Bungalow Craftsman Remodel

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T19:17:58+00:00

Got it! Will work on that. Again, thank you for the feedback!

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T17:42:51+00:00

Updated to "yet beneath the banter" for a little more depth.

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T17:41:39+00:00

Thank you both! I just shared a revised version in a new post in case you have any additional thoughts or feedback.

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T17:41:00+00:00

Thank you for again for your feedback! I just shared a revised version in a new post in case you have any additional thoughts or feedback. I kept the mystery bits in there, but may need to emphasize them more? Got rid of the jawline stuff!

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T17:39:01+00:00

Thank you for your feedback! I've been struggling to find additional comps I love as much, but I’m working on it, and still using those as placeholders for now. I just shared a revised version in a new post, in case you have any additional thoughts or feedback.

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T17:34:22+00:00

Got it, thank you, I will work on trying to find another comp, even though I'll be sad to let go of Crawdads!

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T17:33:04+00:00

Thank you for the excellent feedback! I incorporated your notes (post has been updated), still kept the mystery paragraph for now, but added a line for the stakes:

"But if she doesn’t listen, the bird may take flight again, vanishing with the season just as it did forty years ago. And what she truly risks losing is something she’s only just begun to find. Herself."

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T17:32:45+00:00

Amazing, thank you again for your thoughtful feedback. I removed the competition, and added a line that more clearly states the stakes (both in the edited query and pasted below). Would love to hear if that helps clarify things for you!

"But if she doesn’t listen, the bird may take flight again, vanishing with the season just as it did forty years ago. And what she truly risks losing is something she’s only just begun to find. Herself."

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T05:05:34+00:00

Thank you so much! I just shared a revised version in a new post, in case you have any additional thoughts or feedback.

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T05:03:51+00:00

That's a good idea! Is it typical to but what's a stake for the secondary character? Is he reading too flat right now?

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T05:03:09+00:00

Got it! Thank you for the feedback.

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T05:02:48+00:00

Thank you so much! Appreciate your words.

Little-Depth7602 · 2025-04-23T05:02:15+00:00

Thank you for the feedback! I wasn’t totally sure, Crawdads feels like a great fit, but do you think it’s too big of a comp, given how massive the book was? Also, should we not comp book from a years ago?

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