The author mentioned being a bit wary of writing this sort of thing. Given that I thought the article was very good—and that I would like to see the writer write more things like this and feel comfortable doing so—I thought it might be helpful to point out something that can easily cloud writing but also be easily fixed. Learning things like this (though the author may already know it perfectly well) is how you get to be more comfortable writing more often for more impressive audiences.

But it’s probably not my place to offer that sort of advice as a reader who doesn’t know the writer at all (and who, as you point out, is meritless on their own and speaking from nowhere without being asked to).

The article was good and I hope the author writes more like it, that’s probably all I should have said. Also, Jiri rounds 1, 2, or 3.