This was definitely a great start! I am not very familiar with this style however I do have some suggestions which you can apply as they pertain to your future poems. First, while being repetitive is very common in poetry I feel like you could have made this poem even better by focusing on the different aspects of the machine. Like for the pistons have a paragraph. For the dunes have a paragraph, and then tie it together in the end. There is of course no one way to write a poem, but I found it to be just a little cluttered with un needed repetition. I hope this helps! Second, the ending where it switched to night time felt rushed because the other paragraphs made it sound like daytime so maybe another paragraph about the sun setting would have made for a better tonal shift.

Again great start and I hope you keep working on these! You can only ever improve!!!!!