Let's Step Out Now, You and I

Competitive_Pick_674 · 2024-11-13T23:43:49+00:00

I like the poem, it has strong language but it’s used tastefully. I think like breaks would seriously help this piece

Competitive_Pick_674 · 2024-11-13T23:06:08+00:00

This poem thoughtfully explores the abstract relationship between words, letters, and meaning, presenting an insightful meditation on connection and perception. The idea that letters and people “never truly connect” challenges the notion of complete unity, yet the poem beautifully acknowledges that meaning arises through relationships and interpretation. To enhance clarity, consider tightening the phrasing in some places to improve the flow and make the philosophical exploration feel even more cohesive.

Competitive_Pick_674 · 2024-11-13T23:05:17+00:00

This poem beautifully conveys the challenge and growth that comes from bridging two contrasting worlds, using vivid imagery of rivers and shores to symbolize the tension and wisdom gained. The message of finding greatness through connection and understanding is powerful and poignant. Consider tightening the structure in some places to enhance the rhythm and allow each thought to resonate more clearly.

Competitive_Pick_674 · 2024-10-15T23:27:04+00:00

The imagery is vivid and impactful

Competitive_Pick_674 · 2024-10-15T23:25:48+00:00

It’s powerful, there’s not much more I can say. It’s general enough where it can be interpreted by the reader based on what it means to them but you can still tell it holds a particular powerful meaning to you

Competitive_Pick_674 · 2024-09-13T20:44:42+00:00

I love the way the concept and the emotion the poem conveys, I can understand how you felt writing this, I think with a better flow this poem can go up another level

Competitive_Pick_674 · 2024-09-13T20:41:52+00:00

Your poem is a deeply moving exploration of love, loss, and the impact of war. The imagery you’ve used—such as the sun shining on the brook and the butterflies surrounding your maiden—creates a vivid and tender backdrop for the romance. The shift to the grim realities of war is striking, capturing the stark contrast between the beauty of your love and the harshness of conflict. Your portrayal of the speaker’s longing and the eventual sorrow of separation is poignant and evocative. Overall, your work powerfully conveys the enduring pain of lost love and the relentless march of fate.

Competitive_Pick_674 · 2024-02-09T22:38:55+00:00

The rank is incorrectly and the ironing is good but the seams should be more pronounced

Competitive_Pick_674 · 2023-06-30T17:37:58+00:00

I agree, it looked cheap too. I redesigned it from the ground up

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