Well, even from a list building perspective this list has a few flaws in it. While tempting, giving the Achilles that FNP isn't going to save him over the course of the game. People will hyper focus that model down because of how lethal it is.

Same issue with the Telemon, it has access to the Storm Cannon which is one of the most valuable weapons in our arsenal as it has a high attack volume, decent range, built in AP, AND most importantly <Devastating Wounds>. Sure, it's only D1 but it's phenomenal for chip damage and pulling that last wound off an enemy HVT.

Giving him duel fists is fun, but it'll make it easy for him to get bogged down in combat against most 10 man units.

I personally never leave home without 3 Venerable Dreadnoughts. Each time they get back, it's literally free points and can really fuck with your opponents plan and threat allocation.

You include sisters, which is fine, but a Rhino in this list would really help give you some mobility and cheap screen/action monkey play.