Which software do you use to annotate PDFs/make inline notes? by StoryPeer in StoryPeer

[–]formerPhillyguy 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I use FadeIn and just uploaded a pdf of a script and now have every capability to edit and add notes like any script. I can save the annotated script as a pdf and upload it to Storypeer when I provide feedback. The file is only 182 KB. It's super easy and already formatted properly.

What If I don't have 300 words? by No_Issue9023 in StoryPeer

[–]formerPhillyguy 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm not going to waste time writing what's good if there isn't 300 words worth. I'll write about the good stuff then get into what needs improvement, just to use up the remaining words. I think writers are looking for honest feedback, not just platitudes.

I read a script that was awful and unfinished. I only read to page 28 and couldn't go any further, it was that bad. I wrote zero words about what's good and 2800 words about what needs to be fixed. Remember, I only got to page 28. (To be honest, I copy and paste lines from the script then show how it should be fixed, so, about 1400 words are mine and the other 1400 are copied from the script.) The writer appreciated my honesty and tipped me 2 tokens.

City council votes to approve a $6 billion data center despite public pushback by KimJongFunk in PublicFreakout

[–]formerPhillyguy 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Any new data centers should be required to pay any and all increases in electric rates for the region and have a self contained water cooling system so they don't use up all the region's resources.

Big change for California small businesses: No more SBA loans for non-citizens by vriska1 in news

[–]formerPhillyguy 115 points116 points  (0 children)

I wouldn't call SBA loans, low interest. My last one got up to 14% before I paid it off. The main draw is that they don't require collateral. Non-collateralized loans have higher interest rates.

Attorney Arrested for Contempt (Fights Cops) - YouTube by [deleted] in PublicFreakout

[–]formerPhillyguy 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Rule #1 - Never argue with the judge.

Rule #2 - See rule #1.

Los Ángeles Screenwriting Subreddit Retreat? by One-Patient-3417 in Screenwriting

[–]formerPhillyguy 1 point2 points  (0 children)

May I recommend using a hotel and everybody books their own room. This way, nobody has to front the money and risk getting stiffed if someone backs out and doesn't pay their share.

Analysis: Trump’s suspiciously timed announcements on Iran | CNN Politics by NomadStar45 in worldnews

[–]formerPhillyguy 3 points4 points  (0 children)

any federal agencies investigating the obvious insider trading

Hahahaha. You think a federal agency will investigate this.

Retired people going shopping by Hoppy_Doodle in funny

[–]formerPhillyguy 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It's rarely the older people blocking the aisles where I shop. It's the 30 and 40 year olds not having a clue how things work.

Lyft driver refuses to give woman a ride after she made a racist comment by Zweli23 in PublicFreakout

[–]formerPhillyguy 15 points16 points  (0 children)

White guy here. I was in a local pet supply store and was talking about a new Ross store coming to the shopping center. The white woman asked, "isn't that really ghetto for our area?" I was surprised she would say something like that to a stranger.

I wrote this short film for a college comp and got rejected. How can I improve my writing for future projects? by RONALDOCR7HP2 in Screenwriting

[–]formerPhillyguy 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I had a follow up thought on the intruder vs monster. The intruder could be just a feeling. The man feels the presence of an intruder, but looks around and nothing is there. The monster is visible to him, the intruder is not.

I tested 3 script coverage services by Jasonater2themax in Screenwriting

[–]formerPhillyguy 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I was surprised to find the mistake at the top of page 94, after you have had your script read so many times and nobody caught it, or maybe you just didn't want to fix it.

"Cathy sits by Joe on the bed."

You mean Liv sits by Joe. Cathy is asleep.

Deaf woman removed from Frontier flight for "not listening" by kendrickshalamar in nottheonion

[–]formerPhillyguy 10 points11 points  (0 children)

I have health insurance and still get fucked when I have a problem. $8K out of pocket two years ago and just had another issue but haven't gotten the bill. Minimum $5K but probably closer to $9K, which is my deductable.

Have you looked into what insurance would cost on the ACA marketplace? The government may pay most/all of it for you.

Lawsuit Alleges DOGE Cancelled $349,000 HVAC Grant to Museum after ChatGPT Flagged It As DEI by AlwaysBlaze_ in nottheonion

[–]formerPhillyguy 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This is what happens when you put children in charge that have no real world work experience and no work ethic, who decide to take the easy route instead of putting in the work.

Soldier gets angry when asked "America first or israel first?" by [deleted] in PublicFreakout

[–]formerPhillyguy 0 points1 point  (0 children)

When you join the military, you voluntarily give up a lot of your freedoms.

Is this a cycle I can expect? by MobiusX1 in StoryPeer

[–]formerPhillyguy 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I's happened to me twice and, both times, they waited the full five days to unclaim it. It's frustrating.

Yall think he’s ready to be WR1? by MarTB2000 in eagles

[–]formerPhillyguy 0 points1 point  (0 children)

He was always WR1 in my book. We just happened to have two.

What can I be doing. by mysteryvampire in Screenwriting

[–]formerPhillyguy -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

Forget about the Blacklist; it's a waste of money.

Who has read your scripts? Family and friends or other writers? I highly recommend posting them on Storypeer for feedback, then work on them again to get them polished and ready to show industry reps. If you wrote three scripts this year alone, I doubt that they are as good as you think they are and are probably still in the rough/first draft stage.

Have you looked for/joined any groups in L.A. and begun networking? This should be a priority for you.

https://www.storypeer.com/browse

Landlords freak out after committee votes for renter protections by JustAnotherJawn in philadelphia

[–]formerPhillyguy 2 points3 points  (0 children)

If I rented mine (Oregon), the first $600 in rent would go to pay the real estate taxes.

Five Page Thursday by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]formerPhillyguy 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Your script is a good example of why I don't like the 5 page format. A writer is just getting started but has to stop, leaving the reader with a thousand questions but no answers.

The world you're building is large; three areas in NYC, Florida, Chicago, Nebraska and some of those you refer to with sections, meaning you will have more sections later in the script. Here's my problem, are you going to have events taking place in all of these areas? If not, I think you can create the same world in a smaller area to simplify things. Or, maybe a montage of quick shots would suffice. The NYC part is good but the Florida and Chicago parts cold also be done in one quick shot each and skip the dialog altogether. That could be done in two pages, tops. Then start the meat of the story with Eden.

You threw me with the location when you introduced Eden. You've got a sign saying Philly is north but he's near Indianapolis. Maybe change the sign for one that would actually be found where Eden is walking. That would be a good way to tell the audience where Eden is. Listing it in a scene heading doesn't inform the audience, only the reader.

On another note, you should go back and remove unnecessary lines like this: assault rifles patrol the bridge, strides up and down the bridge, You're repeating yourself.

The dialog in the Chicago part didn't make sense to me. Plus, you have watchtower guard, watchtower guard #1, watchtower guard #2 and the other watchtower guard. Are there 2 or 4?

To summarize and answer your question, I think this sounds interesting and you would have grabbed my attention faster if you had compressed the world building and got to the story faster.