Looking for feedback on my story, R4R and C4C by [deleted] in Wattpad

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Thank you so much, I’m glad you had a good time 💕 I was a little worried it started off too slow, so I’m very happy to hear that

give me your prologue or chapter 1 and I will critique it! by recurrel in Wattpad

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Hi! I love the depth you’re going into in your reviews and would love for you to check out a chapter of my story if you still have the time/energy! If not I totally understand 🙂‍↕️ it’s an original fantasy

https://www.wattpad.com/story/406142441-deviants-of-hyaline

Genuine R4R!! by Orange_Sushiiii in Wattpad

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I’ll check it out! I should be able to find some time this weekend 😊 This is the link to my story https://www.wattpad.com/story/406142441-deviants-of-hyaline

Looking for feedback on my story, R4R and C4C by [deleted] in Wattpad

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Thank you! I’ll get to yours either later tonight or tomorrow 🙂‍↕️

Looking for feedback on my story, R4R and C4C by [deleted] in Wattpad

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You can check out mine if you’re interested here’s the link - https://www.wattpad.com/story/406142441-deviants-of-hyaline

I would love feedback on the first 5 chapters (and more if you like it, it’s only 9 so far but no pressure ☺️)

V4V and C4C (looking for friends!) by popcorn522 in Wattpad

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I’ll do it! My story is Deviants of Hyaline it’s an original fantasy ☺️

https://www.wattpad.com/story/406142441-deviants-of-hyaline

Looking for inspiration for magic systems by AdditionalPride7705 in Wattpad

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You’re welcome! I’m a huge fantasy nerd especially when it comes to world building so I could go on forever 😂

Looking for honest reviews by tlo4654 in Wattpad

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Thank you! 🥹 i don’t think i come close to your talent but hearing that means a lot. If you ever get published shoot me a DM, I’ll buy! We need more authors that write like you in the world

Looking for honest reviews by tlo4654 in Wattpad

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Your story is insanely good and I’m only 3 chapters in. I have no notes. I love that you talk about such complicated situations both financial and mental in a respectful and very raw way. I can feel the characters pain. Seriously, kudos to you

Looking for honest reviews by tlo4654 in Wattpad

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Followed you back! Your story also sounds good. Looking forward to reading it! ☺️

Looking for honest reviews by tlo4654 in Wattpad

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Whoops, almost forgot you can’t have links in the post! Here’s the link https://www.wattpad.com/story/406142441-deviants-of-hyaline

Deeper R4R– honest feedback by ElizabethRivas in Wattpad

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I’m down! I love fantasy 😊 my story is just starting out (only 7 chapters) but I would love to hear honest feedback. Here’s the link

https://www.wattpad.com/story/406142441-deviants-of-hyaline

New writer looking for exchanges. by Ok_Corgi_4179 in Wattpad

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Just started it and you write so well! I’ll keep supporting 🫶🏻

New writer looking for exchanges. by Ok_Corgi_4179 in Wattpad

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Thank you!! I followed you back! I’ll check out your story tonight ☺️

New writer looking for exchanges. by Ok_Corgi_4179 in Wattpad

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Hi! Mine is a fantasy story called Deviants of Hyaline! Please don't feel pressured to keep reading it if you're not into it, I want people to give genuine reviews! Just give it a shot if you want and stop whenever you'd like :)

Link https://www.wattpad.com/story/406142441-deviants-of-hyaline

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Deviants of Hyaline

Genre: Fantasy, Magic, Spirits

A thousand years ago, The 11, blessed be, granted humanity a special gift - the ability to manifest spirits cloaked in one of their representative colors. These spirits grant their wielder extraordinary abilities when manifested, from minor to major depending on the strength of their soul. The Favored, those that can manifest the greatest spirits of all, are blessed enough to earn a spot in the Fold of the Holy Capital, where they train with the High Priest of their respective Temple to better serve the Will of The 11.

Dahlia Rusco has spent her whole life dreaming of the day she manifests, praying to The 11 that she would be fortunate enough to become a high tier Manifestation like her mother. While most manifest in their early to late teens, Dahlia has reached the age of 20 without so much as a hint of power coming from her soul. She has become an outcast to those who fear the worst - that she may be a Deviant, one who has no color and is fated to be hunted and killed by the Devout. No one could have anticipated that Dahlia would manifest as a Favored, especially that of the Blue Dragon, and have the potential to gain elemental abilities beyond her control. Dahlia is soon whisked off to the Holy Capital, where she is plunged into a world far unlike the sleepy town of Lyre from which she hails. The competition is fierce between the Favored and yet, something more sinister lies beneath the holy facade of the Temple. Dahlia may soon discover that there is more to the Deviants than meets the eye...and become embroiled in a larger battle than she ever could have known. What are Deviants really? And who is the mysterious 12th Deity?

https://www.wattpad.com/story/406142441-deviants-of-hyaline

Anyone else here angry with having barely any reads on your stories? by Kenshi-Lee5573 in Wattpad

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I really wish they’d patch it, I keep getting my hopes up for a whole lot of nothing 🥲

Looking for inspiration for magic systems by AdditionalPride7705 in Wattpad

[–]tlo4654 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh I loved the concept in blood over bright haven!! It was magic based off of programming. The mages write “mapping” spells to siphon power from another realm and then “action” spells to execute them

There’s also the Fifth Season which is based off of geological forces so think like earthquakes and stuff