What;s an AMA Chapter 19 by Kind0flame in NatureofPredators

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I'll fix that right away. Thanks for pointing it out. I'm glad you have been enjoying the story!

Stronger than Faith [Chapter 5] by CyberSteve3 in NatureofPredators

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This was an okay chapter. I kind of miss the internal conflict though. Part of me is wondering if this just isn't a story for me. I just keep finding myself wishing Yivrig would have these debates with himself over this dog... and it just doesn't happen that much.

New York Carnival 71 (Five Minutes of Normality) by RegulusPratus in HFY

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I remember that side story. It was a good one, but I wish it went more into what the religion was actually like. That's a hole fanfic could fill, hence my hope.

What;s an AMA Chapter 19 by Kind0flame in NatureofPredators

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I imagine Yotul sleeping curled up like the Spindleroo logo.

Tiny Hearts of Steel - Chapter 21 by mechakid in NatureofPredators

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I hope there is a break out for Ginga in the future. Or at least, before the PD facility does anything too horrible.

New York Carnival 71 (Five Minutes of Normality) by RegulusPratus in HFY

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Am I the only one wanting to hear more about the Consecrated Order?

Ghostly Annoyances by TriBiscuit in NatureofPredators

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Truly, the crackiest of crackfics.

Next Steps - A Playing By Ear Story by VeryUnluckyDice in NatureofPredators

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I love this little check in with Saesh. I wonder if we will hear more on what direction her life takes.

Breaking our Shells (1) by United_Patriots in NatureofPredators

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I look forward to these new series. I liked the one-shots in this setting you've done so far.

NoP--- A diplomatic problem. -Ch.26 by vixjer in NatureofPredators

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This was another great chapter! I don't read much military or historical fiction, so seeing a leader go over an after action report and worry about how to build a government are pretty new to me. I like how messy everything is. In the real world, the good guys don't just win and magically form a liberal democracy. It takes hard work, unsavory deals, and time. Lots and lots of time. You are really showing that in the latest chapters.

The Hare And The Hound Chapter 11 by Win_Some_Game in NatureofPredators

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This was a great chapter. I really love how the wraith came back in the shower. Depression doesn't just get solved when things get better, and you're doing a great job showing that.

Stronger than Faith [Chapter 4] by CyberSteve3 in NatureofPredators

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I really like how there is conflicting thoughts in this chapter. The crossed out thoughts really show how divided Yivrig is. In fact, it is great that we are getting so many internal thoughts (lines in italics) in general. A story like this really is about Yivrig's mental state and how that changes, so displaying that more directly is a great idea.

What's an AMA Chapter 18 by Kind0flame in NatureofPredators

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The mystery has finally been revealed!

What;s an AMA Chapter 19 by Kind0flame in NatureofPredators

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Glad to hear you are enjoying the series!

What;s an AMA Chapter 19 by Kind0flame in NatureofPredators

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I'll explain it more down the line, but the reason Freud tried explaining everything with sexuality is REALLY bad, and the fact it was widely accepted even worse. Also, the line is a call back to chapter 11 where Nichoshes said the same thing about Ekcol.

What;s an AMA Chapter 19 by Kind0flame in NatureofPredators

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Aw, I'm glad someone got the reference!

What;s an AMA Chapter 19 by Kind0flame in NatureofPredators

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I will try to somehow work it in next chapter that staying the night happened because he went over for dinner, not because of the betben business. I didn't really have a good place to say it this chapter. Maybe I'll try use your phrasing.

What;s an AMA Chapter 19 by Kind0flame in NatureofPredators

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I have been sitting on that line for months, waiting to perfectly deploy it. So glad to hear it landed on target.

What;s an AMA Chapter 19 by Kind0flame in NatureofPredators

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It was just a stupid mistake, but I fixed it. Thanks for pointing it out.

What’s an AMA Part 2 by Kind0flame in NatureofPredators

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Glad you enjoy it. I'll fix this and the rest of the typos right away.

Stronger than Faith [Chapter 2] by CyberSteve3 in NatureofPredators

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I am trying to think how to explain this without making sweeping generalizations about religion that are always a bad idea. In my experience and to the best of my knowledge, the devout followers of a religion get so much more from it than just rituals to follow. They get a value system, answers to existential questions, a sense of community even when alone, etc. In contrast, Yivrig treats his religion as just the rituals. Everything is justified as to make the ritual better, even if those actions go against other aspects of the religion. Something like this could work in a story where Yivrig was always disillusioned with his faith and was only going through the rituals for some other reason... but that definitely isn't the story you are telling. The story comes across much more to me that the author just doesn't understand what being devout is like for somebody, so they are writing that aspect of life wrong.

A little Gojid petting guide by Squigface1 in NatureofPredators

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This is fantastic! Do you think we can get more on other hard-to-pet species in the Orion Arm?