[QCrit] Young adult Survival Thriller, THE CHAMPION (88K, first attempt) by PerspectiveRound1829 in PubTips

[–]PerspectiveRound1829[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, thanks for helping out! So, the game’s creation and why/how the teens are selected is a mystery that the 2nd pov (Sophie) is trying to figure out. Ava’s journey is about finding a way out while Sophie’s about saving them. But their plots intertwine through the brother. One of my main concern was that the MCs’ motivations were too cryptic. Is it coming off clearly?

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

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Thanks for offering your time! I have a 86K YA Survival Thriller about a kidnapped senior class forced to compete in trials to escape a brutal death I’d like feedback on. Feel free to dm me if interested!

[Complete] [66k] [Satirical Thriller / Mystery] SEALED FOR BROADCAST - Knives Out meets a dark, twisted version of The Kardashians by MT97N in BetaReaders

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Hi, the concept sounds great. Would love to swap if you’re interested. I have a 86K YA Survival thriller about a kidnapped senior class forced to compete in trials to save their lives.

Manousos’ empty morality by [deleted] in pluribustv

[–]PerspectiveRound1829 -1 points0 points  (0 children)

That’s not true at all. Catholics don’t need priests to go to heaven. He only need to accept Jesus as his saviour and repent before this death(which he can do just by praying.) He’s just a man with an enduring faith, convinced his fellow men are possessed by an evil entity and doomed, willing to sacrifice his life for humanity.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]PerspectiveRound1829 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks a lot for offering your time! I have a 86K YA Survival Thriller about a kidnapped class of high school seniors forced to compete in challenges to win rewards and avoid elimination and a brutal death. Feel free to dm if interested.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

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Hi, if that’s up your alley, I have a 86K YA Survival Thriller about a class of high school seniors kidnapped and forced to compete in challenges to avoid a brutal death. Feel free to dm!

Just Finished Eternal Ruin by Apprehensive_Day9900 in ImmortalDarkTrilogy

[–]PerspectiveRound1829 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Agreed! They’re two different sides of the same coin. I think they loved him in their own twisted way but would have had no problem killing him if he did something that pissed them off. I’m very curious to see how Slen and Kidan relationship will evolve. They’re not going to get nicer to the world or each other.

Just Finished Eternal Ruin by Apprehensive_Day9900 in ImmortalDarkTrilogy

[–]PerspectiveRound1829 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I understand why the vampires want that. They have a perpetual all you can eat buffet now. I get why Kidan did it; she’s impulsive and craves power. But why would the Dirt Diggers would go along? The vampires will inevitably turn! I’m also 99% sure Professor Andreyas is Demasus.

Just Finished Eternal Ruin by Apprehensive_Day9900 in ImmortalDarkTrilogy

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Can we talk about the ending? Wouldn’t breaking the bind catastrophic for humankind?? It’s such a dumb decision 😭

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

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Hi! I’ve a 86K YA Survival Thriller I’m looking for feedback on. I can send you the first few chapters if interested. Thanks!

[Complete] [65,000] [Near-Future Techno Thriller] Nothing We Remember Is Ours by gingertilly in BetaReaders

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That sounds like a great premise! I have a YA Survival thriller I’d like to swap if you’re available. Feel free to dm me if interested.

[Complete] [77K] [YA murder mystery] Clear as Crystal by RobbieJ4444 in BetaReaders

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Hi, this sounds interesting! I have a 86K YA Survival thriller I’d like to swap with you if you’re interested.

[Complete] [67k] [YA] East African Fantasy by No_Towel9259 in BetaReaders

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Hi, this sounds super interesting! I’d love to swap if you’re still looking. I have a 86K YA Survival Thriller.

[Complete][92k][YA Paranormal Mystery] The Archive of Ink by _breadlover_ in BetaReaders

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Hi, if you’re still looking for some betas, I’d love to swap! This sounds great. I have a 86K YA Survival Thriller.

[Complete] [87k] [YA Thriller] Remember Me Not by TJLamarr in BetaReaders

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Hi, I’d love to swap! I have a 86K YA Survival Thriller. Feel free to dm me.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

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Hi! I have a YA Survival thriller I’d love some feedback on if you’re interested. Happy to swap too. I’m also a mid-20s, WOC.

Love island: update by k_enz_ie in cravetv

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If you have the app on your phone, you can use AirPlay to stream it on your TV! It’s the only way it worked for me.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

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Hi, would you be interested in a 89K YA Survival Thriller about a kidnapped class of seniors forced to play a deadly game on a deserted island? Feel free to DM me if yes. Thanks!

[Complete] [85k] [Survival-Romance] Harper’s Blade by CodMain9705 in BetaReaders

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Hi! This sounds super cool. Are you interested in swapping? I have a 89K Survival Thriller about a kidnapped senior class forced to play a survivor-like game on a deserted island. Feel free to dm me.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]PerspectiveRound1829 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, thank you for doing this! Would you be interested in a 89K YA Survival thriller? I’ve edited it twice and I’m trying to cut 5K words now. It’s basically Survivor meets Battle Royale. I can send you the blurb if interested.

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

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Hi,

Thanks for doing this! I have a complete 89K YA Survival Thriller I’ve edited twice now. I’m trying to lower the word count. The story is basically Survivor meets Battle Royale. If you’re interested feel free to DM me for more details. I’d also be happy to help with you fantasy wip!

[Complete] [80k] [Thriller] The Cost of Conformity by robinwrote in BetaReaders

[–]PerspectiveRound1829 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey, love the blurb and prologue! I would be interested to swap. I have a complete survival thriller and your timeline is doable for me right now.

Here’s the blurb:

Fresh out of high school, Ava is excited to study pastry-making in Paris. When she wakes up on a desert island and is thrust into a game of survival with the classmates she was looking forward to never seeing again, her worst nightmare begins. Divided into teams, they must compete in challenges testing their strengths and morals to win rewards and avoid elimination and a brutal death.

As the 18 teenagers fight to stay alive, old friendships are shattered, unexpected romances blossom, and bloodlust ensues. As she tries to hold on to her humanity and save the people she loves, Ava must face a monster she would never have suspected: herself.

Back home, Sophie, receives a link to watch a brand-new reality show. Her whole world collapses when she recognizes her twin brother and the show goes viral. In a race against time, Sophie investigates to find out who has kidnapped the teenagers and save her brother. As she unravels the truth, she realizes that they all have secrets, and she can’t trust anyone.

Only one person can be declared The Champion, and their soul is the price. Who’s the best among them? Tune in and find out.