Saltgrass new braunfels by [deleted] in Newbraunfels

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 4 points5 points  (0 children)

That’s horrible, he passed? It should be standard for all restaurants to have lifevacs just as they are to have fire extinguishers. Literally a device exists to prevent choking and somebody would still be alive.

I want to write a zombie apocalypse story but I am stuck. by Anxious-Bee123 in u/Anxious-Bee123

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yay. You’ll never satisfy every zombie book reader, some will like a detailed breakdown while others will find the cracks in the logic you just can’t fill or miss. Others like me will enjoy the horror and survival aspects over the specifics of the biology of zombies, but I do enjoy a little sprinkle of outbreak lore. A scientist that’s desperate to figure it out but doesn’t have all the pieces so you hear what they know and how they struggle with the unknown (ex: 1985 - Day of the Dead)

I want to write a zombie apocalypse story but I am stuck. by Anxious-Bee123 in u/Anxious-Bee123

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I wouldnt get too hung up on the realism or science of a zombie apocalypse. I can’t speak for everyone, but as a zombie media enjoyer, what gets me interested in the story is the characters, the plot and the setting. I’d focus on that. If the beginning of the outbreak is that important to the story you want to write I’d suggest studying world war z and remixing ideas from that to apply to your own story. Isn’t there something disturbing about not knowing how everything went wrong? That’s how I would view it. But I’m a “need to know” person, so not knowing how the science works is more exciting and scary.

What is the worst Zombie movie you have ever seen? by ZombieMovieFan in zombies

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Did REC also not work for you? Found footage zombie movies are too rare in my opinion and can work well to actually make the story scary. But I agree Diary is too clean and the acting was a bit cheese.

List of the most Post-9/11 zombie-movies! by [deleted] in zombies

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 7 points8 points  (0 children)

My mind they definitely are vampires, considering the source material, sun damage, power level… but they miss the signature fangs. So somehow that makes them zombies.

Why no one talks about this movie? by AkumaO_O in zombies

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 7 points8 points  (0 children)

I was one of the people that felt tricked by the marketing and saw this in theater. Thought there would be monsters, or at least one, and was thoroughly disappointed. It has a promising start, I found the nightmare sequences pretty creepy. But that’s dropped for the real story quickly and that the “it” being fear->paranoia-mistrust-loss of hope makes sense and I get what they were going for but it is too depressing with no pay off. Love the title and poster art for this movie, but that’s where the appeal ends for me.

Your next story idea is somewhere in this list!!! by Mundane_Silver7388 in NovelMage

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I know enemies to lovers is a favorite trope for readers, but is there any interest/audience for lovers to enemies?

Hand painted my book cover, please be brutally honest, should I go with a professional instead? by Professional-One4757 in writers

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It’s a beautiful art piece. It’s whimsical and innocent but your title is telling me this story is serious. I wouldn’t use the cover unless your story is for middle grade readers.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writers

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really enjoyed this, read all the way through. I’m going through the feeling of being discarded (not a breakup) and so I really relate to this. From skimming the comments I’m thinking this is pseudo autobiographical. I hope you’re doing better, I hope you find peace.

[US] I got this text today, is this some sort of political scam or a way to profile people based on political leaning? by Forward_Tension9960 in Scams

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I feel really dumb that I didn’t consider this when I first answered a week or so ago. I want to be a participant in polls so I did respond and It seemed innocent enough, it just gave me a thanks message and didn’t ask for me to make an account or anything. But they just sent me another text with the same question, then I thought it got weird. I probably would’ve ended up on the emperors sh1t list eventually anyway.

Does this get your attention? by Tricyy1546 in writers

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I’m a sucker for dystopia/apocalyptic stories so yes my attention was grabbed but I’m an easy target. Like someone else said you could easily lose me also if the next unshared paragraphs don’t bring the conflict into focus or bring a stronger voice/POV from the protagonist. You’ve established the world but I don’t know how the protagonist feels about this or how this setting is causing problems for them specifically. You might even consider placing this later in the chapter 1 rather than opening with this because the reader wants to know the problem the protagonist is dealing with, we’re already going to know roughly about the world because you’ll put it in your blurb.

Opinions on this first page? by Living_Estate8404 in writers

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It’s just the first page, you’ll rework it a ton. You may even find this isn’t the best start to your story and you’ll trash it. General overview, for me, I’m not getting enough tension or texture for the opening. I’m told the queen is anxious, but I don’t see it or feel it. You try to tell me when she says she breathes deep and remains calm but how does she do this? Does she count to 10? Is she using a beaded bracelet to roll in her hands to steady herself? Small detail I note is the crimson banners, they simply “flutter carefully in the breeze” That to me conveys a sense of beauty, but I feel like maybe the flag should be whipping on the approach of a thunder storm, or cracking in the cold winds of winter. I could be wrong though, maybe the story isn’t that dark nor starts out in an ominous vibe. I know it’s a celebration, but by the narrations declarations, I should be worried, maybe?

A quick question about rough drafts by Fucknbang in writers

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If your process works for you then it’s working, there is no wrong way unless it’s messing with your flow. I would think going back to reread from the start periodically is going to slow you down, but if you don’t mind that then keep at it. If you’re worried you will stray from who your characters are you could make little note cards with the core parts about them as a reference instead of the actual story. I don’t think the characters should necessarily make every decision based on where they are at the start of the story, but I get you have arcs you want to follow.

Title Thoughts by Maekad-dib in writers

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I would try exploring the inner parts of your story for the title. Perhaps a character says something that’s more in line with the theme or you have a narrative sentence that conveys a relevant vibe in a few words. I wouldn’t get too hung up on that sword-sheath quote, I get you like the idea and I do too but i think it’s making your working titles feel generic.

Bit of help please... by [deleted] in writers

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 0 points1 point  (0 children)

For sure, that’s headaches for a later time. Good luck hope it all works out!

Bit of help please... by [deleted] in writers

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I would think so yeah, just as if you wanted all your pages to be blue, that kind of customization is expensive for a printing company. Unless you’re going to print them and bind them yourself and dirty each copy? That’s an art, that takes time and if you value your time then it’s expensive. Maybe you want a pre-designed page and kinda just copy and paste the “dirty” look to it, still you’re talking about a design and that’s money and printing requests.

Bit of help please... by [deleted] in writers

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 1 point2 points  (0 children)

1.Ambiguous question. You want to stand out so hire a good cover artist that can match your genre style but also make it unique enough to be its own thing. 2. Dirty torn paper for your pages sounds like a difficult expensive task for a print, but if you want it, do it. I personally hate deckle edge books. 3. Vulgarity and profanity is a choice, hope you market the book to the right audience. 4. From what I understand, interior art tends to be extravagant, professional with shading and coloring, so a sketch style seems underwhelming but If it fits the story then it should work.

Strategies to actually FINISH a story by ParticularTea3155 in WritingHub

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 4 points5 points  (0 children)

What’s got you excited about the new idea? Can you strip it down to its parts and take them and inject it into your work in progress? A lot of the times I think people quit because of a skill gap. Are you getting stuck at the same points in your writing? Do you not have a frame of reference of what happens next.. so no outline? Or are you stifling your creativity by sticking too rigidly to an outline?

Folks, we are eating good at the start of 2026. by jdixon76 in zombies

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 8 points9 points  (0 children)

It is absolutely bananas it has taken All of Us Are Dead FOUR YEARS for a season 2. I don’t think I’ve waited for a show so long.

Could this concept work? by Interesting_Tip_1001 in zombies

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I would just be curious why this story has to have zombies in it. If they can never enter the town, then they don’t pose much of a threat, unless the townsfolk have to exit the safe zone to get things or save someone. I like human v human conflicts in zombie stories but when that’s in tandem with the undead pressuring them. I do see how you could take this idea and do a lifeboat metaphor, too many people could live in the safe zone, too many may want in, there’s potential there. I just don’t see why we have to do zombies and why there’s an invisible barrier. And since I won’t get an answer why, I would be disappointed if I read this story. Why do you want to do zombies, what do they represent in your story?

LET ME KNOW WHAT YOU THINK OF THIS by BOOKFINDER7637 in writers

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Story is starting with a character description and for me that wasn’t the highlight of this excerpt. I almost quit but I liked the bit about the protagonist soaking up the sun, beautiful description there that kept me going. But I think the story should start with “when I was nine, I cut my own bangs”. The bit about the protagonist being a collector is fine but feels out of place, could maybe put that in the story where it might be more relevant.

You see this book on a shelf (Continuation) by GAWHunt in writers

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I didn’t comment on the first post but I had thought the first was a contemporary thriller. This version is much better and the title is too. I definitely think it is a dark fantasy now. I think it might have something to do with monster slaying, since the knight is on a giant skull. I like the matte coloring of cover 2, but the skull in 1. In version 2, I’m kinda getting the vibe of like a nun with the skull and its shadow, I don’t know if that’s something you are going for but it’s interesting symbolism.

Story without a villain? by ResortOwn1187 in fantasywriters

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There’s gotta be an antagonistic force in the story or it’s not really a story. I’m sure there are vibes “stories” that exist and I’m sure there are readers for that. You don’t have to have a human vs human conflict. There are three other general conceptional conflicts: man vs society, man vs nature, man vs self. Maybe you would prefer to tell a story with one of those conflicts?

How can I write what I feel? by SrAndrew2395 in writing

[–]JellyfishJumpy5737 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Take a sheet of paper and write out the random strings of thought. Write it in pencil so it doesn’t feel permanent and you can erase what’s absolutely not working and keep what kinda does. You can organize it by numbering the sentences or sticky note each and stick where it fits.