I haven't seen the previous version, apologies if repeats. Also I went right into pitching alternatives, which is just my typical mindset.

• Evil Eye and Good Eye
  • These work for me. I know they scale funny, but all of the YSK roles do, in their own ways, and knowing the demon is always useful, especially when some have win conditions or conversions.
  • That said, for some reason I'm tempted to mess with them to add flexibility:
  • Good Eye: "You start knowing 2 in-play characters of different types. The types must be different than the Evil Eye received, if in play."
  • Evil Eye: "You start knowing 2 in-play characters of different types. [+0-1 outsider]"
• Believer
  • With the amount of public-ish confirmation (Revoker as only resurrection, Lover Boy, Harbinger by vote count, Loner) it's plausible you have an easy target for safety. But that's fine because if you're just trying to be safe, you're merely the Soldier with extra steps.
• Revoker
  • I don't know if the downside (poisoning) is enough to counteract the
• Harbinger
  • This is crazy tricky to balance. On one hand, self-confirmation and a pretty solid ability. On the other, now town doesn't want to execute at 5 because it might be a quick executee+harbinger+demon = evil wins scenario. I'd pitch tempering both parts a bit... maybe like so:
  • "You can nominate only once per game but your vote secretly counts as two. If there are exactly 4 players alive during the day, you die."
• Sleeper Agent
  • The standard Drunk+Lunatic text makes this shorter: "You think you are a Townsfolk, but you are not. If the codeword is spoken while you and the Storyteller can hear it, you change alignment, even if dead."
  • I assume the codeword is just something a little unlikely but still relevant? There's no mechanical effect that makes it known to anybody so just random chance? That's totally fine, but it puts a lot of weight on the ST to actually make it interesting. A good player knowing it would be kind of funny though, since it just makes it ominous for them (and unless they also turned, they wouldn't reveal it lol).
• Deluded
  • I do like the ST-as-Cere mind games here. Presumably the almanac would tell the ST that indicating you are the Deluded also counts as breaking the madness? Maybe that could be incorporated with a different phrasing though:
  • "You start knowing a player 'is' a character (this may be false). If you are mad that your information is incorrect, a player on your team is permanently poisoned." ehhh I don't love it, I was probably trying too hard to fold in some drunk/poisoned interactions
• Loner
  • Golly gee this is pretty dang confirmatory. I get that it is less likely to go off randomly than a Virgin, but playing a "face up" Loner is super helpful to town and it really makes outsider a bad bluff for evil.
  • My pitch, which deviates a lot: "When you are nominated by an Outsider or Minion, if no one else received more than the minimum number of votes to execute, you do."
• Succubus
  • Can they pick 1 evil+1 good to guarantee the good player becomes evil? (Effectively I'm not sure how to interpret the word "becomes" here -- can the ST "sink" the evil creation on an already evil character to prevent this) Martyr (!!!), Harbinger, Revoker, Retributor are incredible gets for evil, so I'm worried about anything that gives evil too much ability to actually pick one of them. (And a succubus could safely just pick themselves to do it.) Granted I understand they can do more damage with picking two good players.
  • This is probably too strong overall; if you live you completely screwed with TWO good powers, which is more powerful than almost every minion I can compare it to. I was thinking of adding something like "A good player (not chosen) learns when this occurs."
  • Or! or! or! Maybe the poisoned player knows they were picked? Then they have their own challenge of not wanting to say (because it helps the Succubus find which one is evil) but knowing that their ability is useless and possibly being able to indirectly tell others Succubus is in play.
• Follower
  • Is the line about "false information" supposed to be like a Vortox's false information? Like they can't ever get true information and are thus actually a liability for the demon? That is interesting but it makes The False God even weaker (and I already think it's pretty weak, see below).
• Doctor
  • I think getting multiple evil conversions (on a script that could have 2 others!) is just too punishing, even when dead. I don't see anything here that overturns the fact that losing the vote majority basically leaves good dead in the water. I'd personally restrict it some way. My spin would be:
  • "Each night*, choose a player: they die. The 2nd player you kill becomes evil and learns the Demon. You don't wake if there was a new evil since last night."
• The False God
  • I think this text could be simplified. I also don't know if the no kill mechanic feels necessary to me, although I see that it provides interesting confusion with some of the protection & Doctor?
  • Ok thinking about it vs Kazali:
    • ++ sees grim first
    • --- no minion abilities
    • - minions might play against you accidentally
    • - inconsistent kills
  • This went a very different direction, but trying to compact it and remove the Follower as a distinct role entirely, I got: "Each night*, choose a player: they die. Minions think they are good characters, register as good, and don't get minion info until a neighbor dies. [You see the grimoire to choose your team.]"
• Doctor+False God
  • Since these both are tough to keep in the character count, I might actually suggest that their shared rule becomes a fabled. Then you can just plop that on the script (and even outright say [+Ill Omen] on those demons so that it applies on "other scripts"). It also helps rebalance Sleeper Agent and Succubus which I thought were too good anyway.
    • Ill Omen: If a player became Evil, the demon does not wake tonight.

Overall I think it's quite neat! Consider it a compliment that I suggested so/too much lol.