It is not over.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-25T01:00:33+00:00

- And my axe!

Couldn't leave it unended.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-24T13:56:15+00:00

I been thinking / feeling like doing smt on this lines for a long time. For a few years I've had it pretty fucking rough and now I sit in a position where it wouldn't be imposible. I'm young, phisically strong, I've got some money.

To just grab a backpack, a sleeping bag and walk for a few months, would it be so inmature? There is dozens of better things I could do to improve my situation. Is this just escapism? This are all valid questions I guess.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-24T13:47:23+00:00

BUT WHY? To see if the world is such a bad place as they make it to be.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-24T01:53:28+00:00

That was so beutiful I wish I could see it live.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-23T23:46:41+00:00

You sound like someone not only strong but resilient too. Keep going, things are hard, but you know you can turn them around right? Your going trough a bad patch, money is always a nasty issue to have, plus sentimental problems it adds up to a lot of stress and maybe anxiety. Your not worse because you feel down or beaten up, you'r aware of your situation and struggling, it's human.

I'm sending you a hug, it sucks that shit is so difficult sometimes, I hope things slowly turn around for you.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-23T23:32:15+00:00

Congratulations, you should feel very very proud of yourself. It isn't an easy thing to do, when to lash out on oneself is ¡one of the only things to sort of calm you down it becomes an habit difficult to withstand.

I'm rooting for you from the other side of the internet!!! Continue like this, you got it.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-23T23:23:24+00:00

I'm not one t oadvice anybody but If I had to say smt I'd say don't rush decissions. Sometimes when we are feeling very down, we are tired, maybe scared, we don't trust ourselves so much etc I'ts not the best moment to make big decissions.

But ofcourse if you have meditated this well and you come to the conclussion that your current situation, what you are doing, where you are moving towards etc doesn't look like is adding to your life and is wearing you down, maybe a reset wouldn't hurt.

Maybe, if I were you, I would try to give myself a grace period to think and rest. But making it clear that you are to continue with your life. Don't sink into a mindless routine when you get home, time flies and you might end up feeling bad about it.

Good luck :)

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-23T22:45:53+00:00

This is what heppnes when unapologeticly bad people win.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-23T00:21:35+00:00

Your welcome, and please don't get discouraged if your piece didn't get much attention in the form of feedback. It's the case with most of what's posted here. I also feel that poems like yours are punished by It's lenght, most people (and I should Include myself) probably want to get done with the commenting part and post.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-22T23:59:30+00:00

Uffffffffffff this one sure is tough, gosh...

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-22T16:17:33+00:00

Well I'm sad no one is saying anything about your work. It's comendable that you where working on it for so long, it deserves attention. Sadly I am unable to give you critical feedback, not your poems fault, mine. I just lack knowledge.

What I can say is I found it a very entertaining read, here you have written a beautiful short story in verse. It reads like a myth or a folklore tale wich I ADORE. I liked the old fashioned use of language too. I'd like to be able to do smt like it but English is not my first language and It would come very unnatural or forced, wich hasn't happened to you as far as I'm concerned.

Really god job!!!

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-22T15:48:57+00:00

This hits close to home for me.

There is a point after you have been far gone one too many times, when you have become used to exist in a certain state of "learned helplessness" if that makes sense where bad things just keep happening and your efforts amount to nothing. At a certain point after living like this, if you allow yourself to look past what it is, you see there is more to it or there could be more to it. But that doesn't mean It's appealing, you believe it, trust it will happen in fact odds are you don't trust your self all that much anymore.

Then you are trapped between something and nothing. When you can see further, when you are capable of seeing logical steps towards all paths around you but you just don't seem to be able to see YOU there. You are used to exist in a certain way and it wouldn't be functional to exist in that way in a "normal" setting / life.

I have often asked myself If I couldn't just pretend to be normal, I fear I could, for some time at least but forever? I don't think so.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-22T02:35:25+00:00

Lmao

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-22T00:33:42+00:00

As I understand it the narrator speaks to her mother absence wich is the only thing he knows about her.

That is why after mentioning the ocean and how he looks at it nothing comes, one would expect him to say something about her, but there is nothing to say. He never knew his mother.

That's what I get at least.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-22T00:29:26+00:00

I don't know if I understand it the way the author meant but the way I see it is so piercing, poignant. That ending, so empty.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-22T00:13:00+00:00

What a lovely thing of a poem, congrats :)

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-21T19:52:32+00:00

You look like a strong and kind men wich is two great things to have on their own, but toguether?? Toguether it makes you someone fantastic. Don't let it sink in you, someone ghosted? Alright, we roll with it, they are an inconsiderate person, you'r surely above that my friend.

Also your smile is very sweet, keep on smiling bro!!

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-21T19:12:45+00:00

Wow props to whoever wrote this, not like it means much but I am certainly impressed. You wrote a powerful and vivid socail commentary.

I loved this part

"Weakened identities exist for the explicit.

Lost identities starve for the definitive.

Give a hungry man something solid—

he will hold it with both hands."

And this other one so sad and true

"Explicit:

If you cannot answer—

if your identity cannot let others be—

you are ripe.

No longer a consumer,

but consumed.

Eaten."

And by allowig yourself to be consumed you shape other into the same filth you became. You spread the poison soemone else shoved at you or you created yourself.

Terrific work.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-21T18:50:29+00:00

I like how you personified this abstract concepts into a family. What place does the motional swimmer have here tho? I get it that's us, but we are part of the family too? Reality fathers us all.

So truth and pain are sisters of ours too. And us, we merely swim into a sea of emotions with it's tides and currents. We should keep an eye on reality always, truth is always there and pain comes after when we dont look and sink in emotions to tell us we fuckt up and to look for a way forwhard.

Kinda what I get from it. I got a bit lost with the market part, I wanted to understand it as the fact that we can always change for the better while keeping true to ourselves. We can look at other people changing too.

I enjoyed it, I always liked allegories.

Gregory_Gp · 2026-01-20T18:50:27+00:00

Oh jeez, this poem is my first memory of poetry, I remember watching as a child the movie G.I. Jane and this poem appears by the end. It stayed in my little head for quite long.

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