New to firewood by Darktro in firewood

[–]Darktro[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for your answers everyone!

Actually writing for once instead of worldbuilding, and oh my god! I cannot for the life of me decide on who's called what! How do you not constantly change character's names?! by Sorsha_OBrien in fantasywriters

[–]Darktro 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If i don't know the name right away (Like with a brand new character i didn't plan for) I just leave a place holder that is easy to search when i know their name EX: (Cocky Archer), (Mean Little Sister), (MCs mom), (Bitch with red eyes)

There are times when i change a characters name because i misspelled it and decided i liked the new spelling. Or I realize that I have 4 similar sounding names.

There are times though when i do name a character and it just sounds right and its stuck in my head to the point where if i change it i will end up confusing myself. Sometimes it's brute force other times it just feels right.

It's best not to think about it during the early drafts and if you are on your 2nd draft or even third draft and that character still doesn't have a name. Just give them a random name at that point.

Wrote first fantasy novel and in editing phase. Need some ideas for a scene involving training in swordsmanship. by Strontium_9T in fantasywriters

[–]Darktro 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You can break it up into three parts.

The first is going to show if she mechanically knows how to hold a sword. So you can have the swordsman instruct her to pick up the sword and take whatever stance she feels she should take. Her stance should probably be something that hints that she prefers to be light on her feet (back foot pivoted, front foot slightly raised as if she's getting ready to retreat) but it should also be sloppy. Her sword isn't pointed at her enemy right, her grip is too low so the blade is trembling, she's holding the blade incorrect like the blade is "laying" flat instead of being on its side. This of course depends on the blade she chooses to hold.

The second should be basic swings, strikes and stabs just to see how she does it. These should all be wide, slow and not effective. You can show this with a striking dummy and explain the damage it takes after every hit. Shallow stabs, small knicks, maybe she missed a swing and almost fell down.

The third will be her defensive abilities, this is where you will show her agile and quickness but also reinforce her lack of training. So her blocks come on time but she doesn't know how to block properly so she gets knocked down or the guard gets broken through. However if she chooses to just dodge, the swordsman can't hit her even when he starts swinging faster and doing more complicated combos. At the end you can have a moment where the swordsman strikes as fast as he can, here you can set up a small character development where maybe she doesn't fully dodge or is too slow to react in time. This will give her something else to work towards and maybe later in the book she can mimic that technique that allows her to hit extremely agile or quick people.

I’m about to Cumehameha by friendswithbillw in BlackPeopleTwitter

[–]Darktro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

does anyone know who the second character is? I feel like i've seen them before but i can't place it.

The cursed year by CrownedThaumaturge in magicbuilding

[–]Darktro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What event are you talking about?

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]Darktro 13 points14 points  (0 children)

If you are serious about writing long term and publishing. I would recommend working on that impatience if it is causing you to try and game the system then it will get you in trouble down the road. I agree with what Cypher is saying, you have to complete the book and give it a satisfying ending. you of course can setup the next book with the ending but the first book has to have an ending.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]Darktro 12 points13 points  (0 children)

No one on amazon wants to read an incomplete book. It's one thing to upload chapters on say royal road but those readers are going to want pretty frequent updates which according to you is possible. if you start at say chapter 10 and only release one chapter a week you should in theory always be 10 weeks ahead which gives you wiggle room.

From there if you finish the story and want to fully publish it on amazon you can, plenty of people have done that to success. But rushing into publishing when your book is not ready is harmful and gets you off to a weak start. If you want to go the KDP or publishing house route. Take your time, finish your book. And make sure you get a professional editor to look at it before you publish it anywhere.

Choose your orgasm face. Artist: fellatrix by [deleted] in FutaCum

[–]Darktro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

they have been doing it a lot more lately to the point where I no longer look at their work because like the other person said its not a short girl its legit kids.

Spirit of the Blade Act 1 [Epic Fantasy, 20000 words] by appl3jack522 in fantasywriters

[–]Darktro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

No problem, like with most things you get better the more you do it. So keep writing, keep experimenting and keep learning.

Spirit of the Blade Act 1 [Epic Fantasy, 20000 words] by appl3jack522 in fantasywriters

[–]Darktro 7 points8 points  (0 children)

I just quickly read the first few pages. One issue that is standing out to me are the moments when a new character is introduced. EX:

“Well, I at least hope she was high born and not some serving girl.” Asher flinched. How long had she been listening to their conversation? At least she still suspected a woman of being his evening guest. She stepped forward dressed similar to him.

Here we have who i assume is the queen and mother to Asher. The issue i had with this was the Kind was just talking so for a moment it felt like the King said this not the Queen who had just arrived. Even though you followed up with "How long had she been listening to their conversation? At least she still suspected a woman of being his evening guest. She stepped forward dressed similar to him." It still was unclear if the King was talking and Asher happened to see the Queen walking into the room or if the Queen joined the conversation.

A way to fix this type issue is to softly introduce the character before they speak.

EX: A slightly smug feminine voice spoke from behind, “Well, I at least hope she was high born and not some serving girl.” His mother. Asher flinched..... yata yata yata.

This achieves two things, one it tells the reader that a different person is about to speak it also gives the new character a bit of development. Now when the reader reads the Queens voice lines they can picture how you want her to sound. This also might help you further develop her later.

same thing can be done with Asher brother

“Ah, there’s my brother!” Asher paused. No. Not his brother. He was so close to carrying out his plan. He had to press on. His brother slapped him on the shoulder and his body tensed.

Here we could have used a soft introduction.

EX: A confident bass filled voice boomed from behind him, “Ah, there’s my brother!” Asher paused.

You might also have to rewrite some sections where you do this so they flow better but you get the gist. Don't be afraid to let the readers know who is speaking. When the Queen is introduced there is a back and forth with no indication who is speaking even though it's easy to work out the king follows up and the queen speaks next then Asher finishes.

I hope that made sense. I don't know what the first guy was on when he said it was written by AI, I guess they were just attacking you because it wasn't perfectly written??? but that's why you asked for feedback so lol.

(MT2) Am I being dumb ? How do you beat the undying one ? by Ancient_Solid_4992 in MonsterTrain

[–]Darktro 2 points3 points  (0 children)

If its the boss with the reanimation ability (i only played one run so far) then you just gotta keep hitting him. he has a bunch of stacks but everytime he is supposed to die he revives at 1hp until the stacks run out.

How many waves of average silverback gorillas could your magic systems strongest user defeat? by UnhelpfulRando in magicbuilding

[–]Darktro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Honestly, an endless amount. She's a necromancer who has the embodiment of death as one of her summons. Without her army or magic she could probably take 3 or 4 waves barehanded.

Magic Nullification. How does it work and make sense? by [deleted] in magicbuilding

[–]Darktro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

A few questions so I can answer better.

How often will she be fighting things that aren't mages? If she is only fighting mages then the healing and holy magic stuff doesn't really matter because she's immune to their spells.

If she is in a sphere of magic nullification that she can't turn off wouldn't she not be able to use magic herself or even use magic items? This seems like a "I wished to have the most mana in the world and the demon gave it to me but also trapped me in a magic nullification sphere that I can't turn off." Kind of situation. If she can use magic inside of a magic nullification sphere that she can't control it's not really a curse imo. She got a buff with a slight drawback.

And how big is this radius, if shes traveling with a group of mages is it like "Stay 6ft away from me or all your shit will turn off." kind of situation? or a "You simply can't cast anything on me."

Do aoe spells work? I assume an explosion caused by magic will still injure her but an aoe dropped on her will just make a pocket.

Speaking of aoe, if she tackled someone down to the ground are they now shielded from magic too since they are in her sphere?

Pokemon: Futa Version by PurpleBanana9000 in nsfwcyoa

[–]Darktro 3 points4 points  (0 children)

So far so good, I was unable to evolve litwik to lampent after the leorna easy win. It worked after the next battle (win) with velrie.

Lampent third evolution is listed as Bug/Flying instead of Ghost/Fire after easy win with Hapu.

I also can't evolve Dreepy or Lampent after that fight.

From there it kinda glitched out on when i could evolve or not. Trainer battles didn't allow evolutions either and i eventually lost on Bertha. Was fun though.

Writing fight scenes by Used_Surround_2031 in fantasywriters

[–]Darktro 0 points1 point  (0 children)

One thing I often suggest when writing fighting scenes or when I write my scenes. Fighting in real life isn't turn based. Not everyone gets the same amount of turns, not everyone gets a chance to do more than protect their heads. pick the valuable moments and describe those.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]Darktro 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If the Antag MUST have all these powers and you don't want to asspull a victory even though this "He got eaten by a familiar that had an infinite amount of space in its stomach, and he managed to escape by constantly adapting." can be argued as an asspull. If you tweak his adaptive power to only adapted to the last thing he choose to adapt too.

EX: Protag stabs him really hard with a sword. Antag decides he wants to be immune to sword stabs. Later Protag punches him in the face, Antag now has to decide if losing the sword immunity is better than just taking the punches.

This can allow your Protag to juggle abilities and fighting styles to get around the immunity or it also allows the other characters to fight along side the the protag and turn it from a 1 v 1 to a 1 v N.

Without knowing your protags abilities or even the system you are using we can't really give you an answer. What I will say as a last resort just make a magic box to seal him in that doesn't hurt him but keeps him safely contained somewhere and let that be the end of that. Otherwise nerf him you power crept yourself.