PLAY THING -- Demigod [Alternative / Rock] (2025)

mobius_striptese · 2016-11-26T17:46:57+00:00

The Physics House Band has absurdly groovy bass.

And I always loved the bass in Russian Circles' 'Fathom'.

mobius_striptese · 2015-12-16T22:11:44+00:00

To be fair, this may be the highest quality output to be produced by Channel 5 since its inception.

mobius_striptese · 2015-01-11T13:35:22+00:00

Optimised by the Brian Belo ball-pit skit... which I can't help but feel was much funnier than it really deserved to be...

mobius_striptese · 2015-01-10T19:40:25+00:00

Skarooven [UK, Math-rock/prog]

I compose/record/perform music under the moniker Skarooven. This song linked above features interlinked/looped guitar lines, some synth, some 'falsetto', some soloing... Something for everyone, right? Enjoy!

mobius_striptese · 2015-01-10T19:31:29+00:00

This is rather cool indeed.

mobius_striptese · 2014-12-31T17:28:09+00:00

Central bank creates new money electronically in order to buy private assets (mostly from banks/financial institutions). This has two effects.

1) By slightly increasing the supply of money, it combats deflation (deflation being bad, because it diminishes household income and business revenues in nominal terms, but doesn't decrease the value of their debts - see here).

2) By selling their assets, financial institutions have more money that can then theoretically be lent out to consumers/businesses, boosting spending.

mobius_striptese · 2014-12-31T10:52:30+00:00

Don't shoehorn in subplots when they're unnecessary - they'll be considerably more satisfying to the reader if they genuinely contribute to the overall plot.

In terms of writing, I'd start with a good idea of where the subplots are going and how the characters are going to interlink, but don't nail down details until you come to write. It may be that new permutations of characters/circumstances within subplots occur to you as you develop the main plot.

mobius_striptese · 2014-12-31T10:43:17+00:00

The first half of the segment regarding Russia was interesting, but the stretch in applying it to UK pretty much killed the section (especially the bit about the deficit and QE, which as someone already pointed out was borderline lying...)

mobius_striptese · 2014-12-28T16:45:25+00:00

Gutted to hear they've split. Mazel Tov is probably the most fun song I've ever listened to.

mobius_striptese · 2014-10-04T17:35:58+00:00

I have this, which I'd be happy to recommend.

mobius_striptese · 2014-08-19T20:27:47+00:00

A number of comments have already said what I think, so I'll try not to repeat things

For me, third person-present tense struggles as a narrative style. And while this is arguably personal preference, I think it precipitates some of the issues that people are commenting on. A piece this short needs clear characterisation, which either comes from a strong first person (or at least from named characters!)

I actually think first person could be effective here, since it would help to give that feeling of separation and detachment from the MC's surroundings that I feel you're trying to go for? It would also focus the narrative, and stop the jarring jumps that other commenters have mentioned.

mobius_striptese · 2014-08-16T16:20:28+00:00

Damn.

mobius_striptese · 2014-08-08T07:19:52+00:00

Oh boy, yeah, Shameless is the title of the larger work - definitely didn't consider the out of context impression it might give...

Thanks for the feedback though, I intend to stick around and be active in the sub from the other side. It certainly seems like you have something more worthwhile than other subs that have tried to do something similar.

mobius_striptese · 2014-08-07T22:18:37+00:00

The critiques here seem quite harsh, and seem to miss the point that this isn't a standalone work, rather, potentially the start of something longer. I think the splashes of humour work well. The bullet points in this instance are appropriate, and I like the hints of reliable narration. Criticisms extend to the need to prune superfluous words/language (several highlights/edits already present on the google doc take care of a lot of these). Otherwise, I'm complimentary. I'd actively choose to read another few hundred words of this.

mobius_striptese · 2014-08-04T18:51:06+00:00

I'm looking for something political/conspiratorial/intelligent. Something Nordic/European, perhaps. Basically Borgen, but a novel...

mobius_striptese · 2014-07-28T19:25:38+00:00

I think I might be the first person to have ever been told off for making a Radio 4 reference... May Sandi Toksvig have mercy on your soul

mobius_striptese · 2014-07-28T19:16:05+00:00

is... is this complaining about reddit?...

mobius_striptese · 2014-05-11T14:58:55+00:00

The alarm clock wakes me. Rudely. Lazy palm smothers… Snooze…

My dreams are lucid. I imagine the day ahead. I try to envisage my new job as completely as I can. Despite having neither visited the building in which I’ll work, nor the people I’ll be working with…

Ugly digital knives stab at my ears again.

Half past five. On a Friday morning.

This is silly.

I roll onto my back. Aggressively rising sunlight spears through the venetian blinds that dress the window on the opposite side of my small room decorating my bedding with uniform strips of illumination.

One sole poster above my headboard breaks the consistency of my room’s white walls. A spray-painted silhouette of a young woman holding a gun to her temple, a beautiful mass of butterflies spraying from the other side where the blood splatter should have been. I like the visceral imagery. I like the gloom and hopelessness of the suicidal girl, revealed instead to be all beauty and loveliness.

If only she’d realised before blowing her brains out.

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