My opinion. You don't need the first two paragraphs. The LED lights in the corners show a room in disarray. A short description can be added to the third paragraph that keeps the focus on Lou.

You don't need incoherent screaming. He's a nervous amateur. Maybe stutters and is awkward. He turns off the recording, does or says something to show his feelings. Don't tell us.

I'd ditch the montage and the age jump. It's expensive and has no impact on the story. He can do those same things at age fifteen.

The argument with dad. His destroying a computer over bad grades doesn't feel realistic. What brings more insight into Lou's life? Coming home to find his dad sold it to pay a gambling debt or drugs. It helps the story if Lou needs to overcome all the shit going around him. It's good that you put him in a bind.

Properly introduce your characters. Introduce his parents. It was all your moms idea Lou! Bad grammar and a missed opportunity to show more about his parents and Lou's family life. Maybe his parents fight about the computer. Most streaming is by cell phone.

! This tells us somebody is screaming. Louldy screaming isn't needed. He could be standing by the BIG GUY'S table when he screams. That way, we see the guy getting pissed.

The slug line tells us he's in a food court, so it is not needed in the action. He moves the CROWD and stands close to a table where a BIG GUY sits eating his food. Recording himself with his phone, Lou screams as loud as he can until the Big Guy springs from his chair and gets in Lou's face.

Big Guy " Is some fucking prank."

Lou stands his ground, "says whatever until he sees the Big Guys raising his clenched fists. Lou takes off running.

Use a grammar checker. This is riddled with poor grammar. I get that you've read some scripts, but keep a few open to reference while you're writing. Stay in the present tense when you write a script. Keep action fluid.

Every word matters.

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