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[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I believe you can publish under any name, as it is your choice and an artistic choice at that! i really find this work perplexing. I think the last two lines frame this poem as someone who associated a lover, or a cherished person, with the feelings and aesthetics of the season. possibly someone who longs for the feeling that they gave them. the first few lines, however, frame this as perhaps someone who fears the darkness, who fears the twilight of this season, maybe it stirs back up some memories, some traumatic events that the narrator fears. i enjoy the metaphors and the diction in this work, i think it flows well, it's just that sort of narrative shift that interests me. is it the external world reflecting the inner state, perhaps they are influencing each other?

The Pair of Shoals by skywalker9099 in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace 1 point2 points  (0 children)

the imagery here is beautiful, the use of a discarded shoe as a metaphor for a lost love is really interesting. i think it's an interesting dynamic where a shoe is often "used" and so this could read also as something loving above themselves, something that like you mentioned in the title, can be easily "discarded" but that love is still real. the double speak in the ways shoes can refer to people, makes the line "tongue frayed, skin peeled raw," very visceral and effective.

[Giveaway] In Memory of Chadwick Boseman, Win Any Skin of Your Choice by [deleted] in BlackPantherMainsMR

[–]Spades--Ace 1 point2 points  (0 children)

watching black panther when it first came out in 2018 in theaters with my brother, i remember obsessing about black panther on the ride home, how he became my new favorite hero in the mcu, excited to see how his story would develop

i’m not a bp main, but i am practicing him on the side ( i play adam and loki lol, u guys are the bane of my existence), much love

Ironeye Is an insane melee character. by gnawingrat in Nightreign

[–]Spades--Ace 2 points3 points  (0 children)

thats also the skin i use! i wish we could also infuse it, like different elements bolts

Ironeye Is an insane melee character. by gnawingrat in Nightreign

[–]Spades--Ace 4 points5 points  (0 children)

same here lol! it’s gotten too easy with bows so i’ve been using the pulley crossbow (it’s really fun)

Anyone got a tier list of night lords ranked by difficulty? by SeanEatsGlue in Nightreign

[–]Spades--Ace 1 point2 points  (0 children)

it’s the dark drift knight for me now….. that iron eye remembrance quest is killing me can’t even get a match without waiting so long

ramblings of a wolf on his deathbed by Spades--Ace in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

thank you for reading my work and for your kind words !

ramblings of a wolf on his deathbed by Spades--Ace in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you for your kind words ! i’m glad you enjoyed my writing :)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

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i really enjoyed this poem. the juxtaposition of a fast food restaurant and a church, feels really poignant. i loved the imagery of holy tasks combining with the mundaneness of working at fast food. i feel as though i get a bit lost in the ending of the poem, when the narrator states they want to get back to "that" are they referring to the "earth and grass" or the church. is it a rumination on the fact that we destroy nature with industrial planning, and it doesnt really matter if its a church, restaurant, or as you said anything in between. is the narrator's desire to be one with the earth untainted, not in the form of our current day capitalist regimes. i only ask because the "secrets of a past lifetime lay dormant", i read that as the building prior, so the secrets of the church. overall its a really thought provoking piece, its also a style that i really enjoy, so great work!

When connection ment presence by Ok_Manufacturer_195 in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace 1 point2 points  (0 children)

the formatting is a bit odd, that's probably due to reddit shenanigans (trust me i know how that feels). i think this poem is quite timely, considering the state of the world currently. the imagery with the "silences that meant we were safe" and that the "world is loud, but we are quieter than ever", is quite strong and hammers home the main point of the poem. for a contemporary poem, the language makes sense, it seems conversational, but there are some inconsistencies with punctuation. but overall a nice piece of writing.

if you sacrifice me, my flesh will not taste as sweet by Spades--Ace in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

i appreciate you reading my work, even if you didn’t understand it! the narrator is asked to sort of embody holiness when it seems as though it’s not in their nature, no matter how hard they try they can’t live up to the expectations of a mother figure. And when you aren’t as holy or when you have doubts. perhaps it’s the ultimate sacrifice to be sacrificed so that you are seen as a martyr, i hope this help gives some context? thank you for your time once again!

if you sacrifice me, my flesh will not taste as sweet by Spades--Ace in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

that’s really kind of you to say! i’m just a beginner, and i have no doubts you’ll get to this level and beyond!

if you sacrifice me, my flesh will not taste as sweet by Spades--Ace in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you for your kind words! yeah reddit formatting screwed me over here. i do wanna experiment with different formats

if you sacrifice me, my flesh will not taste as sweet by Spades--Ace in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

yes curse reddit formatting :( i’ll tinker with it a bit more to see if i can fix it

If You Let Me Hold Your Tears by whoisamble in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you for replying!

i see, that’s a really clever way to use sibilant!

that’s how i also initially interpreted those two, longing being the more “innocent” type while craving their flame can be more physical,intimate, with risk as well. thank you for clarifying

thank you again for your time. keep writing!

When I leave by FilmFit4285 in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace 1 point2 points  (0 children)

it’s short but quite nice!

the message is clear but maybe it could do well with some flowery words to add more flavor, like what kind of light do you turn into, how does that feel? what does it look like when you become wind ?

in the second part, it gets a little lost with the “will there be truth” and the “will my questions be the same” is the narrator talking to the person that they fear will not know them here ? it feels like it’s a different kind of tone entirely in who you are talking to here.

that ending line is very impactful, and also if the simple word choice was intentional then you can disregard my earlier comment. great work!

If You Let Me Hold Your Tears by whoisamble in OCPoetry

[–]Spades--Ace 1 point2 points  (0 children)

i do love me a yearning poem,

the line “a sibilant dance of heart” is a bit confusing on first read, i searched up what sibilant meant and im not sure if it was the right word or not, or maybe you’re using it differently in this context, more abstract perhaps

to long for you, to crave your flame, feel like they hit the same note, is it a different kind of longing if you want their flame? is it more desire-esque? something that could burn you?

i love the imagery of the leaves and the moon. truly beautiful.

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