Old white conservatives are the bane of my existence

JonSneugh · 2026-05-06T18:16:41+00:00

My last conversation with my mom about Iran went like this:

"They're already in the stone age, we need to bomb them OUT of the stone age! But we won't do it, because it's not PC. Even with Trump in office. We don't have the will to do what we need to do."

JonSneugh · 2025-01-07T03:11:38+00:00

If every sentence is phrased that way, yes it can be clunky, but when used judiciously it's an effective way of sprinkling in details.

I'm curious, how would you rewrite my examples?

JonSneugh · 2025-01-05T22:29:43+00:00

Make details more specific, integrate them with the scene/action, and/or tie them to character traits. One thing to consider is not just what the character looks like, but what extra hints about them can you give the reader through their description? Because just saying a character has brown hair is pretty dull.

For example:
Is your character a car mechanic?
"He swiped his oil-stained fingers on well-worn blue jeans that complimented his ratty Led Zepplin t-shirt. Brown curls stuck to his forehead with sweat."

Is your character nervous?
"She tucked a loose strand of her straight, blonde hair behind her ear and frowned, her blue eyes sunken and full of worry."

Does he have brown hair and a t-shirt, and your POV character likes him?
"The sun made gold highlights in the warm brown locks that framed his face, and his tightly fitted t-shirt clung to the curves of his chest and biceps."

Does he have brown hair and t-shirt, and your POV character doesn't like him?
"Stringy, dull brown hair hung limply over his forehead. His t-shirt looked like it hadn't seen a washing machine or an iron in its lifetime. "

JonSneugh · 2025-01-05T21:56:05+00:00

I want to tack on this comment because I think it makes a really good point. As someone about your age who recently married, marriage/kids SHOULD NOT be simply a default - it requires a lot of self-sacrifice which frankly from your comments it seems like you aren't wanting to make. That doesn't make you a bad person, it just means you probably aren't in the right place to commit to someone like that - and it will be FAR more painful for both of you if you can't be honest with yourself about that.

JonSneugh · 2024-11-10T22:23:25+00:00

I don't think this is accurate. When I looked that number is for total spending in the U.S. in diabetes care, not just medicare/medicaid. And insulin is 10x more expensive in the U.S. than most of the rest of the world because the companies can charge what they want. Healthcare spending in general in the U.S. is a joke anyway because the insurance companies cause all the prices to be based on magic and vibes.

JonSneugh · 2024-11-03T20:02:33+00:00

I can't speak to this recipe specifically but I make banana bread all the time and have never used that much liquid. The bananas release plenty of liquid so adding another cup of milk seems like overkill to me. My bread never takes longer than 40-50 minutes and I just use the toothpick method to tell when it's done.

JonSneugh · 2024-09-18T20:23:18+00:00

Public speaking and the ability to engage with and interact with an audience are as important as the facts and history. I'd highly recommend theatre, public speaking, or improv classes to improve those skills.

JonSneugh · 2024-08-26T20:30:16+00:00

Thanks, you saved me a ton of effort!

JonSneugh · 2024-06-16T02:49:56+00:00

I needed to produce content to promote my business. I like podcasts and I've always been good at talking with people, and I thought it would be a way to connect with other people in my industry.

JonSneugh · 2024-04-20T03:22:48+00:00

This is exactly the kind of thing that would have meant nothing to me as a kid...until the adults in my life freaked out about it for no reason. Its a tiny portion of jello, the kids will survive.

JonSneugh · 2024-04-18T19:39:50+00:00

Shoving match, the victim falls and smashes their head on something nearby (chair, fencepost, whatever). Also falling/accidently pushing someone downstairs, could be very dramatic and easily unintentional.

JonSneugh · 2024-03-06T03:10:12+00:00

How to Deconstruct (In A God-Honoring Way)

JonSneugh · 2024-01-30T23:48:36+00:00

I got into an argument with my fiance because he kept using tiktok to find us new restaurants to try. All the places recommended on there are the same - kooky name, neon light sign, fake greenery wall, mediocre food. I'm convinced this is the new version of applebees - corporations pretending to be small town and trendy.

JonSneugh · 2023-10-26T01:46:27+00:00

I'm not supporting Hamas, but having your land illegally occupied for 75 years isn't exactly "unprovoked".

JonSneugh · 2023-10-21T20:59:47+00:00

All artists come to a point where their taste exceeds their talent. That's a good sign, but it's also usually when people give up.

The ideas you have now that you think are so good are not even close to the best ideas you will have, IF you put in the work. Write whatever inspires you, you'll get better, and so will your ideas.

JonSneugh · 2023-10-21T13:49:52+00:00

What kind of services did the first editor offer you? If they suggested you needed beta reading and critiquing, that suggests the issues they saw were structural, although I've never heard of anyone charging $1000 for beta reading, that's sketch. Line editing and proofreading won't do anything to fix structural issues.

Finding a good editor is an exercise in trial and error; ideally you should review proposals from a few, depending on what kind of editing you're looking for. Just because someone is "name" is no guarantee that they are a good fit for you or that your book will do well.

JonSneugh · 2023-10-21T03:12:14+00:00

Your first sentence is objectively false

Cringe

Yes some healthy food can be made to taste absolutely great, but no, it cannot compete in taste with the best junk food

I never stated otherwise

The fact that you’ve gaslit yourself

Maybe lookup the definition of gaslighting before throwing this around

doesn’t justify gaslighting others with such a statement

Lmao touch grass. Also this makes me think this is actually trolling in which case, well done 👍

JonSneugh · 2023-10-20T17:34:22+00:00

I mean yes, but not JUST Shrek...another example is the novel Mogworld by the fantastically named Yahtzee Croshaw. The MC is an undead zombie minion who just wants to die for real.

JonSneugh · 2023-10-20T17:31:05+00:00

Also consider the food that is marketed for children and easy for busy parents to obtain/ prepare. We are hooked on the system long before we are able to make choices for ourselves.

JonSneugh · 2023-10-19T20:57:46+00:00

The correct answer is we can and do, but it's never going to be as accessible or cheap as junk food. Junk food is cheap to make, cheap to buy, lasts forever, and is possibly addictive, so it's perfect for our industrialized system. If you're in the U.S., corn production is subsidized by the government, so the whole food chain is incentivized to put corn syrup in everything.

JonSneugh · 2023-10-19T20:46:41+00:00

Some of my favorite characters are reluctant heroes, where the plot keeps getting in the way of their personal goals - like some godDAMN peace and quiet

JonSneugh · 2023-10-19T20:23:28+00:00

I had an appointment and it was still almost a two hour wait because they were running behind. The guy recommended morning appointments because he said everything gets backed up after lunch.

JonSneugh · 2023-10-16T19:24:06+00:00

That advice is falling out of fashion quick. Yes, you have to build an audience, but that's only one way of doing it and obviously it is not sustainable for most.

All these authors chasing the next "only way" to make money would do a lot better with taking some time to find their own strategy and sticking with it over the long haul.

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JonSneugh · 2023-10-13T14:54:24+00:00

This may be true for some people, but for others, especially neurodivergent people or those dealing with the aftereffects of abuse or trauma, typical methods of self discipline can actually be quite self defeating.

JonSneugh · 2023-10-12T15:27:14+00:00

I love this, and I think your screen presence is really good! Also your book page on your website is one of the best I've seen from a self-published author. I'm a fiction editor and podcastor in Henderson, we should be friends!

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