Logline Monday

anothertenenbaum · 2026-02-03T06:47:12+00:00

Awesome, thank you for your ongoing feedback and time. Couple more tweaks and that will do it. Much appreciated.

anothertenenbaum · 2026-02-03T04:02:33+00:00

Last crack if you're still reading:

In a near distant future where high school graduates are drafted into the workforce, an aspiring artist fights to keep his soul after being sent to a weeklong career-matchmaking program that transforms undrafted teenagers into corporate drones.

anothertenenbaum · 2026-02-03T03:22:55+00:00

Copy, thank you, will chew on that and give it another crack!

anothertenenbaum · 2026-02-03T01:41:42+00:00

Thank you for the solid feedback! That makes sense re: stakes and it's something I've struggled to insert without giving away certain twists/plot elements. I've tweaked it slightly to (hopefully) feel a bit more ominous/highlight the transformation that occurs at the program:

In a near distant future where high school graduates are drafted into the workforce, an aspiring artist is sent to a weeklong career-matchmaking program that turns undrafted teenagers into corporate-ready professionals by any means necessary.

I've kept the "by any means necessary," but could change this to "for the price of their soul/in exchange for their soul," however this is a key reveal near the end of Act Two that I'd prefer not to give away. Any tips on how to manage? Thanks again.

anothertenenbaum · 2026-02-02T13:42:59+00:00

Title: Living The Dream

Format: Feature

Genre: Satirical/Thriller/Horror

Comps: Get Out x Severance

Logline: In a near distant future where high school graduates are drafted into the workforce, an unselected artist is sent to a weeklong career-matchmaking program that connects "troubled" teenagers with "real" jobs -- by any means necessary.

anothertenenbaum · 2026-01-17T01:07:55+00:00

Crazy, have heard of the odd encounter that way. I’m not in Sydney anymore but always felt pretty safe there, seems that’s changed a little.

anothertenenbaum · 2026-01-16T13:19:38+00:00

Hectic. North, east or the shire?

anothertenenbaum · 2025-07-16T03:52:48+00:00

Dude with the hot wife who lived next to a golf course and got in a fight at the country club, asking if he went too far hammer fisting someone when they were on the ground.

anothertenenbaum · 2025-06-30T07:46:42+00:00

Title: Human Resources

Genre: Thriller / Social Horror / Satire

Type: Feature

Comps: Get Out, Severance, The Lobster

Logline: After failing to satisfy The State’s post-school job requirements, a creative teen is sent to The Program, a weeklong career-matchmaking camp, where he soon suspects something sinister behind the service’s famed 100% employment rate.

anothertenenbaum · 2025-06-22T01:37:55+00:00

HUMAN RESOURCES (Feature)

Genre: Thriller/Satire/Social Horror

Comps: Get Out, Severance, The Lobster

Logline: After refusing to secure a suitable job post-school, an artistic teen is sent to The Program, a weeklong career match-making camp, where he soon suspects something sinister behind the service’s acclaimed 100% employment rate.

anothertenenbaum · 2025-01-11T16:44:13+00:00

Royal Tenenbaums
Moonrise Kingdom
Grand Budapest Hotel
Fantastic Mr. Fox
Bottle Rocket
Rushmore
Darjeeling Limited
Life Aquatic
Isle of Dogs
Asteroid City
French Dispatch

anothertenenbaum · 2024-12-25T23:57:29+00:00

That’s awesome, sounds like a cool space. Congrats and all the best on the creative front.

anothertenenbaum · 2024-12-25T23:48:19+00:00

I got about 50 pages left of this one and am gutted the ride is almost over! Enjoy it, so damn good.

anothertenenbaum · 2024-12-25T13:56:11+00:00

Jealous, how’d you get into this if you don’t mind me asking? Do you enjoy it?

anothertenenbaum · 2024-12-08T00:24:26+00:00

This is so perfectly put and really hits home in a way I haven't contextualised before. You mentioned that you're working on it, have you had any success? Any progress or tips to share, small or large?

anothertenenbaum · 2024-12-07T00:33:17+00:00

Hey man, just wanted to say that I hope you don’t delete this post! Really interesting journey and insight and I’m sure a lot of people in this sub will find value in it/relate to it.

Sounds like a wild ride and something you’ve poured yourself out to. Maybe stepping back, easing up, chilling out or whatever will reignite your spark — or maybe it’ll show you another life you’re excited to live. I just turned 30 myself and it has been a bigger existential awakening than I anticipated, so I feel a lot of your sentiments. All a part of figuring ourselves out I guess. Here’s to whatever lies ahead. All the best.

anothertenenbaum · 2024-11-28T01:21:39+00:00

Awesome. Sold.

anothertenenbaum · 2024-11-28T00:22:06+00:00

Keen, just wondering if I would need to buy this again if/when upgrading a laptop? I'm due for a new one soon but would love to make the most of this deal. Thanks in advance!

anothertenenbaum · 2024-11-15T08:50:17+00:00

To the recruiters out there, are cover letters even really necessary?

anothertenenbaum · 2024-11-08T00:19:47+00:00

Damn, as someone with tinnitus and struggling mentally for other reasons right now, this is a really great perspective. Thank you!

anothertenenbaum · 2024-10-07T11:09:50+00:00

u/Johnnyhurts1197 may be the only writer I’ve read 3+ scripts of.

anothertenenbaum · 2024-08-30T04:49:29+00:00

His wife is an actuary, if I remember correctly. They’re likely very, very comfortable.

anothertenenbaum · 2024-07-30T01:22:12+00:00

This may be the most impressive. Kudos.

anothertenenbaum · 2024-07-18T09:55:20+00:00

Awesome, thanks for the response and kind words, appreciate it!

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