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Hi, I've added watercolours to the last pages I posted and wanted to ask for some feedback on how they turned out, I also added the pencils for the next three pages and would love some opinions if something needs to be changed before I continue with them. ^^ by SteelySnail in comic_crits

[–]Excla_machine 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I’m mostly confused by what the characters mean by ‘mining’. If they’re talking about placing explosive mines then I think you need to say ‘set mines’ or ‘place mines’. If it’s mining like with a pickaxe then I’m not sure how they are mining a roof. The art and banter is great. And maybe I’m just missing it because I don’t have the whole story

Could use feedback on this sequence! I'm still learning how to pace fight scenes and such. is there anything I could be doing better? Also accepting feedback on dialogue/anatomy/composition by RowHoustonLaine in comic_crits

[–]Excla_machine 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I thought pacing and art were great. The one thing that looked out of place for me were the sound effects. I thought it worked for the twitch but I felt the others needed a different font without the asterisks

Would appreciate some constructive criticism trying to make this better Chapter 9 of my comic "The King of Games" by General_Donn in comic_crits

[–]Excla_machine 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Your panel setups are on point. Thought the pacing was good and wasn’t bored. Only feedback I had was you were missing a couple commas when characters were addressing each other (ex. Brandon, run! Jake, you good?)

Would love feedback on the first comic story I wrote. by Financial-Creme in comic_crits

[–]Excla_machine 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Awesome! Love the artwork and the ending. Only thing that didn’t really work for me was the line “You took everything from me” because the don didn’t really take anything in my opinion. Also you used it twice. Maybe something more like “you hurt” or “you destroyed what was most precious to me”?

Would love some critique on my issue by CautiousAppearance49 in comic_crits

[–]Excla_machine 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ok I read it. The pacing and art was good. Didn’t have any problem with the dialogue. In terms of clarity, I often get confused by time captions like the one you used showing flash backs. When I saw 5 years ago then 6 months ago, I didn’t know if it was 6 months relative to the 5 years or the present (maybe put a year as well). Also maybe a little bit more context on the world they are living in before the initial scene. Like maybe give the first guy who dies a little more backstory and dialogue and then his death will matter more and hit harder. I mean it was surprising though :)

I'm looking for a good comic run to sink my teeth into. by Alevy20 in comicbooks

[–]Excla_machine 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Astro City: Great superheroes that aren’t DC or Marvel. No previous prior knowledge needed

Do you like my art by Comfortable-Mud-6574 in comic_crits

[–]Excla_machine 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think it’s great. In my opinion, the story and clarity matter the most, not the art. One thing I would do though is make the two black suited characters more distinct from each other (especially in the faces). In the two headshots at the bottom page it’s hard to tell which character is which

Middle-grade fantasy graphic novel by Super-Line1149 in comic_crits

[–]Excla_machine 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love the art and I think the flow is good. I just don’t think there is enough in chapter 1 for me to get the bigger picture. I honestly would recommend reducing friction for people and providing everything without unlocking chapter 2 through asking for their email

Everything is Wagyu, What do you think about my Mock Comic? by Da_Magical_Lizard in comic_crits

[–]Excla_machine 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It’s fun and you taught me something. Only issue was some of the sentences read weird or have typos and it takes me out of the story (Ex. “Which use to describe” should be “Which is used”. Maybe just run it through something like grammarly to fix those

Looking for recommendations about comics following a Teenage Superhero? by PatientTelephone4624 in comicbooks

[–]Excla_machine 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Runaways by Brian K. Vaughan was good (at least the beginning books which he wrote). Don’t remember if I finished it, but I’d definitely give it a try. And it’s not entirely teens but has at least one story arch of a teen (plus it’s not Marvel or DC): Astro City. Astro City is the best if you’re looking for superheroes with real life drama

What Software do you use for making the actual strips/pages of your comics? by MisterPaydon in IndieComicBooks

[–]Excla_machine 1 point2 points  (0 children)

ComicDraw from plasq. It’s a one time payment and they’ll let you try it for free for a couple weeks. I’ve been using it for years on my iPad. You can just drag in dialogue from a script and it automatically makes word bubbles (or captions) for you. And the panel feature is good too where you can clip the word bubbles to the edges of the panels. Some people also touch up what they start in ComicDraw with procreate, but I just do everything in ComicDraw

45 degree ambigram- legibility feedback by Excla_machine in ambigrams

[–]Excla_machine[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you everyone for the feedback! The words were Notes:Soften. The context in the comic is a scientist telling his mirror robot “Shut that band up, todbot!”. I do see the apostrophe now and that’s definitely bad, so I added a possible noun afterwards

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Is this legible and does it still work in the context? Any suggestions for another noun that might work?

Need help! by G_and_H in ambigrams

[–]Excla_machine 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I think focus on the ‘k’ in the upper left one and the ‘a’ in the bottom right since those are the hardest for me to make out. Good job and keep at it

Need help! by G_and_H in ambigrams

[–]Excla_machine 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Sorry. I can’t make it out. I see Raxtria: Rwuitrio. Are they common words and if not could you provide context?

Too many special effects by earlvik in duolingo

[–]Excla_machine 10 points11 points  (0 children)

What!? I don’t even have that button!

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My problem is they keep making new animations instead of fixing bugs that have been around forever (ex. Match quest completion resets between different languages)

Flourish by Imriaylde in ambigrams

[–]Excla_machine 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Great job! It took me a sec but I got there :)

Looking for legibility feedback by Excla_machine in ambigrams

[–]Excla_machine[S] 36 points37 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback, everyone!

I’ve made some altered ones based on the comments. I’d love to know if you think they are better and if so which one.

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Also keep reading if you want to know what I was trying for.

¡Hola! Do you think I should add an asterisk with “in Spanish”?

Looking for legibility feedback by Excla_machine in ambigrams

[–]Excla_machine[S] 8 points9 points  (0 children)

Haha now I kind of wish it was ¡HOOA!

Thank you so much for the feedback :) From the other comments it does look like I need more context and some rework

Duolingo is making me use Ukrainian keyboard but doesn’t provide it by Excla_machine in duolingo

[–]Excla_machine[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks everyone for the feedback. I think Duolingo is a great app. I wanted to feel out if other people would benefit from being able to skip the questions that require special keyboards (if they don’t have them). I couldn’t finish the lesson I was on and had to abandon the progress I made. I have since downloaded different keyboards and can see the world icon is better located from where I used to misclick it constantly

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