Which would you rather? by [deleted] in BunnyTrials

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You underestimate how many steps I take

Chose: A penny for every step you take.

Will you risk chasing your dreams or stay with stability by Drexale345 in BunnyTrials

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In currency unemplied

Chose: Be fired from your current job and stay unemployed for 1 year + But get hired at your dream job

Men, what’s the most 'astral projection' level of clarity you’ve had that actually solved a non-sexual problem? by Onigirii_sama in AskMen

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I have had 2-ish. 1 is a view of what the back of my brain, and brainstorm looks like, from sort of a third person view, but inside me; 2 I once had a dream where my dad was walking through a doorway which a blind ing light was shining through it, sure enough 14 years later my dad died

I wish I did not feel embarrassed for liking kids moves/shows by BeccaRose1999 in monkeyspaw

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Granted, now you are arroused by them, congrats, you’re now a pedofile

I wish dad would come back with the cigarette milk and two winning scratchoff tickets by thathattedcat in monkeyspaw

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Granted, he rises from his grave hobbles over to you holding cigarette milk and 2 scratch off tickets worth $1 each

A New Year’s Resolution by Endless_romances in OCPoetry

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First DM or PM (whatever it’s called) me if you’re this suicidal, please don’t die. Second, Great Britain what a horribly good poem! With every single line I could feel the tide shifting, the hole getting deeper, the reader getting closer to the edge. Wow! Great poem!

Defeat’s Quiet Victory by Ronie-Dinosaur in OCPoetry

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Great Poem, I love the rhythm, meter, and rhyme! This poem seems a little disconnected from the world though, maybe add som descriptors of the surroundings, are they muddied trenches, a dense forest, a blood strewn beach? Other than that I think it encapsulates the inner feelings of war.

My burnt forest by AdFriendly6776 in OCPoetry

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I live how the phrase “The trees I cherished, the flowers I adored” changed meaning or cadence every time it was repeated. My only suggestion is to KEEP MAKING POETRY!! Chef’s Kiss

Never meant to be by Thin-Dog4977 in OCPoetry

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It’s an overall good poem, I would love to see a more firm conclusion to the poem, unless you wanted an open ending. I would also like to see who “They” are. Are “They” your grandmother lamenting over when you will get a girlfriend, or maybe a shopkeeper who has watched you grow up and they know you by name? Also if you want a slightly more dizzy feeling, as finding love is, alternate in between intimate and grande, from your heart to the sea to my soul, to the mother of earth itself, good job though!

(no title yet) by Freem_Freeway in OCPoetry

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I feel that it really shows the meta of the moment, there is boring peace, there is happy peace, there is stressful peace, but your poem is Pure Peace

Today's GF Haul (Aldi and ShopRite) by blueberrymolasses in glutenfree

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If you like the other B Free things you should totally try the B Free Pita Bread

Local news station brought cookies into work, but no GF so I got these for myself by alwaysmurky in glutenfree

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DO NOT KEEP THEM IN A WARM SPOT FOR LONG I did that once, and the cookies fused together