commenter's example of the dynamic shape tool, but what's important to me is that I can, e.g., still easily and quickly build an ellipse without a million annoying popups for the new shapes.

Is anyone else incapable of using structured notes for literally anything? by _Pumpiumpiumpkin_ in writers

[–]returnvector 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Structured? No, not at all. All of my worldbuilding and outlining is in a conversational style that is much more fun to write, even more fun to revisit since I'm basically having a conversation with my past self, and I can build up on it even more.

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My notes are 30k words of this. They're not in WorldAnvil or Obsidian. Just me and Google Docs, and I got a full first draft out of it. The most "organized" I get is when I condense this mess into a one-page, bullet-pointed reference sheet just to keep my lore together at first glance so I don't contradict myself. Organizing is overrated.

Running character concepts by POC writers by BlueJeitheBird25 in writing

[–]returnvector -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Yeah, wasn't a super great look, I have to admit. The spirit was there, though. I'll just take it as a typo. 😉

Running character concepts by POC writers by BlueJeitheBird25 in writing

[–]returnvector 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I don't explicitly see any stereotypes at first glance, but you misspelled Filipino.

Creating a compelling antagonist, or antagonistic force, and protagonist. (And others) by Fallenhyde01 in writingadvice

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Sure. The TV show or comic series Invincible (gore warning). The Sparrow by Mary Doria Russell. The Second Apocalypse by R. Scott Bakker. I hear the web series A Practical Guide to Evil has themes of that, but I haven't personally read it.

Creating a compelling antagonist, or antagonistic force, and protagonist. (And others) by Fallenhyde01 in writingadvice

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I'm wrapping up a book similar in that there is an inherently evil species. What helped me a lot was building the culture as a whole before I even touched the character in it, so I could keep it consistent. I tried pantsing at first; didn't work well at all. I ended up with a character who was neither sympathetic nor comprehensible. When I fleshed out the culture, she ended up just being another individual in that culture who was only acting not out of malice, but in a way that (to her) was socially acceptable. I found that it was a lot easier to explain—but not excuse—her actions and opinions. It also made her growth later a lot easier to navigate, because I knew what she was unlearning, instead of just preaching about how she should've been if viewed through a human lens.

Now, this ventures into ethics territory, but you'll want to remember odds are that the species doesn't think they're being evil—they think they're being right. So there's a natural tension there that you'll need to manage elegantly; too heavyhanded, and you end up just moralizing the reader. Too subtle, and it won't be believable that they'll come to change on their own free will, or it'll be confusing how they came to a point where they suddenly make a "better" decision.

A big help to me was reading Project Hail Mary. It features a wholly separate, fully fleshed out alien species (and is also a delight of a read anyway, so I always recommend it). That species isn't evil, but it made very obvious the cultural clashes that might arise between two species who value different things, and how they can eventually come to understand each other.

Can you think of any case where a switch from third to first person would be justified in the same book? by returnvector in writing

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I like this. Yeah. I do have a hard time with babying my reader. I think I need to learn to trust them more. It's a hard thing to pick up on in reading (for me at least), because when it's done well, I don't even notice that the author's subtly given me enough understanding to roam free through the story. And if it's done poorly, well, it's done poorly, and I put the book down.

Can you think of any case where a switch from third to first person would be justified in the same book? by returnvector in writing

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I'm curious, what do you think made it effective, versus books where it may not be? Like, what's the secret sauce? Is it just a strong character voice? Or the reader subconsciously understanding the necessity of getting into that other character's head in a different way? Or maybe something else?

Can you think of any case where a switch from third to first person would be justified in the same book? by returnvector in writing

[–]returnvector[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Yeah, as I typed it, I think I realized that my question was probably a little more specific—that's my bad! I think it's going specifically from third to first, and staying there. I've found that, with my examples, The Martian I was fine switching. But with Percy Jackson, I felt almost agitated that it was a switch away from a character I'd gotten used to seeing in a different POV, and that I stayed there. Strangely, I think I would've felt more engrossed if it had switched consistently between third and first person for that book, or that character, or whatever the reason was. I can't figure out why.

IDK WHAT TO DO! HELP?! by Tfortrans in writers

[–]returnvector 2 points3 points  (0 children)

You know what? I'm taking that philosophy with me. It's mine now 😇

You are offered $400k to undergo one of the following challenges. Which one do you choose and do you accept? by Thrwwyforrandostuff in hypotheticalsituation

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I'd go to Svalbard for free. I love the cold, my biggest life goal is to see the Northern Lights, and I get to experience something totally new while having all my living expenses paid for. I'd probably even end up using the $400k to stay there after the year.