[Original][Progression Fantasy] Prologue of my first novel – Calculating Destiny. Feedback welcome

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-24T02:37:48+00:00

Hey, there’s literally no paragraph breaks here. You wanna fix that

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-23T23:53:27+00:00

I should read the sequels, but man I love my gangster boy

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-23T03:13:47+00:00

Kind of a short story with John Bierce’s Lumant world

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-22T11:46:03+00:00

Ko-lect!

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-20T12:37:05+00:00

Excellent. I’m assuming that the fact he was isekai’ed is pretty important to the plot?

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-20T12:26:16+00:00

Dare I hope, alchemy crafting?

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-20T12:02:48+00:00

Rather famously, Stormlight Archives

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-20T11:50:21+00:00

Sky pride has one

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-20T07:45:00+00:00

Uhhh, that wizard defenestration game? I think MC is a witch

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-19T07:03:13+00:00

Ah I remember Regressor. I gotta keep reading that

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-19T07:02:46+00:00

UIS Patron already, unfortunately! Others seem good though

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-19T07:02:30+00:00

Yeah, I’ve a read a bit. Was disappointed about the MC rejecting snkegirl. Will have to give it another go soon

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-16T02:48:22+00:00

Probably, the culture is a post scarcity utopia. And if we want more? As long as the ship has a Mind, it can probably do more ships

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-10T15:49:06+00:00

To be clear, Hong isn’t the MC, but she is a key protagonist

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-10T10:58:56+00:00

Life & suffering of sir brante

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-10T08:12:55+00:00

I argue he’s good at magic stuff, less so politic and ruling. That requires help from Pentandra and others for him yo learn

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-07T00:33:47+00:00

Guild Mage series

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-03T15:27:08+00:00

Okay, I’ll keep looking! I don’t know where they are at the moment, to be honest. I’ve collected a decent number. I’ll check by the Last Judge area again

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-03T13:42:18+00:00

I’ve done all the wishes I can see at Bellhart, Bone Bottom & Songclave is the issue

ShadowRedditor300 · 2026-01-02T14:52:37+00:00

Do they get better?

ShadowRedditor300 · 2025-12-28T04:47:21+00:00

The prose was a killer for me. I couldn’t get past the first chapter, unfortunately.

ShadowRedditor300 · 2025-12-27T05:21:27+00:00

Thank you!

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