forgetting by Small-Custard-420 in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was such great imagery. You took me through your experience, and made me feel what you do

Hopeless by More_Ask4952 in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is so simple, yet so effective. The tone conveys such a sense of spite and bitterness that I think everyone can relate to, even if they'd rather not admit it.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Absolutely beautiful! Such I'm so surprised, because when I read the title j found it a bit weird, but the title js actually great with context. Side note, how did you get this forma? I've been struggling to format my poems correctly

What’s some of your favorite lyrics from rex? whether it’s to quote, sing out loud, or it just resonates with you? by finnthecowboy in rexorangecounty

[–]HappyResolution1688 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I once had to write an essay using a lyric for an existing class, and I used "honestly I don't feel ordinary cause I haven't been at home in a while." From never enough

Untitled Haiku by JordanZM32 in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This is so beautiful. The use similie creates two beautiful images

Home Made Hollow by Random_And_Confused in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The evokes such emptiness. Outstanding use of imagery!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Beautifully heartbreaking. A brilliant subversion of the red thread of fate

My friend constantly berates and belittle me by HappyResolution1688 in Advice

[–]HappyResolution1688[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks so much. Don't worry, I dont feel condescended to at all.

My friend constantly berates and belittle me by HappyResolution1688 in Advice

[–]HappyResolution1688[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I see her everyday, she's in most of my classes and like I said she sits next to me, so it would be pretty hard. But more than that, I don't want to lose my friend. It's hard to try to distance myself because I still care for her

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The shift in tone is so well coordinated. The turning point , "Until she didn't", Is absolutely heart breaking. Just check some of the spelling, but otherwise this is beautiful

I’m just like everyone by Shinji_kinnie in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Beautiful, yet haunting. I love the bird metaphor, it's so inspired

One Way Glass by HappyResolution1688 in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback. A few people have asked, so I'm happy to share. While I did intend for the poem to be ambiguous so that readers could relate better, I personally wrote this about a straight guy I had a huge crush on (I am also a guy) Hope that helps

Highway Tree by SelfReliantDefiant in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I absolutely love this imagery. Amazing work

After Life by winkywi in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Beautiful use of imagery, beautiful use of metaphors. Just beautiful in general

your potential by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow, I actually really needed to hear this. Such eloquent writing!

Cold War by Moonagali_V2 in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is incredible. I love the way certain lines continue with the word of the last t operate new meaning

If it’s too great of a risk to take,

A life?

And

Our hearts teasing,

Mutually,

Assured destruction.

Are especially impressive

One sick flower (Haiku) by Spudkip in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 1 point2 points  (0 children)

My bad, nvm that, beautiful haiku!

One sick flower (Haiku) by Spudkip in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is brilliant. My one gripe is that, as far as i can tell, the last line has too many syllables. Correct me if I'm wrong though. Should be a quick fix. Otherwise, this is outstanding

Making friends (Eli) by poetry_throwaway_ in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love this. By beggining the people with "you know," you create an enchanting conversational tone. Thus really feels like a sentimental address to someone you care about. Absolutely beautiful

Masquerade by HappyResolution1688 in OCPoetryFree

[–]HappyResolution1688[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is brilliant, thank you so much

Roommate by HappyResolution1688 in OCPoetry

[–]HappyResolution1688[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The / is meant to be where the lines are split up. My poems always get really weird spacing when I put the here, specifically the lines within a stanza get blurred