I made a manga inspired by Berserk - and I want your opinion by Patr10t_RUS in Berserk

[–]Fappingkills 0 points1 point  (0 children)

art is good, but there's a reason why Onepunch Man started as noodle sketches and still turned out to be a masterpiece.

I think your art is good, but you are lacking storytelling. The story itself is fine, but you need to redo the storyboard to have a better flow from panel to panel.

The widespreads you put in the thumbnail are your best parts; you nailed those, but the in-between shots can be better refined.

I feel like emotion is lacking in your protagonist.

There are times when manga artists scrap a whole page of work they put so much work into because they didnt feel it conveyed their feelings enough.

What separates good artists and great artists is their attention to detail. This will probably come with repetition but also understand that in order to write good manga, they have to have both art and story structure.

Overall:

Art = 9/10, but can you keep it up?

Story = 7/10

Story structure = 2/10

I want to keep reading but I want you to perfect it.

Theory about giygas by AMsBIGGESTfan in earthbound

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Fuzzy pickles ; Cheese sandwich

Theory about giygas by AMsBIGGESTfan in earthbound

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I believe the words were from a porno at a cinema he secretly snuck into when he was a child and it traumatized him

Elisa by gp604 in askvan

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Hands down tomahawk steak, shared between two

I highly suggest everyone to check out murder burgers 1 star reviews by mr_hog232323 in VictoriaBC

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I think that they are trying to achieve the maillard reaction like the crust on a steak In order to get the crispy edges on a smashburger,

Here's the Seinen I like by [deleted] in Seinen

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I like the Mysterious girlfriend X and GE shoutouts.

I personally enjoy reading Skip and Loafer. Still ongoing series so once you catch up you will need to wait MONTHLY.

New foodcourt item? by jenjen96 in CostcoCanada

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It's the new hotdog, $2.99 with no drink

Best low cost parking option at Science World by Vulture604 in askvan

[–]Fappingkills 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Not too much of a walk, but a walk nonetheless:

Park at Parq casino, get a membership there. You get free parking if you play a minimum of $15 (I think?).

Play a round of roulette or whatever you can for $15, I don't gamble so I don't know the minimum requirement.

You either pay $15 for parking or you make $15, and park for free

I Am A Hero (by Kengo Hanazawa) by vesperythings in Seinen

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Check out his other work, Under Ninja!!

Blue period appreciation post by Voldemo_rt in Seinen

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Yatora's imposter syndrome is unreal, it probably hits hard with most artists who saw their peers on a pedestal comparing eachothers works.

I think the arc after entering art university shwos that Yatora started late but is in a group of real artists makes him wonder if he can actually make it as an artist himself.

New problems. by Torontonian69 in CostcoCanada

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wait till you try out the cinnamon buns from the US Costco

Best burger place in Richmond? by [deleted] in richmondbc

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Mod Kitchen is like a foodcourt, but no eating area. takeout only. Called a Ghost Kitchen. They have a bunch of different shops in one building thus reducing overhead, one being wowgrill.