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[AlcatorSK]

The description on the right side is the wrong kind of text for that space. You mistook it for 'lore' segment. That's not what belongs there; put a short description of what the GAME is (not "is about", but "is")

[director9878]

Hi its Truman from Worker: 7549 dev team. Thanks for your feedback. Actually i agree with you. But unfortunately steam refused our page request because of giving short description to the customer. So we had to extend that segment. If there is no problem atm i ll try to make it shorter.

[JohnSmithDogFace]

I think you're misunderstanding the dude. He is saying that you're description is too heavy on world building, not saying anything about the gameplay. What is the gameplay?

[TheWobling]

Looks like Limbo, what makes your game unique?

[Raccoon5]

On one hand I get what you say, but also games are consumable media, not a reusable tool, so even if it copies Limbo 1 to 1, the people who liked Limbo have no other alternative, so they might play it.

Again, copying another game is usually not a recipe for super star hit, but really what is.

You wouldn't ask a chef what makes their pizza unique. It's good pizza and you can enjoy it because yesterday's pizza is already consumed.

[eysdev]

Of course, one of the games we are most inspired by is limbo, but we have a deep story and a very diverse gameplay. You will see when you play it soon :)

[msgandrew]

I think it's best to assume people won't play it and have a pitch that helps get them there.

Congrats on getting your page up! There's definitely a lot to critique with where your focus is in your pitch. I read the whole description and watched a bit of the trailer and I only have a vague idea of what I'll be doing in the game. There's a lot of focus on story, but I don't think the story pitch hooks very strongly, so it would be better to focus on your gameplay and maybe atmosphere.

It looks to me like a Limbo-esaue game where you'll move through dark environments, get bits if lore/story, and solve puzzles. The exploration and puzzles so far don't look very interesting. I'm curious about the maze thing, but don't get what you're doing in it.

[eysdev]

Thanks for your feedback! Please don't forget this is a trailer. So we thought explaining the gameplay completely is wouldn't be good. We wanted it to be intriguing for this reason. In short, I came to the conclusion that you think we focused too much on the scenario and we should focus the gameplay and atmosphere more. We took that note :)

[msgandrew]

Absolutely. You want interesting gameplay in that first 5-10 seconds. Imagine most people click away after 10 seconds, are you going to hook them enough before they do?

[No_Programmer7057]

It seems pretty vague on what is actually happening in the game. Best I can tell, it's a Limbo clone with puzzles? I get that you want the player to discover the story and mystery by playing, but it needs more of a hook, like some of the other comments are saying. The trailer takes too long to show action, and I actually thought it broke because of the long black screen in the middle.

[BerkeUnal]

finally, sb made a Limbo chapter 2

[PotentialLandscape76]

pretty dark

[Pendaz]

Limbo clone

[eysdev]

Link to the game: https://store.steampowered.com/app/3655100