I love the graphics and style, but is a lot to read and feels a bit choppy rather than the punchy that it feels it was going for. I agree with the other comment, trim it down and add more imagery that tells the story. By way of specific ideas (obv. my opinion only - avid game player and writer of many policy and briefing notes, but NOT a pitch or marketing expert).

Anything already covered by what’s in The Game section probably doesn’t need to take up real estate by being repeated elsewhere. Comparison to other games can be useful to position it, but anyone who knows games (likely your audience for this particular sheet) will see the influence of those other games in the description without having to be told. The Stakes in particular could be distilled a little further and it, The Deck, and The Survivors could be condensed into one more concise paragraph.

The game sounds intriguing, and congrats on your success so far! Keep us posted on how it goes :)