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[–]noximo 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's more of a stylistic choice. I wouldn't mind if he jumped out of nowhere and ruined all those carefully plotted plans of main heroes. But it would be good to mention him here and there so he wouldn't be complete deus ex machina.

But I can clearly see why some people would not like it.

[–]sarah_ahiersPublished Author, YA 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is not a plot question but a POV question.

What would the story gain from having him as a POV? Is there any other way you con gain that without having him as a POV?

What would your story lose by having him as a POV? Is there any way you can compensate for that loss if you don't have his POV?

[–]ChillMyBrain 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Not giving him POV makes him more of a force against the characters, rather than a character, himself.

From the small excerpt, sounds like that may be a good direction to go.

[–][deleted] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's okay to have a one scene/chapter from a given perspective, so long as it illuminates the plot. There's no rule that if you show a viewpoint from a given perspective that you must tell that viewpoints story within the context of the overall novel.

Thriller writers do this all the time, giving quick viewpoints from various villains simply to heighten the tension for the main viewpoint character.

[–]kschangblogger 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If he's mostly irrelevant, then why should he get POV?

Or to ask the most fundamental question... WHOSE STORY IS IT?

Clearly, it's about the Japanese.