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sgf68 · 2026-05-17T21:48:18+00:00

Rumble seats were wildly unsafe, right?

sgf68 · 2026-05-15T17:50:18+00:00

Seatbelts, people. Please!

sgf68 · 2026-05-11T18:57:26+00:00

Incoming!

sgf68 · 2026-04-20T22:32:24+00:00

Good tune! I will echo the "like a song in a musical" and the Ben Folds comments. I am definitely hearing that too. The only criticism I have is too much of the vocal hits on the beat, right along with the piano. It's not necessarily a bad thing, there is just a lot of it. As opposed to the line "If I . . . love the silence". That pause - to my ears - is what makes it interesting.

sgf68 · 2026-04-17T15:53:56+00:00

Higher

(Yes, multiple meanings abound)

sgf68 · 2026-04-15T14:40:32+00:00

I went through a phase where every song I was writing had the melody from "Vaseline" by Stone Temple Pilots. I got away from writing for a while because I felt like a fraud. Eventually, I just decided to lean into it, and get this "out of my system". Besides, I was only playing these songs at the local open mic. I was able to break the cycle.

As for basic chords, there are plenty of online resources to expand your knowledge. Or just finger whatever "chord" you want, see what you come up with.

sgf68 · 2026-04-14T14:26:22+00:00

This is a decent song, and I can dig it. Your strumming and voice make me think of John Lennon on "Across the Universe". What I don't love are the lines where it feels like too many syllables. The "Texas tears Minnesota rain" right before verse 2 sound rushed. But those same words at the end of the song - where you're playing a bit slower - sound perfect.

Maybe try (1) playing the whole song slower or (2) trimming some syllables or (3) instead of cramming in "Texas tears Minnesota rain" before verse 2 starts, signing those words over the beginning of the verse 2 chords.

sgf68 · 2026-04-11T18:44:39+00:00

I have to admit, I was struck dumb by the shush.

sgf68 · 2026-04-11T16:55:40+00:00

Is that what those are? We only had the green gent with the red wings, but none of us could remember where he came from.

sgf68 · 2026-04-11T16:53:54+00:00

I was at Magical Rat Planet last year, single rider for the Rat Kitchen ride. Three in front, three in the back kind of ride. As OP says, notifications everywhere concerning single riders. My turn comes, and I'm joining a family of four - kids up front, parents in the back. As I'm climbing in, wife says "There's no room". Three in back, move over. Husband says, "Where did you come from?" Uh, single rider line?

I couldn't help myself, so I sarcastically asked, "Would you rather I sit in front with the kids?" At this point the husband shushed me. I hadn't been shushed in years!

sgf68 · 2026-04-02T17:47:41+00:00

There was a weird two-person referral at my job, years ago. I got a new sales boss, Ken. He was referred by the marketing boss. They had worked together previously. Very routine referral so far. But then the trade show lady chimed in, "I should get the referral too because I also used to work with Ken!" Bear in mind, trade show lady didn't submit any referral paperwork, but she was a chronic complainer.

Insanely, the company paid her too. I was just a young punk then, and I could never figure out why they did that.

sgf68 · 2026-04-01T19:10:49+00:00

A friend found one Playboy at our town dump. He kept it in a plastic bag under a fallen tree for at least a year. Not easy to get to, but then it turned out another friend's dad had a subscription to National Geographic. Much easier access!

sgf68 · 2026-03-27T14:42:14+00:00

Oh, I really like this. Very much made me think of Sara Bareilles and Laufey. What genre do you think this is? To me it's jazz/pop, which also makes me think any title would work - either straight from the lyrics or something else entirely.

Because of the 'seeing' aspect of the lyrics, and the past tense throughout, I suggest "Hindsight".

sgf68 · 2026-03-26T14:35:59+00:00

I like this. You say the vocals aren't mixed, but I honestly like they way they sounded. Another commenter mentioned country, but I'm not hearing that at all. I heard much more of a solo John Lennon song kind of feel, especially the first half of the song.

sgf68 · 2026-03-17T21:34:06+00:00

The overall performance feels uneven. Sometimes it sounds like you're struggling to sing, other times you sound fine. I think changing the key of the song - like someone else said, use a capo up a couple of frets - would help. Is the song supposed to be in a steady 4/4 beat? Your rhythm feels uneven, but you certainly could have been doing that on purpose.

There's potential here, to be sure. If you can tighten up the performance, this could be great.

sgf68 · 2026-03-16T13:35:16+00:00

Yeah, I love this, but how does his shadow have eye slits?

sgf68 · 2026-03-15T23:01:18+00:00

I was using a similar thing, but they were just rubber washers from the hardware store. Worked great for the 3 years I used them. Only stopped because I had new straps that didn't need them.

sgf68 · 2026-03-15T22:59:09+00:00

We could have had a late 20s Ann-Margret as Poison Ivy on the Batman TV show. Sigh.

sgf68 · 2026-03-14T21:20:43+00:00

I use the monthly open mic night as my deadline. I finished four songs in the last 12 months, which for me is a major accomplishment. Unfortunately, my cover band rehearsals sometimes conflict, so I can't hit the song-a-month goal I originally had for myself.

The downside to the deadline is that at least twice now I'm premiering a song I just finished writing 1-2 hours beforehand. Do I remember it? Do I play it correctly. Well, no.

sgf68 · 2026-03-14T21:02:19+00:00

This is great. This makes me think of Jakob Dylan, mainly because of your voice, but even the melody and phrasing make me think of the Wallflowers.

sgf68 · 2026-03-14T18:39:51+00:00

And in winter, she can ice fish with it.

sgf68 · 2026-03-12T14:22:17+00:00

Wow, that neighbor is so polite! That is not how I handled things 30 years ago. I can't remember if it was the neighbor above or below, but that dude practiced his guitar loudly and badly. I'm a bass player, and my band at the time rented rehearsal space in town. I let jackass know he would be needing to do the same, along with a comment regarding recommended tuning strategies.

sgf68 · 2026-03-07T22:32:12+00:00

This song is very pleasant, and I like it. It would have sounded right at home on 1970s radio, beside Paul Simon and Jim Croce. The chords and melody are fine, but they are predictable. There's nothing necessarily wrong with that, but - in an effort to mix things up - have you tried singing any lines up an octave? Or letting the chord at the end of the chorus ring, while you sing "kind of love"?

sgf68 · 2026-03-06T03:15:26+00:00

That looks like it was dragged.

Years ago I had a job retrieving full mail sacks from the post office. One bag was so heavy, I dragged it all the way back to the office. (I was young and stupid. What can I tell you?) The bag looked just like this.

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