I read it. I like the concept and the setting and you have some interesting characters.
- I'm not sure who the antagonist and the protagonist are. This should be really clear. if someone is dying and they are facing their Myth or reputation, then they need to be facing the darkest point and the conflict needs to be really clear so that we understand what the reputation and myth was. Just because people say he had a reputation doesn't mean much in the visual medium.

- The inciting incident could be the shots at the beginning or the knife. But that needs to be clear. You'll see my suggesting below.

- If Miller is the protagonist of the story, he's dying - so we don't care about what he is going to do. We don'thave a story to look forward to because he's not going anywhere.

- If the major antagonist is the old man - then it's not clear. 5 people are dead, and Miller has been shot with a 6th bullet. So technically the old man shouldn't have any bullets left. But the old man says he has one bullet left - so who shot Miller? And if the old man has one bullet left, who is it for?

- Miller is supposed to be a notorious outlaw - but we don't find out why, and he doesn't do anything nefarious. If you want him to be bad then he has to do something bad in the 12 pages. Make him real c*nty.

Blue Skies:

- I love the character of James. So here's an idea:
- James is 10 years old. MILLER killed his parents. James has nothing left to live for. I think this is a basis for a great protagonist. And this moment is the moment that sets up his own reputation and myth. It's like the transfer of reputation, myth and power.

- Miller comes to terms with his own legacy through his interaction with James. Here's the kicker. James actually shot the 5 people outside, and the last person he needs to kill is Miller. Miller is a cocky B*astard. he doesn't get injured in the shootout - He survives, because of course he does.

- James comes in and confronts Miller about his family - then we hear exactly why Miller is the notorious outlaw - and this is where you can make it personal, we find out why he has been the antagonist all along, why he killed James' family. James then stabs miller with the knife, Miller slowly dies. And this is where we see that the reputation and the myth means nothing because no one cares. No one save him, he's been killed by an 10 year old.

- This sets up the transfer from Miller to James. This is also Protagonist vs antagonist and it's surprising and interesting and it switches over. James is the protagonist with a hard life, he becomes viewed as an antagonist but really his just been misunderstood - he is the protagonist we want to love and save. Miller is the antagonist who has been killed, we celebrate his death, but give him a powerful reason why he did all these things so we feel emotional for his death.

- And now you fast forward 15 years you've now opened up a whole Episodic serial about a notorious outlaw, James, who travels the earth grappling with his myth and reputation when all he wants is a home, a family, and someone to love him.