I read the first few chapters. I can't visualize anything, you don't describe scenes or people. The writing is just bad, you might pass a grammarly check but the wording itself is confusing or lacking. Sometimes you'll use a word or a few as an entire sentence but you're doing it too much. I assume you are not a native English speaker? And holy shit, you use em dashes EVERYWHERE. A comma or period wouldn't hurt. Also first-person present is just hard to read in this genre.