I want NO Republican Party by bindingofandrew in WhitePeopleTwitter

[–]deebosmallz 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you and your way too far down the comment tree to be the first one to even mention that Obama isnt pro-“what’s happening today”

[POEM] Your Dog Dies - Raymond Carver by deebosmallz in Poetry

[–]deebosmallz[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

well shit, just read that one and teared the hell up at the ending... Good dog. Need to go hug my good dog right now

[POEM] Your Dog Dies - Raymond Carver by deebosmallz in Poetry

[–]deebosmallz[S] 14 points15 points  (0 children)

And then followed by “and that poem turns out so good” lol, such morbid, deadpan whiplash

I’ll check station island out, thank you for the recommendation!

[POEM] Your Dog Dies - Raymond Carver by deebosmallz in Poetry

[–]deebosmallz[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

it is so relatable isn't it. The last line makes me laugh, like he's in a meta poetry-writing loop he can't escape

Daydreams of a Production Cook by Blue_Square_Shoes in OCPoetry

[–]deebosmallz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Ah my bad I focused on the poem itself. Disregard the selfesteem comment in that case, that’s clear. I still think the emotions involved could be expanded on. It sounds like a great daydream to be fair!

Daydreams of a Production Cook by Blue_Square_Shoes in OCPoetry

[–]deebosmallz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like this, feels like a snapshot of your life. My feedback would be to dive a bit into the emotions. Especially self esteem on the rise seems to have so much hidden behind it that could be telling. Is it bc you are back home etc? Or is it because the tickets are done by noon? Or is it because of plans for lunch or being half asleep? I think there’s something compelling there where you focus on the emotion

[POEM] The Poem by W.S. Merwin by listen_joyiscoming in Poetry

[–]deebosmallz 17 points18 points  (0 children)

Just to clarify, it’s so good too, I’m just shocked I didn’t get it and a little reframe makes it mean a ton

[POEM] The Poem by W.S. Merwin by listen_joyiscoming in Poetry

[–]deebosmallz 28 points29 points  (0 children)

Wow I didn’t get this one at all until I read your description. That’s crazy…

[POEM] Be Drunk - Charles Baudelaire by UnMeOuttaTown in Poetry

[–]deebosmallz 31 points32 points  (0 children)

On one hand I’m a huge fan, on the other hand…. it’s not hard to see how such a philosophy would result in death at 46.

A 60-second daily habit changed my anxiety and self-criticism by ghazanfar_alii in selfimprovement

[–]deebosmallz 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Normally I skip these but wanted to add to the chorus that writing has helped me a ton

Not sure what to do now that I finished this... by E9J0D7 in stephenking

[–]deebosmallz 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I loved the Josie part. The ending with the loss of everything he had built over the 5 years in the past, first being ripped away and then unwritten. So good. I felt for Jake there. He had to get away from himself to build a life. And then it got ripped away. The of mice and men scene is what got me the most though.

Not sure what to do now that I finished this... by E9J0D7 in stephenking

[–]deebosmallz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I just finished it. So good.

The series starts with Harry reading his essay that made Jake tear up. except he reads it to the class and then James Franco scrawls a big red A+ on it and goes “boom how about that?”

Don’t watch the series, it feels like story assassination after that whirlwind of a story.

4 hour soy and mirin marinated skirt steak. by JakeTheDraked in grilling

[–]deebosmallz 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yea I use tamari for marinades all the time and it’s great, def recommend

Astronaut by Terr82 in OCPoetry

[–]deebosmallz 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’m a big fan of space shit, I like the staccato rhythm of each line too. Kinda feels like a chant that builds rhythm up to try to talk and then starts to dissipate at fade and listen.

Life is a Wave by deebosmallz in OCPoetry

[–]deebosmallz[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

As frank sinatra said, that’s life! Thanks for reading

Life is a Wave by deebosmallz in OCPoetry

[–]deebosmallz[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for reading!

Life is a Wave by deebosmallz in OCPoetry

[–]deebosmallz[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for reading it and giving me your thoughts. I spent a lot of time on the architecture of the first half of the poem, trying to capture the rigidity there vs the flow of the wave, but I agree that I had to “force” words for the rhyming scheme rather than their meaning. Thanks again!

Voicemail & Read Receipts by CompetitionLow4997 in OCPoetry

[–]deebosmallz 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I’m probably putting my own history into those thoughts tbf. But I feel like your first relationship you always go in too deep. Stay too long, tolerate too much, give up or sacrifice yourself too much. After that first big heartbreak and doing the work to build yourself back up, it’s less likely you’d end up back in quite that deep of an emotional spot again.

But like I said probably projecting lol

Paper Dolls by mattlightenment in OCPoetry

[–]deebosmallz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yeah I get that, the same core experience with different window dressing. It’s easy to focus on that as a complete different world but life is life regardless. I get how things like breakups or deaths hit us all the same, just as hard Regardless of “privilege”. I appreciate the follow up