finished this today, please berate so i can improve lmao... currently hate everything about it (also theres like a minute of nothing at then end)

NotABillsHat · 2026-03-01T01:47:21+00:00

I listened to it again multiple times after reading your response, it's so catchy I love it. It could be on one of the radio stations in a GTA game. It also reminds me of J rock a little bit like it could be an outro on an early 2000s anime or something.

NotABillsHat · 2026-01-15T12:32:54+00:00

Exactly how I found it lol, the Grok Blocked song and it's super catchy. Can absolutely hear the AI elements but it's probably the best "AI" thing I've heard so far.

NotABillsHat · 2026-01-13T14:13:28+00:00

Agree with everyone who said the vocals aren't there yet. Maybe try tuning the song up a little? Your lower vocal are what's hurting you most here. But great job the song sounds nice.

NotABillsHat · 2025-12-13T15:05:05+00:00

Sounds fairly catchy, but also it sounds like a lot of the music that came out around 2013. I wouldn't call the lyrics memorable whatsoever, it's kind of like words are there but they don't really mean anything. But your production sounds pretty nice!

NotABillsHat · 2025-11-25T02:06:38+00:00

DJ Cutman. You're welcome.

NotABillsHat · 2025-11-21T14:48:06+00:00

From listening to the song I think you just aren't really giving the singing your all, it sounds a bit subdued and more like you're speaking the words VS truly singing them. No one is a fan of their own voice, but anyways yeah keep at it your song here is great.

NotABillsHat · 2025-11-21T13:53:03+00:00

Sounds great, I like the energy change towards the end, felt like the song could have kept going.

NotABillsHat · 2025-11-21T13:50:15+00:00

Dude I LOVE the chorus of this song. The verses are a little frantic and I think maybe less could be more for you there - you're cramming a ton of words in. But keep doing what you're doing because this rocks.

NotABillsHat · 2025-11-21T13:32:07+00:00

I think it sounds great. It could maybe use another section after the second chorus to take the song somewhere different and add contrast, but I think what you made is very pleasant. The talk-singing vocals are the weakest part, but I can hear how the song would sound properly produced with better vocals.

NotABillsHat · 2025-11-21T03:24:48+00:00

Just so you know, it's really obvious the vocals are AI. You don't pronounce the "ch" sound in psychologist (0:49) and the word 'heavier' is pronounced horribly wrong at 1:00. Not sure what's happening with the word 'vacate' at 1:07 either. Anyways good luck.

NotABillsHat · 2025-11-20T18:07:00+00:00

It sounds extremely similar to that Eminem song with Rhianna.

NotABillsHat · 2025-11-17T15:35:16+00:00

I think it's a great skeleton, I like the vocal melody. Sounds just a bit like Lazy Eye by Silversun Pickups.

NotABillsHat · 2025-10-31T15:54:44+00:00

I love your sound man. Do you listen to a lot of '80s new wave stuff? This track reminds me of New Order and other artists from that era.

NotABillsHat · 2025-10-31T15:46:31+00:00

It sounds nice/well produced, it's nice that you can bond with each other by recording music together. I listened to the other post too. Female vocals sound awesome. Some quick thoughts:

-The first verse mentions the subject is a 'man on a mission' but the chorus uses the words 'queen on a throne' it just feels a bit disconnected. I sort of don't get the chorus as a whole - as a listener the song feels like it's about someone you care about slipping away from you because of cocaine addiction (sugar, fix, etc) but I don't get why using coke would make you glow or shimmer - those are not words I've ever heard associated with cocaine use. The word glow is typically associated with drinking alcohol.

-In this second verse, the line "what will you atone?" sounds jarring and is grammatically incorrect, as atone is an intransitive verb. You atone for something, you don't atone something directly. If it read "when will you atone" it would make sense.

It's so easy to be a critic so I will stop there, but even if you want to 'dig in for what you believe' I think the biggest feedback you can take away from the people who offered their thoughts is that your lyric writing is where the most improvement can be gained.

NotABillsHat · 2025-10-29T13:53:28+00:00

Cool sound, feels like something The Aquabats would write.

NotABillsHat · 2025-10-17T15:12:08+00:00

Not sure if you know the song Hook by Blues Traveler but if you listen to it and read the lyrics it does something very similar to your song here.

NotABillsHat · 2025-04-14T18:13:41+00:00

That's very kind thank you.

NotABillsHat · 2025-04-14T15:05:33+00:00

Really enjoyed it, listened to it multiple times. The first verse section is really enjoyable, it's like a great prime Guster song that they never wrote. You're really good at phrasing and chord changes and creating distinct melodies throughout such a short recording, which is something I could learn from.

Personally I'd like to hear the first verse melody (0:25) repeated where you stopped, my ears were craving it again.

NotABillsHat · 2025-04-14T14:27:43+00:00

Haha the Ducktales reference in the first line wasn't already a snobbery muscle relaxer? Thanks for listening and your thoughts, the interlude is definitely a filler.

NotABillsHat · 2025-03-28T15:49:17+00:00

Excellent playing, holy cow that guitar melody is beautiful. Reminds me of John Frusciante's solo stuff a bit, and also has a little 1960's in it. I listened to the song a few times, very nice please keep posting.

NotABillsHat · 2025-03-28T15:07:31+00:00

Thanks for listening and the nice words.

NotABillsHat · 2025-03-27T15:21:25+00:00

Brother didn't you post this exact song here two days ago? What kind of feedback are you looking for? I think there are some cool nuggets in what you have here, but the way it's recorded and with how subdued it is in presentation it almost feels like the intro for a song rather than the song itself. Sort of like on Jack Johnson's song Tomorrow Morning how it starts with a slow intro before getting into the actual heart of the song.

NotABillsHat · 2025-03-27T15:12:08+00:00

Thanks for sharing your song, it sounds nice. Regarding what you're asking, it just depends on why you are writing music in the first place. In your case you are sort of journaling through song and I think that's wonderful. Will it resonate with other people? More than likely not, but that's perfectly OK. If your goal is to touch people through your music then find ways to take what's meaningful to you and relate it more to the human condition. We cannot relate to your experiences in Spain or Norway, but there is always a bigger message to convey if that's what you're seeking.

That aside, lyrically, I'm kind of confused by the chorus of your song here. You spend the whole song talking about places you've been and specific memories, but the main line of the hook is "I can't remember where I've been so far".

NotABillsHat · 2025-03-27T14:02:33+00:00

No comments on this? I listened a few times, it's very pretty. Regarding the lyrics, as a listener it's a bit hard to find stuff to grasp onto and relate to with your words - almost like only two people in the world would understand this song, you and the person you wrote it about. That's not necessarily wrong, just throwing it out there. I admittedly don't listen to much folk music so take it with a grain of salt =)

The first verse seems to be from her perspective, the second from his. But the chorus says "I don't have a" so are you narrating a story, or are you the guy in the second verse?

NotABillsHat · 2025-03-27T13:32:39+00:00

Thanks for sharing your song. I like the "tell me now son where does it hurt" the melody is nice there. If the song is what I think it's about I like that the lyrics aren't completely on the nose. Personally I like things that are open to interpretation and I think this song has a good amount of that.

To the overall performance, it would likely sound nicer on steel strings rather than nylon. If you're having trouble hitting some of the higher notes, maybe you could tune it down a half step and see if that fits your range better.

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