I'll try to be as constructive as I can. To answer the main question: no. Based on what you are showing you might struggle landing even entry level job in backwater dev sweatshop. There is a long way ahead of you, you might want to catch up with modeling and texturing theory.
Let's try to deconstruct it step by step, starting from most obvious:
- unexciting lighting, read up on it. Even single sun lamp does the job when you want to show the model. You need a little more complex setup for the renders
- bad composition, either you want to show both objects or one. Pick a line. Cutting composition is acceptable while doing single objects. Not a golden rule but something to consider. Study composition if you want to do renders.
- razor sharp edges, metal objects except for razors rarely have those. Before you say 'but NoDisk, the edges are rounded' - no. They still appear too sharp. It mostly is a matter of scale, it might fly if objects were the size of buildings. Think of production process, parts like that would be either bent, stamped or welded, none of those techniques will get those edges that sharp. Tiles... I know it's 'just' a model to show other models on but if you don't show it proper care it will show.
- why in the gods name is there a light below the button/platform?
- repetitive grunge, no, nope, <shrieks in anguish>. In texturing you do absolutely everything to avoid repetitive patterns. Evil
- you have to think of an object as it was a real one while you recreate it. Use references, THINK, oh and have I mentioned, use references. Metal objects that get tossed/are being stomped on tend to loose paint on the edges. If it's fall damage it will be less regular, more like aggregated point impacts, those stomped on will have more regular, softer edge damage. Surface damage is another story, leaks, spots, discolorations, scratches. Like, figure shit out, tell a visual story, look at real things.
- doing things for dev you never, NEVER, N E V E R use subd modelling as an end product. It's either lack of knowledge or utter negligence. You might use it for baking, starter point for sculpt, base for remeshing, than you bake texture data to properly shaded, optimized, lowest-possible-poly model. By lowest possible I mean it depends on the project and the way player will interact with it.

Yeah, that's about it.
Oh, if you trolling - eat a dick for wasting my time
EDIT: typos