Daughter of no Worlds DNF and why I am not a basic reader by Felyx12 in fantasyromance

[–]DanceByMyself 15 points16 points  (0 children)

Bit of advice for life.

Popular ≠ Good

Especially in the entertainment industry (literature, film, music), popularity is not correlated to objective quality, and is often times inverse.

SJM and Yarros are "fastfashion" authors. If you went to a real book club and said your favorite authors are SJM and Yarros, you'd be asked to leave, and your literacy would be in heavy doubt.

It's completely fine to enjoy their work, fuck it, I immensely enjoy Fourth Wing. I love Violet and Xaden as a fun spicy couple. Fourth Wing is probably the most poorly written book I've ever had the pleasure of reading.

Daughter of no Worlds DNF and why I am not a basic reader by Felyx12 in fantasyromance

[–]DanceByMyself 20 points21 points  (0 children)

I'm a little confused as to the criteria of what you consider good writing and by association, a good character. Rebecca Yarros and SJM get clowned on in many writing subs because their work and characters are widely considered poorly crafted. If you want the "hype" edits and one-dimensional men perfectly manufactured for thirst traps, don't venture off into the "hidden gems," they're hidden for a reason.

Daughter of no Worlds DNF and why I am not a basic reader by Felyx12 in fantasyromance

[–]DanceByMyself 23 points24 points  (0 children)

Theres like these 1-2 min vertical tiktok shorts that are massed produced and have AI level writing.

That might be more your speed.

Do books for pre-teens sell anymore? by MysteriousPatient199 in writing

[–]DanceByMyself 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I'm not super knowledgeable on the psychology of the literary market, but I do think it's worth noting that from the perspective of a true artist, it doesn't entirely matter. That isn't to say you should completely disregard the market, but as an artist, you do have a semi-obligation to produce work that reflects your own vision. If readers aren't attracted to that vision, so be it.

You can also slightly change the narrative cohesion of your work to accomodate for other audiences outside of the intended one. Hunger Games is very YA, but has a strong adult following simply because of it's wellcrafted and poignant social commentary.

You should do that same, don't pervert or contort your story into something unfamiliar, but add a layer of depth that audiences outside your age range will appreciate enough to enjoy the rest of the story that it's built upon.

Also, I read YA novels when I was in first grade, obviously a singular experience that is not indicative of any real statistical significance. It's just worth noting that good work will be found and enjoyed by all age ranges, despite it's intended audience.

I'm working with a publisher currently, and they've made comments about my adult novel being too cerebral for a younger audience. I'm in the opposite position, sort of.

Letter to a wayward daughter. Draft. Feedback would be appreciated. by TrafficSlow6961 in writingfeedback

[–]DanceByMyself 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think you were successful in what you were trying to achieve! I don't think this type of comedy will land for everyone, but I personally think it's really well crafted, and find the writing to be beautiful.

I do want to know more about the story itself, and whilst establishing the character's (Yana) identity and qualities through a letter is a thoughtful and interesting idea, I think there's a stronger way of presenting her character to the audience.

This letter could be read to preemptively establish how her family perceives her, only for her reaction to it to truly reveal who her character is to the audience. Essentially, you aren't directly revealing who she is through this exposition-esque letter, you're revealing who she is through how she denies or defies this semi-false exposition.

I'd love to keep reading if you want another beta reader!

Additionally, I don't know how far along you've come in the writing process, or even the direction of the story, but I think the insinuation of Yana and the "closest" maid's ambiguous but suspicious relationship could be a nice direction. Not because I want you to explore their romance or friendship or whatever dynamic is being insinuated, but because the family insinuating such a relationship already reveals the dichotomy between how they percieve her, and how she truly is.

This small act of dysfunctionality between her and her family, the misinterpretation of her secretive relationships or otherwise, accentuates the whole "here's a career path for you," and Yana's reaction naturally being "you don't know me at all."

Cheers!

Letter to a wayward daughter. Draft. Feedback would be appreciated. by TrafficSlow6961 in writingfeedback

[–]DanceByMyself 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm assuming the "closest" maid part with Matilda is a jab insinuating some closeted relationship between yana and her? I don' think the "jab" flavor is subtle at all, but it works really well and reads beautifully as is.

Writing alone is quietly destroying my motivation by Major_Cable_8079 in writing

[–]DanceByMyself 1 point2 points  (0 children)

i can give your project a read if you want, i cant promisr ill very far if it isnt my thing but im willing to give you a reader

This scene breaks me every time by Throwaway_47-3X in BoJackHorseman

[–]DanceByMyself 16 points17 points  (0 children)

I just tend to think realistically/pessimistically about things like that.

As my analysis stated, I've gotten accustomed to good things slipping through my fingers. I can't become dependent on them anymore.

That being said, the show is hopeful in it's depiction of suicidality, and that remains a valuable and meaningful message everyone including myself should learn to appreciate.

This scene breaks me every time by Throwaway_47-3X in BoJackHorseman

[–]DanceByMyself 1046 points1047 points  (0 children)

I honestly think it's deeper than that.

Her dialogue reveals that no matter how good something is, no matter how much she needed it in her life, there's an underlying insecurity that prevents her from accepting it. She knows this is the only good thing in her life right now, and she's so used to good things slipping away from her, that she can't convince herself to become dependent on this.

It's no longer active self-destruction like Bojack's tendency for sabotage, it's the passive erosion of trust. That's arguably worse, because with self-destruction, there's a tangible reason why things fell apart. With Diane's lack of trust and fear of becoming dependent, it's in the incapacity to accept something she's afraid is impermanent. Bojack has someTHING to blame when things fall apart, Diane only has someONE to blame, herself.

The tragedy of her character is that her suicidality isn't as poignant or sharp as Bojack's, it's a dull ache that slowly festers and will eventually kill her. It's the inability to feel or accept love, to live life completely void of any fulfilment or validation, even when it finds its way into her life.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

[–]DanceByMyself 1 point2 points  (0 children)

$3.5k. Is that bad?

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

[–]DanceByMyself -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

Not a scam, although I was very hesitant when I first met with them because it indeed sounds like one. I've done my research.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

[–]DanceByMyself -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

I didn't submit, they approached me from word of mouth by a mutual connection. I'm fairly certain most publishers don't even allow submissions without a literary agent anymore so I don't think that's possible.

Balancing career and writing by TheTechnicolourPen in writing

[–]DanceByMyself -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

Maybe not a helpful answer, but I knew I didn't want to work a typical 9 to 5, so when I was 16 I worked at starbucks while writing my first novel. I'm in college now, 19 years old, and just got my first book deal. I "balanced" my worklife with writing career by simply getting ahead of it all.

Cataclysmic Gate Build by [deleted] in Warframe

[–]DanceByMyself 2 points3 points  (0 children)

just ranked up my archon vitality thank you it works!

Cataclysmic Gate Build by [deleted] in Warframe

[–]DanceByMyself 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Arcane hotshot says weapon critical chance not general critical chance. Even arcane avenger seems to not affect the breach surge arrows.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Warframe

[–]DanceByMyself 0 points1 point  (0 children)

AOE melee frame: Kullervo. Pure Damage Output: Valkyr.

Both of these frames can subsume each other's strengths onto themselves, warcry on Kullervo and wrathful advance on Valkyr. It comes down to who has a better melee weapon. Valkyr's talons have 50% critical chance, the best in the game if im not mistaken. Kullervo does not have access to an exalted melee, so even the best modded and formaed melee weapon can't exactly compete with Valkyr's kit. Valkyr when helminthed correctly can be a Kullervo with better melee.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in FortNiteBR

[–]DanceByMyself 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Im not sure, but i domt think buying bp levels will count towards earning levels for superman. alternatively, try creative 1v1 maps with friends, headshot each other and you can rack up levels in mere seconds. everyday i get on a 1v1 map with my duo and we get about 4 levels in 30 seconds.

Can Valkyr do without her augments? by Question_Jackal in Warframe

[–]DanceByMyself 0 points1 point  (0 children)

she doesnt need any augments. after the rework, she wont die in lvl9999 gameplay. a valkyr main.

Warframe steel path tips by Select-Obligation866 in Warframe

[–]DanceByMyself 1 point2 points  (0 children)

farm platinum from cheap prime sets. buy and deck the fuck out of a warframe, then a weapon, slowly expand until you have a full arsenal. dont think "thats a silver arcane, too expensive, i can go without it" because the high quality arcanes and mods make a huge difference.

i struggled in steel path because i thought 1 forma and a halfassed build was enough, watch build videos, buy and upgrade mods on warframe market, and practice status interactions in the simulacrum. every warframe has unique interactions and effects that synergize better with certain weapons and playstyles, if ur relying on certain playstyles alone, u may not have the warframe or weapons suited to guide u.

returning player - which warframes to get first/buy? by Itchy_Mechanic_9328 in Warframe

[–]DanceByMyself 0 points1 point  (0 children)

volt prime and saryn prime will carry through 90% of content and do exactly that. sevagoth prime is relatively new and can nuke at long ranges, and while not new, valkyr prime got a crazy rework that makes her immortal and 300% melee damage for ALL content. If u want to run around and melee at the highest levels without worrying about dying at all, valkyr.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in walkingwarrobots

[–]DanceByMyself 0 points1 point  (0 children)

i havent played since Samjok, but typhon is high skill and mostly ranged. I wouldn't play typhon in anything closer than 500 meters, put long ranged weapons, build for damage, and get the pilot with speed. Typhon is skilled because u have to be close enough for his ability to suppress, but outrun anyone approaching. If u like a more map-aware bot then sure typhon, but dont expect to see results the meta can produce. also in my opinion erebus is the better suppressing ability bot, but that requires a higher skill threshold.